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Tyler-the-Brony


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This has promise. There were a couple of typos, and the sentence structure could have been better, but it wasn't too bad. I shall read on.
A like and a fav from me. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by D5ky deleted May 1st, 2013
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Comment posted by Abaddon_Satanas deleted Feb 20th, 2015

Damn, this whole story and ending was just gory and beautiful at the same time.
Favourite and follow, great story!

It was a nice chapter,but as an advice:stop using the word"Twilight"so much,especially at the beginning of the sentence.Change it with"she"or"her",instead of repeating her name so much.

Poor Twilight. :fluttershysad:

Couldn't they have at least considered that she was being controlled? That she never meant to do this?

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