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Dusk Writer

Now the program has been opened, the keyboard pulled from it's sheathe, words are typed and offer (mental) sustenance, a fate I must abide! (Gravemind voice)


When John suddenly finds Luna's cutie mark on the side of both his thighs, a chain of reactions begins that is as far as he knows, irreversible. Are there any other people that are changing? Or is he completely alone in this world?
Luna branch of the 'Five Score Divided by Four' universe. This story deserves a read as it is where this all started.
Credit for cover picture (Night Time) goes to Aeritus91
Collabing with: Total Eclipse of the Sun and Experiencing the Dusk

Chapters (16)
Comments ( 626 )

Love it! Luna though, very creative, I can see where the fear comes in. I am glad you played it out like that! ^^ Luna is definitely a terrifying figure when she is upset, yet caring when necessary. You are amazing.

love the premise so far! please continue with this story :fluttercry:
love how this five score divided by four thing has become a thing recently
update soon plz :fluttershysad:

2507459Ha! I had a free class today in school so I spent the entire hour and thirty minutes writing Chapter Two, so don't worry, it'll probably be done soon.

2507689 i eagerly await it then :D

Haven't read it yet, instant fave and thumb up. I was debating on doing a Luna one, or maybe Shining, but I can't really get my mind into their minds. Hope this is as good as I hope!

Edit: Oh hell, who's the Cashier? Everyone who ever called someone by their pony name was a pony themselves. Uh-oh.

2508940 My friend Sarikano is currently working on the Celestia one. He hasn't posted it yet, but we've been talking :twilightsmile:

2509354 How will the Celestia one work though? Discord killed her, threw her in a volcano while she was half-paralyzed. I can see Cadenza, vaguely.

2509967 I'm not the one writing the Celestia fic, but I'm also not going to spoil it for you. The one writing it is Sarikano.

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Get out of bed, work, come home, read some more fanfictions, play some video games, go to sleep, repeat.


Yeah, good luck with that, Meta.

Denial ain't just a river in Egypt.

I envy this guy >.>...

2518205 :rainbowlaugh: I couldn't help but laugh at your comment! Thanks for that!

Eh, very weird blackout :pinkiecrazy:. You know, that make me wonder if the person turning into Pinkie will have been sane at least once in his/her life.

>>>>"A sudden burning itch at my thigh brings me out of my revelation. I chuckle to myself, "Well, I guess Destiny is Calling for me."

That ONE LINE is the kind of thing that makes me LOVE fanfictions. That was bloody genius, I see so many of what you did there's.:yay::moustache::raritywink:

That gods forsaken cow video just re-awoke long suppressed nightmares. Why, meta why?!:fluttercry::raritydespair::raritycry::raritycry::pinkiesad2::applecry::fluttershbad::pinkiesick::pinkiesad2:

Great job so far. I can't wait to see how powerful this character becomes and how he/she is going to adapt to the real world.

I'm loving this so far, one of the better side stories to five score. Also I would like to apologize about my previous comments to anyone who saw them, especially the author. My anti brony friend stole my ipad when I wasn't looking and can be a big jerk to the fandom sometimes. :pinkiesad2:

2519956 Ah, that would explain why there four or five deleted comments from you lol

2519666 Yeah, I discovered the minecraft version of that first, then this one. I couldn't watch the whole thing :pinkiesick:

i can definitly say that you are keeping up the standard :derpyderp2:
please update soon, im still loving this story....
will we be seeing any other ponies soon? like a friend? or is it going to be a 'lonely' theme?
finally; will there be any interaction with the outside world? cause the other ones don't seem to have much....:twilightsheepish:

2522471 There will be another pony (not gonna say who) and I'm not sure about outside world for a little bit. After all, Luna is a bit of a loner.

Your timeline confuses me a bit.

Destiny is set to have constant updates and DLC for ten years. Nitpicky, but I get lost trying figure it out.

2528306 Well, I don't follow Destiny, but I was just picking something for the future.

This was remarkably easy to find.

2530154 Thank you! To be truthful, I only looked for a little bit, soooooooo yeah.

2530161 No worries, laziness gets us all at times.

great chapter again!
has 'Sarikano' released their story yet? and if so, what is it called? :rainbowhuh:
also, will we see any ponies on the news?
update soon :pinkiehappy:

I can do you one better, here's Luna herself singing it:

Well... this sure is interesting. Be interesting to see how the author pulls this off. I thought Celestia was supposed to have thrown into a volcano? :derpyderp1:

thank for this beautiful chapter
the part with the girl was very beautiful

2530829 That's what I asked! Guess we'll have to wait for the other person to release theirs.

Very nice. The song "Sweet child o mine" came on the radio right as the kid got home, I couldn't help but start crying. :fluttercry:

Um, wasn't Princess Celestia killed? Remember Discord kicking her into the lava filled pit?

Nah, in all honesty, I want to see how you work around that.

2532152 Try following the user Sarikano. He's the one writing the Celestia fic

Did anyone stop reading this at the dream seen to watch Cows & Cows & Cows? Because I did

Well she is the diarch of the giant ball of nuclear fission, and if my memory serves me right that can get hot!:pinkiesmile:

And now I want to watch the movie Hocus Pocus!:yay:

2532152I'm afraid that it won't be anything world breaking. I have a a quick version in the first chapter but the full version later will probably make more sense with the added dialogues from Discord. :raritywink:

I'll try to release the first chapter tomorrow if everything goes as planned.

For those wondering about the reference about Rantanplan, check Lucky Luke :pinkiehappy:.

At last, after twenty-five long years, the Sisters are reunited! (Virtually at least.)

Not gonna lie-I expected a cheap spinoff with complete lack of originality. I was pleasantly surprised. But not completely. I'll try to stay objective here.
First of all, I think you got the pacing just right. Everything is happening at the right moment, but a couple of moments felt... Rushed, squeezed inside just for the hell of it-mare in the moon face, for instance, in my opinion appeared far too early and 'neighbourly chat' was what, one or two lines only? For the most part story is told without dialogues, but when main character talked to this guy it felt not only just forced, but out of place. A bit more of exchange would be great-maybe with some confusion from our hero. Then there is actual response to changes-that dude is as chill as they get. I know, all of us would react differently, but this guy is just "Cutie mark? Hair changes? Bleh, I got new video game". Last but not least, he seems to be having far too many blackouts. Don't overuse it, please. One is good, two is fine, any more means going overboard.

All of that said-DON'T BUCKING DARE QUIT!
Err... Khem. Yeah. I enjoyed this story despite the earlier wall of text I typed. It maybe rough around the edges, but I enjoyed it greatly. So far, the only good story in five score verse aside from the original. Don't let me discourage you-you're awesome and don't let anyone tell you otherwise.

2536885 Lol yeah, I am basically placing myself as the main character, so any reactions within the story are how I would react. As for the conversation with the neighbor, it was meant to be awkward, but I also feel it could have been better. However, I don't plan on quitting just because of little criticism! THAT'S THE COWARD'S WAY OUT!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage: *Cough* Sorry, anyways, thank you for the comment! I appreaciate it :twilightsmile:

No heavy, bad heavy. This is a Non-Coward Writer. Your only allowed to beat up the writers that cop out due to criticism

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