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A human is transported to Equestria by Princess Celestia. She warns the human of her evil father, the creator and God of Equestria, will come to destroy the world he created. It's up to this human and the Mane 6 to defeat an all knowing, all powerful and immortal god. Princess Celestia sends the human off on different adventures to prepare for the upcoming battle. Each chapter reveals more about the character and the plot (no not that kind of plot).

The story starts slow, then picks up around chapter 3. OC X Rainbow Dash. This is my first story. It will never compare to the greatest of fanfics, but will hopefully be enjoyable.

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This is actually ... quite good.Your grammar is fine, better than mine at least. :twilightsmile:

Well, if you're writing this because you lost a bet, then I feel sorry for you. I learned a great lesson not so long ago: never take on any bet ever again. :pinkiecrazy:

But enough about me, I think that this story could become quite good. But you only should continue it if you want, there is no need to force yourself to write. But if you do want to continue: I wish you luck.

I wait eagerly for a second chapter. :pinkiehappy:

P.S.: Don't question your writing, but if you do think it could be improved ... ask for someone to test read it. That is my advice. Also, take my 4 stars of encouragament! :twilightsmile:


Haha! That is some pretty good advice. I will never make a bet again. The only problem is if I am able to keep higher than a 2.5 average rating, I have to continue the story. That was another condition on my bet.

On a side note, thank you for the encouragement and everything else. I'll try not to disappoint you. Let's see what monstrosities I can come up with. :pinkiecrazy:

* Gives 5 stars *

Sometimes being evil pays off. :twilightsmile:
Well, it pays off for me and that's what counts right ... right? :derpyderp1:

Very good. Also nice MW2 reference.

Very good. Also nice MW2 reference.

203761 Haha I knew someone would get the title.

All I have to say about this chapter: :pinkiehappy:

Quote: 'If I had a choice on Earth, I would have totally made days longer so I could get more things done...like graduate college earlier!'
Remind me to give you no unlimited power. :trollestia:

205781 Oh trust me, that's nothing. Don't go digging in my brain, because whatever is seen cannot be unseen :scootangel:

THE HORROR, THE HORROR! Ow, that's my brain. :pinkiecrazy:

Nevermind ... :facehoof:

royal threesome

Wow, this is really good!!
keep it up

"i still suck"
That is a LIE!! You are a good writer. you should write more fics

The tenses at the beginning need to be fixed :twilightoops:

It'd be funny if this turned into a clopfic :rainbowlaugh:

215405 Hey, hey hey...What'd I tell you about readin' my story!? jk lol of course you would say something about that. :rainbowlaugh:

On a side note, you're avatar is very sexy.

215292 awww thank you. That made my day :pinkiesmile:

TheMightyT doesn't appear to be a very good proofreader :fluttercry:

"On a side note, you're avatar is very sexy." - you're is a contraction for you are, the correct word to use here is your
On another side note, of course it's sexy! It's Rainbow Dash! :pinkiehappy: :rainbowhuh:

215501 I'm getting the hint that you want a job as a proof-reader. lol

I proofread for everyone anyway (without being asked to)
I'm sure I'll get around to posting some corrections eventually...

215519 You're like the Chef Ramsey of English. :rainbowlaugh: I love it!

I'm still surprised that you didn't commit suicide from this monstrosity of a fanfic.

215608 Hahhahahaha oh that one. I gave him 5 stars cuz he made me laugh. you have to admit, it was an original idea.


TheMightyT doesn't appear to be a very good proofreader.

Well, ... sorry to disappoint you. :fluttershysad:

217042 Ignore him. He's just trolling. Deep down, he is a sweet guy. I know this cuz he's Canadian. Plus, his avatar is sexy.

I didn't bother correcting any of the spelling or grammar due to the large amounts of pure win :pinkiecrazy:



Okay, you're probably right. Need to search for that anti-troll spray that I have. Where is it? Oh, right here ... .


*Troll be gone*, brought to you by Acme Corporation. :pinkiehappy:

Hmm.. thought the name was a combination of a ghostly dinosaur. But, using the names of two great fighter jets is cool as well. Great work thus far; keep it up! :rainbowdetermined2:

Glad you're okay dude(ette). The story can wait if your health has deteriorated as far as i'm concerned. So there's a bit of turbulence in the sky tonight,huh? :trollestia:Interested to see where you go with this new development. Also, I curious about what you plan to do with the solar sisters; as in an earlier chapter they both seem to like/admire phantom. Anyway, thanks for the update! Much appreciated!

Glad you went from this>:pinkiesick: to this>:pinkiesmile:


238415 Hmmm...To be honest, I haven't given it much thought concerning Celestia and Luna. They do have a major part in future chapters, but right now I'm focused on moving the story along. If you you have a suggestion, I'd love to hear it. I have a broad setup on how the story goes, but I usually write on the spur of the moment. To be honest, I didn't expect to write about Rainbow Dash and Striker until I started writing the chapter. But now, that sub-plot will play into the grand scheme of things.

On a side note, thank you for your concern. I am a lot better now, :pinkiehappy: so I'll be updating like a madman! :pinkiecrazy:

Yes. Tea
Tea solves everything

Please make more stories they are very cool:yay:

really good man keep em comin:duck:

I sent you a message(pm) answering your question. I hope it got throught my connection was poor for a little while. Glad you are on your feet.:moustache:


I can see this chapter was rough at times as you said. A few dialogue and scene transition were what I saw but then again I'm not really qualified to criticize.(seeing as I'm to :scootangel:to post my own story in the works. But man,I needed this chapter so much. I accidentally read some sad fics and they just made the last two days miserable. Thanks for updating. I understand how rough college can be; that and along with work makes it very tricky to find time for fun.:pinkiesad2:

Can't wait for the next update!:pinkiehappy:

Also two down, four to go? or is it six?:trollestia:


If I'm correct the picture you used for this story is Jecht's Final Aeon Form from Final Fantasy X

283316 Yes, you are 100% correct. :twilightsmile:

Waiting for more :)

Wow this is really getting interesting. I love how Phantom got the stuffing scared out of him because of pinkie pie lol.

Ok just to ask, because since I have re read that other chapters as well. Is he the element of love or something like that? I mean even Celestia was falling for him and that doesn't happen much.

203761 so THATS were i recognize this from.:derpytongue2:

stupid amnesia! why u be such a good laxa... oh wait.


You'll just have to wait and find out. :ajsmug: I do have a messed up imagination, so everything is open to debate. Thank you for your comments though. :twilightsmile:

Starbits and socks, huh?:trixieshiftright:

Love the update, looking forward to more.


awsome story make more please:yay:

MOAR :flutterrage:
um, if it's not to much trouble, um .... eep :fluttershyouch:

I laughed like hell. This is going good!

[Initiating "Keep It Going" Dance]

Nice chapter, very funny. Love the socks! :twilightsmile:

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