The world has been thrown into chaos. In a few short hours the human race has ceased to exist. Everyone who was human has now been turned into creature from myth, or for those in the know, a creature from Equestria. With no power or communications things seem to be going from bad to worse.
My name is Jay Bolton and in all of this madness I have one aim. To get home. It shouldn't be too hard to travel nearly two hundred miles across unfamiliar country with no real form of assistance. Right?
Only problem is that this journey also isn't helped by the fact that I’m now a female pegasus who has no idea how to fly.
Chapters (4)
I like this and want to see more!
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2496674 First off thanks for the feed back it's really useful.
I agree with you, I need to slow it down. That's something I'm currently working on in the next chapter. But this is what happens when you post at two in the morning. So hopefully the next chapter will seem less rushed.
2496733 I don't blame you. I would also be honored to be on your homepage, the best source of GB stories on fimfic.
How curious. *clicks the read later button* You have my attention.
It's alright, but the transition from human to pony and the realization that comes with it is too rushed.
2496810 Just to say the next chapter is up.
This is getting pretty good, i am quite interested where this will go.
You need a comma after the word “fuck”. Otherwise, it sounds like he's angrily decrying his work.
What posters? We can’t see them. I’m also not sure it’s a good idea for the main character to address his audience directly.
I’m pretty sure that’s improper comma use. Regardless, it’s awkward. Try ending the sentence at the point of that second comma.
You need a comma after the word "us".
The first part of this sentence needs rewording to make it less confusing.
That's not a question and thus should not end in with a question mark.
Not buying it, humanity does not need to be "saved from itself" and even if it did turning everyone into ponies without their consent or knowledge thus creating widespread panic and destabilizing civilization- all to make way for our new pony overlords- is not the way to do it.
I take it they are keeping the "normal" Equestrian gender ratios?
Buck it, even if I'm not among the fortunate to keep his birth gender, it'd be worth it for an end to weather-based Natural Disasters and even possible asteroid strikes...
2512825 Your right. I put it at a 3:1 gender ration. So its a 50% chance of an gender change..
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50-50 chance of remaining male eh, juuust for fun, lets see what would become of me in your storyverse...
(uses D&D dice roller...)
Male remaining male... D100, 1-50 is male... (electronic clatter.. 15) Ok still got my malebits...
and what tribe would I end up... D12 sounds good, I'll put Earth pony in the middle since dice tend to fall in the middle a lot, and Earth ponies tend to be the slight majority that I've seen in-show...
(1-4 -Unicorn, 5-8 -Earth, 9-12 Pegasus).. (electronic clatter... 8.. see what I mean?)
Eeeyup! one studly Earth Pony, ready to wow the mares...
2514055 I'm now going to mentally portray you as Big Mac from now on. Also I like the dice roll idea for deciding what happens to people.
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Yay! and I am glad you like the idea.
Yeah, I can see this going over REALLY well for Twi and Cad. Great job Tia, clearly you're wisdom incarnate.
and 1. Instant I get my horn to work, I'm blasting whoever took my guy parts away.
2514055 hmm...
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Tall guy? Yellow eyes with red pupils? He went that-a-way, cant miss him!
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2593998 Thanks. I'm currently working on the next chapter but writers block is being a git.
I know where I want the story to go, but I just can't find the words.
2653089 You are accurate in your observation. This is the 'lets get the intro out the way' chapter. Now the story will get some real progression.
The plot thickens! Now it should be more palatable and understandable to the neigh-sayers with the tidbit you dropped about magical backlash wiping out Equestria;
< "we need to save ourselves by keeping these primates from blowing their world to bits in magic-induced insanity!")
<"Um, how do we get them to use magic?! They cant!, they are Humans! )
<"Wellll.... I have a plan...)
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Oh Celestia.
Please don't start to ignore the gender bender issue in the later chapters. I have seen too many fics where the protagonist gets gender-swapped, its mentioned couple of times, and then its forgotten and ignored.
Not, bad, could have been longer but that would have delayed things I guess..
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Thanks for the feedback. And I was tempted to redo half the chapter, mostly just to add stuff in, but my reasoning is just to try and get something out.
Hopefully there won't be as long a gap next time.
ok that pretty good humanity will distory itself butt it's not humanity's fault they just got a raw deal
3062313 That's what I was going for. Humanity is fucked, but it's not something we could avoid. Only an outside force could help.
(clicks read later button) you have piqued my curiosity... I shall read later.... when my internet connection isn't so wonky
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Thanks! Also I feel your connectivity problems, nothing worse than having the Internet act up.
I've finally got around to reading (at 3 AM here in Texas
) and my only complaint is the paceing is all wibblely-wonkey and you seem to be going a mile a second.
Hope it helps
Twilight forgot to mention how the something that Discord was going to do would no doubt be incredibly troublesome, frustrating and hilarious.
I bet the North American contintent is now shaped like him.
DEAD?!
Hello?! Are u here!?
UPDATE!NOW!
I hope this doesn't turn into a conversion bureau ripoff.
Update
Why is it that the unique and interesting ones are the ones that are not finished and pull you into an awesome story only to slap you in the face with not continuing?
Fucking Hell I need more of this gud shit
this person dead as hell probably, or they lost the password to the account