Crusading In Five Easy(ish) Steps

Inspired by the Sisterhooves Social and the latest Apple Family Reunion Apple Bloom comes up with a brilliant idea. She creates an five step obstacle course with various workstations for the Cutie Mark Crusaders to try several things in a short amount of time.

They're bound to get their marks after all of this, right?...Well they should get some cake at least.

I ran the cover art through a reverse image search and it found nothin', so source unknown.

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CanterlotGuardian

CanterlotGuardian #1 · Apr 27th, 2013 · · ·

the first thing I see is Giant Paragraph(s) O'Doom. break the big ones up into little ones, and it'll go a long way. also, you might want to consider double-spacing between dialogue sentences, as it creates a Wall O'Text illusion that will turn some ponies off. once you get past that, though, it's a rather enjoyable story, though I might be biased as I love just about every CMC-centric story.

Dasponi

Dasponi #2 · Apr 27th, 2013 · · ·

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Confound those walls o text, they drive me to drink I'll see if I can't quickly spruce it up a bit. Hmm..double spacing conversations...can't believe I never thought of that. But thank you

Hobbestc

Hobbestc #3 · Apr 27th, 2013 · · ·

“This really is delicious.” Apple Bloom said, her mouth full of cake frosting.

Cute story, but this kinda confused me. Where'd the frosting come from? You can't bake frosting, you gotta put it on once the cakes baked and then cooled.

Dasponi

Dasponi #4 · Apr 27th, 2013 · · ·

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Good point Thanks

twilightsparkle13

twilightsparkle13 #5 · Apr 27th, 2013 · · ·

all i can say is, great job, another wonderful story

star1wars3

star1wars3 #6 · Apr 27th, 2013 · · ·

Fun story and I think there's something wrong with this

and had just three for until not too long ago.

but I'm not sure what.

Dasponi

Dasponi #7 · Apr 28th, 2013 · · ·

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Thank you

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When you put it like that it does sound off Lemme go fix that It's supposed to be a reference to them only having three members until Babs Seed turned up recently.