The mane character (See what I did there again?) is Wood Wind (Human Pegasis) . Her best friends are Time Loop (Human Unicorn), Treble Clef (Human Unicorn). Wood Wind's sisters are Frost (Human Pegasis) and Rainbow Dash. I hope y'all like it :P
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Good story, but a lot of mistakes to edit
NEW SPEAKER NEW PARAGRAPH
*Pegasus
The comma in between "Time Loop" and "Treble Clef" should be replaced with an "and".
And also, what the heck is a human unicorn?
2494735 Now, now, let's calm down. This is obviously his/her first fic.
Let's give him/her sometime, and he'll/she'll learn from his mistakes.
@riptid3 It's like a wizard. And yes, I suck a spelling
Wall of text.
It's not readable at all, you need to correct this first.
The Alicorn Amulet?
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Oh no...
~the one person who gave this story a like
Hey, my first fics were also pretty nasty
I'm going to like this fic for your effort put into it 
2496264 my first fic was handwritten and I can only read every other word. I did about 2 paragraphs for the entire story.
Hey, it's me! Jo best friend!!! (Not going to say my name, privacy reasons
) This is really good for your first fic! JUst one thing (I hate to do this to you)......... Well, there were some grammar issues, like indenting paragraphs, and stuff likes that. Please don't hate me now!!!! 
Anyways, awesome story!!!! Keep going..... PLEASE!!!! I've been begging you to go on this site for like ever now, and I don't want you to stop because of what people are saying. 
See you tomorrow!!!!
You need an editor