I am rewriting my story "Grip of Nature" and currently the first half is done. I am terrible at editing so if anyone wants to take a look that would be great. Here's the link. Tell me anything you think I need to fix. (Spoilers if you haven't read the first chapter)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1dvyLRXY8VcqSUOxbxneAv2WQ30SNjJq44dofxe1_aMM/edit?usp=sharing

I'm going to rewrite the entire story. It will be mostly the same with a few key differences. The reason I am doing this is because I more or less wrote my self into a corner and this is the only way to fix it.