I had decided to attempt to expand my writing styles to 3rd person story. The story is basically about my ideal way for MLP FIM Season 4 EP 26 should have ended. Naturally as an writer, I am open for criticism, and would more of anything like help finding out my grammar errors. I had been using Microsoft Word to correct most grammatical errors, and I am not too keen in grammar enough to see what my problems are.
I dunno if link works or not, but I can always PM the story
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/254486/the-key-of-magic-an-alternate-story-of-discord