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Present tense is strange.
Do you have a reason for that?

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She breathes out as the wind whipps past her face.
whips

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She let’s go, facing away from me again. “You were too young then.”

Not sure about the let's go part.
There is a better way to say that.

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Everything else looks fine though there might be folks with better editing skills.