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TClan: Adventures In Another World
MLP Gen 5
Adventure
Slice of Life
Hitch leaves his home of Maretime Bay to help his son.
Violence
Profanity
Crossover
OC
Hitch Trailblazer
Sparky
Snugglewarmscale · 8.6k words · 90 views
TAvenge me!
MLP: FiM
Drama
Random
Tragedy
After the death of Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash swore to get revenge on the pony responsible for the crime
Violence
Death
Second Person
Rainbow Dash
Pinkie
Starlight Glimmer
Anonymous15 · 9.6k words · 8 11 · 271 views
EEclipse Awareness (Or Lack Thereof)
MLP: FiM
Comedy
Slice of Life
Following Twilight's coronation, Celestia and Luna organize a mutual solar eclipse to celebrate the end of their rule. Unfortunately, they forgot to let anypony know of this.
Twilight
Celestia
Luna
6-D Pegasus · 4.3k words · 127 3 · 1k views
EDiamond at a Crossroads
MLP: FiM
Sad
Slice of Life
(Takes place within the universe of "The Sitter with the Diamond Tiara" and its semi-sequel "A Dazzling School Daze".) Plagued by uncertainty about her future, Diamond Tiara visits Cheerilee in hopes the teacher can guide her one last time.
Diamond Tiara
Cheerilee
SuperPinkBrony12 · 2.9k words · 13 0 · 105 views
EAurora By The Sea
MLP Gen 5
Romance
Primrose remembers the very first date her and her husband went on.
Other
Hitch Trailblazer
Sparky
Snugglewarmscale · 12k words · 88 views
EA Wild Date
MLP Gen 5
Romance
Comedy
Slice of Life
Visiting your crush’s parents is rather an experience. Especially on a date
OC
Other
Lulamoon-Crystal · 14k words · 11 0 · 260 views
EThe Tale of Spike's Egg
MLP: FiM
Sad
Slice of Life
Tragedy
(Collab with yodajax10. Takes place immediately after "Father Knows Beast".) Spike flies to Canterlot to ask Princess Celestia for answers about his past. Princess Celestia opts to tell Spike about how his egg ended up in her care.
Spike
Celestia
OC
Other
Main 6
SuperPinkBrony12 · 9.4k words · 24 0 · 566 views
EDON'T WRITE TO PRINCESS CELESTIA AT 3 AM (GONE WRONG!)
MLP: FiM
Comedy
Random
Slice of Life
The Cutie Mark Crusaders test the urban legend of writing to Princess Celestia at 3am. Nothing goes wrong.
Spike
Celestia
CMCs
6-D Pegasus · 2.7k words · 216 2 · 2.4k views
TThe Malevolent Multiversal Misadventures of Mare (April Fools 2024 Special)
MLP: FiM
MLP Gen 5
Adventure
Comedy
Random
Once upon a time, there was a random pony in Ponyville. When a villain shows up, this overpowered Mary Sue of a character must venture bëÿönd Extria im order to find thr Generic MacGuffin. Only then will she have a chef of defeating this boring villa
Violence
Crossover
Alt. Universe
Twilight
OC
Other
Bat Pony
Misty
Admiral Producer · 32k words · 17 1 · 111 views
EOne of Them
MLP: FiM
Drama
Slice of Life
When a setback made Starlight Glimmer seriously consider if she might be undeserving of friends, Spike had an important talk with her.
Spike
Main 6
Starlight Glimmer
ThePinkedWonder · 2.9k words · 34 1 · 438 views
EThe Long Wait
MLP: FiM
Sad
Celestia counts down the centuries until her sister's return.
Celestia
6-D Pegasus · 1.7k words · 92 1 · 905 views
TBatmare and Super Dragon: Worlds Collide
MLP: FiM
Drama
Thriller
(A crossover sequel to both "Batmare Triumphant" and "Dragon of Steel II".) The worlds of two costumed superheros: Batmare and Super Dragon, become intertwined. And the two heroes must adjust to their shared universe quickly.
Violence
Crossover
Alt. Universe
Twilight
Applejack
Spike
Other
SuperPinkBrony12 · 17k words · 99 views
EBlues Clues: Happy Easter Blue!
Equestria Girls
Comedy
Slice of Life
Spike, Inferno, Rarity and Sunset all need to play Blues Clues to figure what Blue's favorite thing to do for Easter!
Crossover
Human
Other
Sunset Shimmer
Rarity (EqG)
Spike (EqG)
Big Imagination E · 5k words · 5 8 · 131 views
EFlurry Of the Royal Guard
MLP: FiM
Slice of Life
Flurry Heart is looking for her purpose in life. Her parents have some concerns about her latest idea though.
Alt. Universe
Twilight
Cadance
Shining Armor
Flurry Heart
Mystic Sunrise · 1.2k words · 44 3 · 504 views
ERarity's Magical Boutique
MLP: FiM
Comedy
Slice of Life
(Based on "Rarity Catches a Cold" on YouTube by Magpiepony.) Rarity becomes sick while trying to finish up an order, and is forced to stop working. However, her illness causes parts of her workshop to magically come to life and work on the dress.
Rarity
SuperPinkBrony12 · 1.6k words · 15 0 · 131 views
TA Talk With A Bully
MLP: FiM
Mystery
Sad
Slice of Life
After the CMC come home with black eyes, Applejack, Rainbow Dash and Rarity take it upon themselves to find out what happened.
Narcotics
Violence
Profanity
Alt. Universe
Rainbow Dash
Applejack
Rarity
Diamond Tiara
CMCs
Artist · 3.5k words · 22 20 · 472 views
TNo, I Don't Want to Face Overwhelming Odds (I Just Want to Sleep)
MLP: FiM
Adventure
Comedy
Thriller
A band known as Underlord performs a series of black magic rituals in the form of rock concerts in an attempt to summon a primordial deity. Pink Scorch will stop them for $6.50.
Violence
Death
Profanity
OC
Power Ponies
Muggonny · 13k words · 26 0 · 222 views
EUnforgiven
MLP Gen 5
Slice of Life
Sparky has been hurt. His father takes him Some place safe.
OC
Hitch Trailblazer
Mane 5
Sparky
Snugglewarmscale · 1.8k words · 209 views
EThe Sad Story of Spike
MLP: FiM
MLP Gen 5
Sad
Slice of Life
Tragedy
After the defeat of Opaline, Sunny pays another visit to the dragon lands. She has a few questions for Spike about how he became dragon lord and left Twilight all those years ago. Spike reluctantly agrees to explain everything he can.
Twilight
Spike
Sunny Starscout
Opaline
SuperPinkBrony12 · 4.9k words · 43 1 · 1.2k views
ETricky Twins
MLP Gen 5
Comedy
Slice of Life
Two cheeky fillies break into the Zephyr Heights palace. Oh no!
OC
Queen Haven
Thunder
Zoom
Lulamoon-Crystal · 4.2k words · 184 views
TiSpy
Equestria Girls
Dark
Slice of Life
Thriller
Twilight is a fascinating person, and anyone who knows her would naturally be curious to get a closer look at what makes a girl like her tick: likes, dislikes, habits, and interests. But how close is too close? Will you cross the line?
Human
Micro Chips
Sci-Twi
Timber Spruce
SwordTune · 1.4k words · 12 0 · 191 views
ETwilight Learns How to Ice-Skate
MLP: FiM
Romance
Slice of Life
Twilight wants to learn how to ice-skate to impress Flash.
Twilight
Pinkie
Other
Main 6
Flash Sentry
Heroic412227 · 4.3k words · 12 2 · 339 views
EHow Does It Not Bother You?
MLP: Comic
MLP Gen 5
Drama
Sad
Slice of Life
Following the events of “Swirlpool Starlight,” Misty is feeling more conflicted about her past being brought to the surface than ever. Fortunately, one pony may be able to help her see the bright side to it all….
Misty
Violette Rainbow
Admiral Producer · 1.9k words · 21 2 · 333 views
EHome is Where the Horn Is
MLP Gen 5
Sad
Slice of Life
Comet has a talk with his fellow unicorns Izzy and Misty about home as he tries to adjust to life in Maretime Bay. Izzy and Misty, in turn, share their thoughts based on their experiences.
Other
Izzy Moonbow
Alphabittle
Opaline
Misty
SuperPinkBrony12 · 5.2k words · 14 1 · 313 views

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