i need some one or this community to collaborate, comment and help flush out a story i wrote out a year ago while sleep deprived i made sense of most of it but need an expert(s) to help me flush this out any time you have is appreciated thank you.

there is no pressure. i just need help with the following.

one clean up. making things readable to other readers under the fact forgive my wording i wrote it i can understand it oh wait you're not in my head problem.

pour understanding of punctuation. sure i understand basic but it seems there's more complex things when trying to write a story especially with partying dialogue and such.

the mess that's over a year old