(So yea I mentioned it’s a practice story…PLEASE TELL ME WHAT I NEED FIXED! Or what you want to see :D! I didn’t plan out the storyline and I’m just going off of what I think would be cool. So any suggestions would be lovely! And you know the times when I abused the ‘Author’ thing? Well I’ve got over that. Now I’m trying to be a complete cornflake breaker and break these cornflakes with my terrible humor that ‘I can totally abuse the humor factor since I control the story’ factor. C:< So what you say want me to…Make them have sex? Cole and Dash? I was planning on keeping it awkward for comic relief but if you guys ask then I will make that possible ;) )
Author: Ok just so you guys know I’m treating the nanotech inside Cole like an entertainment system like iPods or laptops or computers or game systems. Just so you guys don’t think that’s weird I will now convince you as to why that would make sense in the future :)
Explanation: Well you notice in this past century that the entertainment systems become more and more mobile. DS, PSP, ect. EVEN PHONES! Phones now carry apps and games. Entertainment became more and more important as time went on IN ONLY A FEW YEARS! So just think about how important they are now 1000 years or whatever in the future! So it would make sense that a military unit (Of the future) would allow entertainment to be downloaded onto equipment. (Lets face it an engineer would love to listen to music in his head while fixing a ship no? Nanobots allow you to do that ^^)
Anyway you guys will get more commentary out of me from now on. The last few chapters were for trying to adjust to any style of writing. How do you like it so far? It’s not professional but it’s awesome.
I will now SHIT all over this story to make it the must ugly yet understandable format I can possibly think of…Without breaking too far from habit :D
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Cole started making the essentials for storage. He guessed he wouldn’t need a full armor suit and he doesn’t exactly feel comfortable using the ‘pony’ bathrooms since the toilet seats were low to the ground. Cole converts all his waste into swarm, and that means he will need to spread these nanobots out so that they don’t pollute the air so much that they make it toxic. He needed storage units for the swarm, or he could spread them throughout Equestria; giving him some serious control over the world.
Though at the moment…An intense game of hybrid battleship was a neat idea to try out. Rainbow gave Cole more specifics about the game Weather Patrol and Cole added his insight on space. Eventually they ended up with a version of battleship that he had in his dream. Regardless of the fact they invented it together Rainbow still had a problem with getting used to RTS games. So they developed it to be turn based.
Rainbow had better luck with this turn based game that they developed. They took a few hours but Rainbow seemed all right with wasting time to make a fairer and more even game for the two of them to play. But the whole time they were making this new game Cole was spreading the swarm around Ponyville. He wanted to make sure that he could have a reasonable amount to fight with if ever he needed it, so the obvious decision was to put it everywhere! A suit of armor isn’t exactly how you become friends with ponies who’ve never seen your species before. If anything they would fear him and try to attack him or run away to a new town. Cole decided to masturbate in front of Rainbow and she was getting jelly so she joined him and they started fucking the rest of the night…Ok that didn’t really happen but like I said I have the power of ‘Author’.
Author: Yea I’m going to shove my shenanigans down your throats this chapter. I will keep to the storyline though. (Warning I will fuck your experience of this storyline!)
“Yo Cole?”
“Hmm?”
“What’s it like eating meat? I mean I’ve never really asked my friend Gilda what it tasted like but I just wondered since you’re a…Omni-bor?”
“Close but no it’s omnivore. And well…so good you know? It’s like eating plants only the meat is at times harder to chew. It’s just a difference in texture and flavor. I don’t know if you’ll like the texture since you are used to eating plants. You can try my meat however! I would love to cut off an arm to see a horse try to eat it.”
“EEEEEEEEEEEEEW. NO! Wait aren’t you afraid of pain? Or you won’t be able to grow it back?”
“Well since I have technology on my side I can re-grow it with ease.”
“Umm…You’re going to let me eat your arm?”
“Well maybe a finger. Or my blood. I don’t need that anymore since the swarm can now take over its functions since I’m at full potential.”
“Wait you don’t need blood anymore?”
“Yea want to drink some?”
“NO! Why do you insist on me drinking it? Well actually I know why but really?” She crosses her hooves.
(FIVE MINUTE RUSH GO!)
“Yea so hey lets get back to this game ok?”
“Sure.”
“Ok I think its done. Want something to drink while I win?”
“No I’ll be wining!” She said confidently.
“You sure about that?” Said Cole with evil glare.
“Yea!”
“Ok what do you want?” Cole goes over to the fridge where he pulls out some glasses and punch. ‘hmm this punch is…red…OH YEA I’M GOING TO DO IT!’ “Hey Rainbow? What’s this red punch?”
“Oh it’s strawberry.”
“Want some?”
“Sure.”
‘Fuck yes; everything is going according to plan.’ Cole bends down to pick up the strawberry punch container (container?) and he quickly takes a glass and cuts his arm over it. Emptying some precious life giving fluids into a glass. He makes sure there isn’t too much. (Five minutes up) He doesn’t want Rainbow to become ill from it and he was sure just a little blood would do that. So he made it so that he only bleeds a little bit so it was safe enough for her to drink. (In his opinion) His wound sealed up really quick because of the presence of swarm. He brought the strawberry punch up on the counter and started pouring some punch into the one with blood first. Then his own.
“Here Dash.” She took the rigged drink. ‘MWAHAHAHHAHAAHAHA’
Cole started his first move on their home made RTS game and they were able to create. He brings ends his turn without doing anything so he can get an econ boost from the tier 2 Station. He then waited for Dash who immediately made fighters on her side of the fog of war. She saw her pick up the cup of punch and could hear a faint ‘ew what is this?’ on the other side of the RTS cloud. Then silence…Only to be broken by.
“COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLE!”
“Problem?”
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“Turn out the light.” Rainbow Dash said annoyed the next morning waking up in a drunken haze. She didn’t trust Cole with her drinks last night. She decided on going to the fridge and throwing out all the punch while Cole literally started rolling around on the floor laughing. She was forced to drink hard cider for the rest of the night.
“But I can’t control the window love.” Said Cole as he lay in the bed next to Rainbow…Almost completely naked except for his underwear.
“Yea yea yea. Just put a cloud in front of it.” She said lazily before realizing she could feel Cole’s skin up against her body. At first she felt like jumping up and zooming out. Only to be stopped by the strange amount of comfort she felt when nuzzling next to him. She subtly leans back into him and rests her head on his arm.
“Rainbow are you feeling ok?” ‘This isn’t going according to plan.’ O_o
“Yea *sigh*” She finds a comfortable position and she falls back to sleep. ‘Oh know what…This is too cute to start trolling again…Fine you win Rainbow Dash. You win.’
Cole forms a new shirt over himself and pulls Rainbow in for a nice few minutes of rest. Then after about an hour or so Rainbow lifted her head and looked around the room. Cole had washed the dishes and cleaned up the house while Rainbow lay knocked out in her bed. She looked at the window which was blocked by a cloud. She saw the time by the angle of the sun hitting it though and realized she slept in a bit late. The weather patrol didn’t need her today because she still couldn’t fly. For the time being she was pretty much stuck on the Cloud with this human. She was starting to get up before a hand came up and pulled her back to bed.
“Hey Rainbow easy you had a rough night.” Said Cole a little more caring than usual.
Rainbow blushed and said “What happened last night…Exactly?” She was afraid of what he might say next. He was in his skivvies.
“Well you started drinking hard cider after I spiked the punch with blood. I admit it was pretty funny talken’ to Rainbow Woozy for a while. You even tried to let me win at our game. Eventually you passed out on your turn and I carried you into bed.”
“Y-you carried me into bed?”
“Yea.”
“Where you next to me the whole night?” She said blushing a darker pink.
Author: I’m getting used to writing ‘blushing’ so if it gets repetitive -.-
“No I was going to prank you this morning by waking up next to you. I swear I was on that cloud over there the entire night.” Cole points to a cloud that he brought into the house that was his size. He even found a towel from the closet to wrap himself in.
“Oh…Wait a prank?”
“I was going to make it seem like we had sex during the night to inspire another awkward moment!”
“Another awk---YOU WERE DOING THAT ON PURPOSE!”
‘shit’ “Well yea sorry. I understood the first few times but after a while of doing it accidently I thought it was becoming really funny that you were really sexually insecure. Soooo I decided to make it weird.” He said truthfully.
“Wait…I’m not sexually insecure!” Now deep red.
“The dark red of your face tells me otherwise. Waking up next to a creature that seems to like physical contact way to much?”
“Oh…I just…hate you right now.” She gives him a ‘going to kill you’ glare. But then Cole brings her in for a very close hug and that rage seems to disappear remarkably quick. ‘I think she likes me’ “Cole don’t let go…” ‘yea she likes me. “Cuz when I get enough room to move my hooves one will go right up your ass.”
“Oh…Well ok I won’t let go then.”
“Good.” Then unexpectedly Rainbow buries herself into Cole’s chest and sighs comfortably.
It was a few minutes later that Cole gets up slowly. Rainbow didn’t punt him across the room and she went to the fridge to get some breakfast and some punch; only to realize she threw it all out. She gives a glare at Cole and he takes the hint.
“Umm…I’ll go get you the groceries. Where is your money? I don’t got none.”
“Over there in the second dour.” She points to the kitchen. ‘she keeps money in the kitchen? Well I guess there isn’t a bank.’ Cole thought to himself when he saw the kitchen dour was full of bits. He took 1/4th of them not knowing how much he would need.
“Hey Rainbow how much do you make each payday?”
“Like 35 bits each day. Why you ask?”
“So I know how much I don’t want to use up. Better know how currency is earned before spent.”
Cole goes to the edge of the Cloud and his armored suit starts to appear on him again. Though he kept his helmet off so he didn’t seem as intimidating.
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Cole walks the streets of Ponyville being greeted by stares and occasionally somepony walking up to him and saying ‘what are you?’. He ignored everything except questions. He looked around the town and found many stores. He walked inside a few and looked around. They didn’t sell food but many different selections of products. Cole didn’t think it was possible for ponies to have many types of hair products and just in general as many consumer items as humans can; but sure enough he saw products he couldn’t even identify. After a few hours of searching he came across what he believed was a farmers market. He went to the local venders and found some fruits and vegetables. Even though this was a nice thing to know he was still looking for punch and other drinks. He eventually came across an orange country pony he recognized from the hospital. But thanks to his and pinkies loud mouths and their synchronized distractions he never really got to ask who’s who. (And the Author completely forgot about it) Cole walks over to the orange pony.
“Sup!” Ponies start to stare.
“Oh hey it’s you! How’s Rainbow?”
“Doin’ fine. You know where I can buy punch? We ran out and since she can’t fly I had to go get some for her.”
“Now hold up! Ya’ll can’t fly neither!”
“Really?” Cole extends the jet wings hidden on his back and he jumps into the air at 100mph. Then he swings back and lands in front of the apple stand and makes the earth shake. Everypony went at least a foot in the air. It was followed by staring and whispers of the crowd.
“My name is John Cole of the Trinity. May I have the honor of knowing thy name?” Cole bows. (ERA CHANGE OOOOOOOOOH SHIT!)
“Wha’? How’d ya do that!”
“Names first miss.”
“Applejack. Now tell me how ya did that flying! That was the most impressive thing I ever did see!”
“Well I have technology. Frankly anyone can do it if they have my suit. Anyway I need to find punch. Or some drinks of any kind.”
“Well you can get some cider if ya’ll hankering for some. I sell that only we’re out at the moment. Maybe I can ask Granny Smith if she be willen’ te do a special order of cider.”
“That’d be nice! But do you know of a less time consuming alternative?”
“Well I aint’ sure. Ya’ll better go down to Sugarcube Corner and pick up some. They aint got premade punch but they give out but they got dem doohickeys that carry the punch stuff in em.”
“Oh ok point me in the direction.” Applejack raises her hoof in the direction of sugarcube corner. It was visible from where they were. “Thanks Applejack. I’ll let Rainbow know you offered to make cider for her.”
“Don’t you want cider too?”
“Thad be nice. Though I prefer water at the moment. I’m not sure what kind of diseases any liquids might have. Or even what ponies would be carrying. I mean this is a new world to me.”
“Umm…Ok sugar cube maybe ya’ll better be goin’.” She said as she finally notices how much attention Cole is attracting.
“Well all right. Have a nice day applejack.”
As Cole walks off some ponies start to follow him. Discreetly of course but they were still following him. When Cole reached sugarcube corner he noticed how many ponies actually wanted to see what he was up to. There were twenty ponies following him. Twenty isn’t that much but in a small town like Ponyville that’s impressive. When Cole went inside some of the group were daring enough to go in after him. Though not all thought it was a good idea to go into the same building all at once. Twenty ponies coming into the store not wanting to buy anything was way more suspicious than…It was suspicious…
“COLE?” Said a cheery hyperactive voice.
“PINKIE?” Said Cole in an almost equally yet not so hyperactive cheery voice.
Pinkie rushed out of the kitchen and jumped into Cole’s arms. Cole had no idea what she was doing but managed not to drop her when her body slammed into his chest.
“Cole want me to throw you a party! WE CAN HAVE A WELCOME TO PONYVILLE PARTY AND A WELCOME TO EQUESTRIA PARTY! You know cuz you can’t be from Equestria if you’re well whatever you come from!”
“Earth.”
“WELCOME TO EQUESTRIA CREATURE FROM EARTH PARTY! WOOOOO!”
“Hey pinks! Got any punch for me to bring back to Rainbow? She sent me out to get some while she needs rest. She got so thirsty she drank hard cider and now has a serious hang over. Was so funny!”
“She’s hung over? Pfft light weight. Sure we got some punch. Here I’ll go get you a few jugs of it!” She rushes into the kitchen
“Light weight? Did you beat her in a drinking contest?”
“Yea ten to six!” Said pinkie who stuck her head out of the kitchen then brings it back in and runs over to the fridge.
“W-wow…Light weight. I’m going to bug her about it for the rest of the day. Well after I extract any toxins from the alcohol out of her system. Know what that should have been my first goal when she woke up.”
“Here ya go!” She said with a water jug full of punch.
“Oh wow…No idea they made these! Thanks Pinkie! And I’ll look forward to a party.” Cole takes the jug with one hand and gives a side hug to Pinkie with the other. He turns around toward the door and notices the group of ponies who followed him in. There were about 14.
“Ok guys what do you want?” Said Cole to the group of ponies that looked back and fourth to one another. Cole didn’t really want to deal with this right now. He had what he came for and wanted to go back home. Though he was also conflicted with the need to integrate. ‘Rainbow doesn’t need it now right?’
“Hey guys I’ve gotta be some where. But if you want to ask anything real quick I don’t mind.”
One spoke up. “What are you doing here?”
“Well I don’t have a purpose. I accidently ended up here and I’m worken’ on a way to get back. I shouldn’t be here too long, though I’ll try to abstain from researching a way out too soon. So far I’m having so much fun with these friendly faces!” Cole looks back at Pinkie and gives a wave. She waves back.
Another ones turn. “Do you eat ponies?”
“I’d be lying if I said no.” Gasps could be heard around the room. “But I promise you that no one has to worry about me. I’m an omnivore I eat plants too.” Murmurs where going around the room. Obviously because he can eat ponies. “Anyway I’ve got to go take care of Rainbow. She asked me to do her groceries while she’s healin’ and we ran out of punch.” Cole teleported out of there back to Rainbow’s. Walking out may have proved stressful for the ponies who may have become afraid of him after that little reveal. The pony eating creature walking toward them would have ruined his reputation with some very quick as their nerves would have made them scream or run.
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Rainbow Dash was lying in her bed still. She seemed just like every other drunk who woke up the next morning. In pain. ‘I thought she was able to move last time I was here.’
“Yo Rainbow you ok?”
“…no.” She said as the migraine seemed to be setting in. ‘She might have suppressed it the best she could to look strong in front of me.’
“I got a jug of punch. Want som-“
“Shh…”
“okay.” Said Cole in a hushed tone.
Cole put down the jug next to the fridge seeing that it wouldn’t fit inside of it. He knew he could heal Rainbow’s migraine with the swarm but she needs to agree to physical contact and…sharing of a certain crimson liquid. Then again he knew she did drink some of his blood so a small amount of nanobots should be inside her…small amount.
“Hey Rainbow?” Cole said hushed.
She made a groan in response.
“I can help get rid of that.”
“…please.” She said almost in the most adorable pleading voice.
Cole approaches Rainbow and he lies next to her in bed. He grabs hold of her head and he lens into her.
“what?” she said again hushed.
“Shh.” Cole puts his mouth up to her forehead and pushes his lips up against it with the objections of Rainbow. The nanobots started to carve into her head and started to make her bleed, which made her feel uncomfortable. She didn’t notice she was bleeding because Cole was pushing his head up against her head. But after a few seconds of the painful pushing of Cole’s lips into Rainbow’s skull the pain around that spot started to go away and spread around that spot, making the pain begin to subside she started to feel normal again.
Rainbow makes a pleasing ‘hmmm’ noise and Cole pulls away from her forehead.
Cole looks back at her forehead where a drop of blood was spreading around. “Hey Rainbow. That came at a small cost.” He touches her forehead and pulls his hand away showing her the blood.
“WHAT?!” She said loudly in his ear. She rushes over to the mirror and sees the small cut that begins to close up. She cleans it and it looked as if it was never there. She looks back at Cole and says. “How’d you do that?”
Cole smiles and responds “You taste like pennies!”
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Author: So yea what you think? Yea I did comment throughout the chapter. Yea I did make a sexual reference that I will now go edit my story to include that to reasons why it’s teen. Yea I did forget Rainbow was supposed to have a serious hangover. Yea I am lazy and I at times stop writing because I get bored.
YEA I DID BUILD THIS CHAPTER TO BE HEAVILY BASED ON INTERACTION WITH YOU! Fun right? :D If you don’t agree with that then comment and I’ll stop :)
In the end NOT BAD! I loved this chapter…kinda. But I liked how I changed up my style a bit so it started to make it easier to read.
Just a Q: Do you want me to put the names of the people talking in front with their actions THEN the dialog? (When necessary) Or do you just want me to continue experimenting with my writing until I finish the story…And you not help me at all :”(