//------------------------------// // Outline [Warning, rough/unedited] // Story: I Put a Spell On You // by cleverpun //------------------------------// Loyalty and royalty, faustian filly, Dash's Deal with the Devil, fear folly fatal Distressing Dreams traitorous thoughts (odd name out amid PP pattern?) terrible transformation promises pictures- dreams placebos process progress a p. permutation Give Me All Your Love I put a spell on you / because youre mine / You better stop the thing that you do I said, "Watch out, I ain't lyin'", yeah I ain't gonna take none of your, foolin' around I ain't gonna take none of your, puttin' me down I put a spell on you because you're mine, all right SYNOPSES CHrysalis/one of her agents goes to ponyville to turn the main 6 into changelings? transormation/light mind rape? After her forces were devestated at the battle of canterlot castle, Queen Chrysalis knew she had to replace the servants she had lost. But she would never be able to take Canterlot as long as the elements of harmony and love protected it. So she decided to kill two parasprites with one stone - she could grow her army and disrupt the elements at the same time. All she needed was one of her transformative cocoons, a little bit of mind magic, and a moment of weakness from one of the Keepers of the Elements. She already had the first two, and her experiences told her the last might lie in Rainbow Dash... Will Dash sucuumb to Queen Chrysalis' horrible plan? And if she does, will her friends be able to undo the damage? After having her latest application to join the wonderbolts rejected... again, Dash starts to become worried that she isn't as great as she thinks she is. After all the things she's done, the wonderbolts still won't accept her... But when a mysterious pony offers her the ability to do magic, Dash has to make a decision... After being told to stop sending applications to the wonderbolts by their manager, Rainbow decides to train harder than ever to realize her dream. She's already so good, however, that her training rapidly becomes ineffective. When a pony offers to cast a spell on her that could make her better, Dash initially refuses. But as she continues to train to little effect she begins to reconsider the unicorn's offer... But is it that simple, or is there greater malevolence at work behind the mare's offer? CH1; after dash trains, cut to queenie spying on her, then follow her back to lyras house, where a hypnotized lyra greets her as "queen chrysalis" and asks how her plans are going for the first time since Ive been here, I think I may have a breakthrough... CH 2; Dash had been training every day for a week now, and it wasnt doing any good. Her wingpower was still the same, her endurance hadn't really increased, and accuracy was acceptable but unchanged. Anemometer Queenie senses this as the time to strike, and confronts dash after her latest workout. (we met at Queen C-... I mean Princess Cadence's wedding, remember?) Dash is both suspicious and skeptical, but when queenie writes down her address dash is about to throw it away... but decides not to. Dash helps somepony do... something, and when her athleticism falters temporarily durring the chore she panics, taking -pony's- reassurances as a personal attack, or pity. she hastily apologizes then leaves. Ch 3? After she returns to her house, Queenie uses her mind powers to give dash a bizarre nightmare, where she ch. 4 upon waking up in the morning, dash cant get the dream out of her mind. she works out, pushing herself harder than she ever has, but to no avail. after missing yet another target and crashing into a bush (nearby sport, the ponies make fun of her? chrysalis' fault?) she finally caves in and runs to Lyras house. Queenie, still stalking her, senses her intentions and rushes ahead of her, knowing she has finally broken at lyras, queenie casts a spell on dash, and instructs her to go home and sleep/nap. Waking up, her dreams having been full of mysterious winged fiures, she goes to (finish her) workout as usual, and feels so much more... powerful than usual (placebo, psychosomatic, or real changes?) Wing power number (higher, higher but only in her head, same but feels easier)? other pony notices minty glow in her eyes, dash looks in mirror but doesnt notice? -> chekhovs gun for why twilight bursts in later (i knew rainbow was acting suspiscious!) As the day wears on, the spell wears off however, and still believing it to be a real effect, she returns to lyras house, desperate to have it cast on her again (does this remind you of addiction? too easy?) Ch. 5 Lyra!queenie says that she'll need to do something more potent, since dash is starting to resist the spell. takes her to her basement, where a premade cocoon waits, and when dash recognizes what it  is queenie reveals herself, (mind controlled lyra walks in? Dash is horrified?). But Wait Rainbow dash! I thought you wanted power... queenie uses a combination of magic and good ol empty rhetoric to convince dash that this will give her everything she ever wanted; power, ability, and all she has to do is submit to her control... you can retain your individuality of course, but being a changeling really isnt that bad, you wouldnt be like those drones at canterlot, youd be a liutenant, still in control of your own body, just with a mental link to me. Youve always wanted fame, control, power, and as my second in command you could have all that and more... As queenie continues pressuring dash with her magic and words (actual words + mental voice?), dash finally breaks (is forced in by lyra/queenie? not really a tragedy then) and climbs into the cocoon. As it closes, she feels her body begin to change, painfully, and the queens voice reassures her that the pain is only temporary. suddenly lyras door is forced open (from dash's muffled viewpoint? or from queenies?) and sensing the elements she disguises herself as somepony (not lyra, who is right there, or did she send her up to be a lookout? might make for an unsettling encounter as she stalls the main six and/or celestia awkwardly) and when the rest burst in when the main 6 finally burst in the disguised queen puts on a terrific act of being a brainwashed pony, left to guard dash as the cowardly queen escaped (dont reveal this to audience?) the others break open the cocoon and find dash's body, with beetle wings, a stubby horn and darker fur? they try and fail to fix her? Princess, can we fix her? I dont know twilight, I just dont know Queenie decides to find a different pony to drain the love of.. and what better pony than the element of loyalty? She could regain her power, rebuild her forces, and disable the Elements in one stroke. And when she arrives in ponyville, she realizes her target's fear of failure could be the perfect catalyst to convert her to her side... has been there a while? (uses her mind magic to make dash slightly better, remove internal limiters or something?) Look into my eyes ->  makes her better slightly but also mind controls her Hold on twilight always said that magic like that was really unstable... Oh you dont care what she thinks, I saw that at canterlot castle. I need you to cast that spell on me again -> what if you could cast the magic yourself? I can give you that power you know Queenie mind rapes dash -> weren't loyal to your friend, you discarded her the moment she did something wrong, even though she was proven right in the end. (trust, loyalty, pressure [elements or just friendship in general], wanting to be the best? Inferiority Superiority Complex) Does Queenie reveal herself or not? Or is it allll in Dash's brain Dreams? Disguising herself as dash/other ponies to make dash doubt herself/her friendships? But you could have another chance -> pledge your loyalty to me/someone else a fresh start, You could be the best, magic and flight and a connection to the earth Drags her off to a cocoon (puts it in her house? CLOUDS DO NOT WORK THAT WAY) The others (plus celestia mebbe?) burst in after dash has already been transformed (partially?) chrysalis disguises herself as a hypno'd pony and tricks them into thinking she flew off? Dash arrives home to find a letter from the wonderbolts... but after tearing it open it turns out to be yet another rejected application. Sequel- its been a week since Rainbow Dash was partially transformed into a changeling. As she struggles to reintegrate into ponyville society, she realizes that the incomplete transformation has left her flight abilities and magic both severely impaired. Faced with her own limitations, and the constant nagging guilt of nearly betraying her friends, she begins to wonder... Would she have been better off as a changeling, serving Queen Chrysalis? Are those thoughts the lingering influence of the changeling magic, and does it even matter if they are? As her friends struggle to accept the new dash, and dash struggles to fit in, Queen Chrysalis uses her new link to dash's mind to manipulate her while in hiding... is connected to chrysalis mind, has to fight off her influence? or gives in to it. climactic fight in a nightclub? runs off to be alone, queenie confronts her, tells her she thrives on attention afraid of being incapable, queenie could fix that too- with the powers of a changeling she would never have to worry about being inferior, or incapable, and youd have acess to flight and magic and strength beond any average pony.