Author Notes for Draft 2
Right. So I wasn't happy with the last one:
- Poor pacing
- Lack of Description
Both of which meant there wasn't a chance to build tension (which surely is the most important part of writing 'darker' fics?
However, lack of time shouldn't be an excuse in the pursuit of improvement.
So rather that just edit the old one, I left it as it was and just built on it in a new 'chapter', more to show where 'improvements' have been made, and to track changes.
I'm a lot happier with this one:
- Added more to the beginning to reinforce what sort of predicament RD is in.
- Added a bit at the end to clear up that dead pony wasn't Rarity (He / she is just some random pony)
However, there is no doubt in my mind that it could be improved, so leave feedback, thanks for reading and I hope you enjoyed it :)