Oh my gosh, FINALLY its finished! After like 3 months of writing absolutely nothing, I finally got this done.
And I hate it :/ I'm sorry but I don't think it turned out that well at all...but, yeah this was like the seventh or eighth rewrite...so it was either A: Accept it and upload, or B: Scrap it and give up.
So here we are, hope you all enjoy :)
Twist Ending
Chapter Five: Meet the Ponies
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"Well, you're off to a marvellous start aren't you?" I groaned, the audible smack of my hand connecting with my forehead filling my ears as I ground to a halt, I was still within sight of Sweet Apple Acres, having only made it a few paces down the road before the full gravity of my situation had set in and pulled me up short.
Having let my temper get the best of me, I just stormed off and ditched the two ponies that could help me. The ONLY ponies that could help me, I didn't know anything about Equestria beyond what I'd seen in the show. I had no idea where the Everfree forest was, let alone how I would even get to it, or even where to start looking once I got there!
I spared a glance over my shoulder; from here I could still see the farm, the rows of trees that stretched on for miles. Perhaps it wasn't to late to double back and apologize…though given Rainbow's less then pleasant attitude towards me so far, I doubt she'd be to quick to shrug off the argument, especially since she was right in a sense, my arrival and Twilight's disappearance were way to close together to be coincidence.
Not that I was about to admit I was wrong, not after that little exchange.
My hand slowly dropped back to my side as I resumed staring at the gate. "I could go back," I mumbled quietly, the idea was certainly the most, sensible option, just swallow my pride, apologize and hope for the best.
Again I was struck by an odd sense of déjà vu. This whole day was turning into one big 'haven't I done this before' encounter for me. It was unnerving to say the least…
My thoughts were interrupted by a loud rumble which swiftly pulled my eyes skyward. The storm that had been rolling in was well underway now; the entire sky was blanketed in thick black clouds, the odd flash of red preceded the thunder that was rolling i-
Red? I blinked several times, my hand returning to my face as I briefly rubbed my eyes, before double checking. Another flash, redder then the last lit up the afternoon sky. "Red lightening? Equestria just keeps getting weirder." I said as my gaze wandered back down to the ground, even with the rationalization, I still felt a slight tinge of fear creep into my sub conscious. Even for a different planet, dimension, whatever, this still didn't feel right.
I forced my gaze back onto the path ahead, my eyes wandering back and forth between the road towards Ponyville (I could just see the buildings on the horizon) or back to Sweet Apple Acres. Neither option was very promising.
Again my mind drew a parallel to the story I'd written, even this, the storm, the choice as to whether to turn back or not. My mind kept prodding me, pulling up random notes and pages from the early days of that damn story.
This was really starting to annoy me…though given how ridiculous the whole 'transported to another universe' concept was, being trapped inside my own work of fiction wasn't that much further of a stretch, was it? Was being trapped in a work of fiction, more, or less likely then being dragged into an alternate universe, or was this a different dimension, or, galaxy?
"Ah, headache," I groaned, wincing as the faint twinges of pain crept into my skull. I set aside the debate for another time; after all there was no real way to prove whether or not this was my story unfolding around us.
Or could I? My eyes widened a touch as a thought occurred to me. "If this is my fanfic, then, I should be able to figure out, what happens next, and I'm talking to myself…great." I rolled the idea around in my head for a few moments. It was a bit of a stretch, but if I could recall enough of the story…
Finally, a few details being to emerge, memories of the odd page here and there, the initial trip to Equestria, the fight with Rainbow Dash, slowly I recalled my work on this particular chapter. Chapter three had been the actual start to the adventure, the revelation that Twilight was missing led to me striking out on my own after the Rainbow made her accusation.
I made it about halfway to Ponyville before Applejack caught up with me and insisted we stop by the town first, despite my protests, I followed with the intention of rounding up the rest of the mane 6 to help find the missing unicorn.
But upon arrival, something went wrong…what was it? I lightly tapped a finger against my forehead as I struggled to recall the details. Only a single sentence formed, and when it did a chill ran down my spine.
Death, has a hundred hooves…
The name of the third chapter of the story, the chill spread as I realized exactly what was waiting for me at Ponyville. If my theory was correct.
Glancing skyward yet again, I caught a glimpse of a brilliant flash of red as a fork of lightening lashed out and struck the ground several miles away. Blinking away the after images that lingered over my vision, I felt a lump form in my throat, red lightening that didn't seem natural, even for Equestria.
"Only way to know for sure," I sighed, before turning back to Sweet Apple Acres, I couldn't resist stealing another glance at the bright red barn and the acres of trees surrounding it, I might not see it again, at least not for real.
Funny how just two days ago, this was all a cartoon, and now I was seeing it for real…
Shaking my head slightly, I tore my gaze away from the farm and focused solely on the road ahead. The only way I would know for sure as to whether this was real or not, was to get to Ponyville and see if the next part happened, if it didn't then at least I knew I had a chance of turning this mess around.
And if it did come true…this was going to be one of the best and worse weeks of my life, not to mention my last.
Pushing the thought back down, I set off along the path, slowly at first but I soon quickened my pace until I was jogging, the almost deafening booms of thunder trailing in my wake…
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It'd be running for a while now, I wasn't sure how long, but it was far shorter then I'd have liked, but eventually I was forced to halt, my heart pounded in my chest and my breaths came short and quick as I slowed to a halt, Ponyville looming on the horizon. I must have been going a while then, or I was more out of shape then I thought…more then likely the latter.
I didn't have long to rest though, as the faint clip clopping of hooves on the path behind me soon reached my ears, drawing both my attention and my gaze back the way I came.
Galloping up the road after me was a familiar orange pony, a cowboy hat obscuring her face. I couldn't help but cringe slightly at the notion that, again, something had come true, exactly as written. I wouldn't admit it until we reached the town, but I was rapidly running out of straws with which to deny the situation.
Catching my breath, I decided against continuing, she was galloping faster then I could ever hope to match, besides, I had little point to avoid her, provided she wasn't planning on giving me a sharp buck for the argument…
All too quickly she caught up and slowed to a halt a few steps away; I frowned slightly as I noted she was barely even winded. I really was out of shape. "Applejack fancy meeting you here," I said slowly, crossing my arms in the process.
"Just what in the hay do ya think you're doin'?" She snapped. Straight to the point I see. "Running off into the Everfree Forest alone? Ya got a death wish or somethin'?"
My eyes narrowed slightly at the question, though I forced myself to keep my voice level as I responded. "Your friend was pinning the blame on me for this, 'Twilight' girl vanishing. Given the situation, I wasn't exactly left with many options. Besides, you said yourself she's my ticket home, so I'm not going to sit on my backside while you do all the work."
Applejack shook her head, a quiet sigh escaping her. "Runnin' off alone, to a place you know nothin' about won't do either of ya any good." She stated firmly, though her voice lacked the rebuke I was expecting. "Me and mah friends have been in there before, we know the forest…somewha'. You need us!"
I hesitated for a few moments, before sighing heavily. "A valid point…but given the other pony, Rainbow Dash, doesn't trust me, I doubt anyone-anypony else will." Again my eyes narrowed. "Why are you so eager to help me anyway? I doubt you don't share your friend's suspicions."
Applejack's ears dropped slightly, and her eyes shifted away from me. "Truth is, ah don't fully trust ya." She mumbled, one hoof lightly pawing at the ground. "But ya haven't done anything' wrong by me so far. Least I can do is help ya out, and try ta find Twilight at the same time." She fixed me with a cautious stare. "Plus this way, I can keep an eye on ya, make sure ya can't do anything wrong by any pony, and keep ya from doing something boneheaded and stupid, like running into the forest alone."
I opened my mouth to argue, but quickly shut it again as I met her gaze. As much as I wanted to protest, she made valid points, plus the longer I stood around arguing with her, the less time I had to get to town and prove things were not predetermined by my terrible writing skills.
"Can't argue with that," I chuckle as a hand moves to rub the back of my neck. "Well, lead the way ma'am. The sooner we get to the forest, the sooner we can find, Twilight."
With a nod, the earth pony set off at a brisk pace down the road, I hastened to follow. "We need to stop in town first. Were gonna need all the help we can get." She made it a few feet down the road before realizing I'd stopped short.
"Whoa, whoa, whoa, hold on!" I started, hands rising slightly in a defensive gesture. "I've already said I'm not going into town, I'll create a panic, more so then one of the denizens being kidnapped would most likely!"
Applejack fixed with another glare, this one clearly indicating she wasn't going to back down. "We don't have time for ya worryin'! Twi needs our help, and WE need help ta find her. We can worry about ya causing a fuss later. But right now we need to round up mah friends and get movin'!"
"How about you go round up your friends, and I meet you at the forest?" I responded, a hand lightly cutting through the air in an attempt to finalize my statement, of course all this did was result in another, harsher glare. I inwardly cringed at the sight.
"This ain't open for debate, Simon." She responded slowly, each word obviously picked carefully and stated through clenched teeth. "Were goin' to Ponyville, even if I have ta drag ya there myself!"
I sighed heavily, knowing better then to continue fighting. "Fine, but when I wound up at the gallows, I'm blaming you."
"I don't know how things work where you're from, but ya ain't got anythin' to worry about here. Nothing bad will happen to ya, trust me." She quickly set off a moment later, leaving me standing there staring at the spot she vacated.
"I sure hope so." I mumbled, before falling into step behind her. Despite her words, I didn't feel all that reassured.
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The rest of the journey passed in uncomfortable silence. Applejack was probably just concerned with reaching the town and finding Twilight. I on the other hand, felt my heart beat a little faster with each step, a million different thoughts running through my mind as the colourful buildings of ponyville loomed ever closer.
The most prominent thought was how the ponies would react; Applejack had taken my presence so far reasonably well, though given there was a few hours where I wasn't conscious, I don't know what transpired while I was out.
But this wasn't just one pony; this was an entire town, an entire town that could, quite possibly decide to throw me in a dungeon out of fear. Or worse.
Shaking my head to clear the rather grim images that sprung up, I shifted my mind to the other focus of my thoughts, namely what we would find there. Would it be exactly as I wrote, or nothing of the sort?
I spared another glance skywards, just as another rumble of thunder reached my ears. I noticed AJ glancing upwards as well, scanning the clouds with a worried narrowing of her eyes. "Something's not right about that." I mumbled as a flash of lightening bathed the land in a blood red glow for an instant. Applejack didn't respond, though I didn't miss her pace quickening slightly.
Luckily we were already at the outskirts of the town, and despite my rapidly growing fears, I pressed on, following the earth pony through the streets.
My eyes rapidly jumped from building to building, the buildings looked almost, normal, for a almost medieval hamlet style town rather then a modern city. "Not what you were expectin'?" Applejack asked, I could hear the slight grin she sported without even looking her way.
"Not exactly," I said softly, my voice tinged with a hint of awe as I tore my gaze away from the houses and focused back on the street. Somehow we'd reached the town center, or so I assumed. A myriad of market stalls were scattered about, ponies wandering back and forth between them eyeing the wares and bartering prices. If it wasn't for the fact they were all candy coloured ponies, I could have mistaken my surroundings for one of those Renascence fairs I'd seen on TV.
But no, the brightly coloured ponies ruined the illusion and drove home the fact that I wasn't just lost, I wasn't on Earth anymore.
Fearing the worst, I kept my eyes on the various ponies, jumping between each one and watching for the inevitable reaction. Most of them were to focused on buying or selling to notice, others were on their way to a different destination and didn't even glance in our direction.
I licked my lips, noting how dry they suddenly seemed to be as I studied the different ponies. A familiar, teal coloured shape caught my eye, and I felt my breath catch in my throat as I spotted the mark on the ponies flank, a lyre. Or so I assumed, I wasn't very musically inclined, but I'd recognize that unicorn anywhere even from this distance.
Standing next to her was another familiar sight, a cream coloured pony with a mane that was half pink and half what I believe was dark blue. I barely caught my tongue in time and bit down on it as the names of the two mares sprung to my lips. I did NOT need more attention then I was about to receive…
Speaking of which, no pony had reacted to me ye-
"Hi!"
"Gah!" I leapt back a step as a voice abruptly jolted my from my thoughts, tearing my eyes off the two ponies, I focused on a new shape that was disturbingly right in front of me, a bundle of pink fur and a mess of fairy floss styled mane. "Where'd you come from?" I gasped, eyes widening a touch as I stepped back further, putting a good few paces between me and Pinkie Pie, who's already painfully stretched smile grew brighter still.
"I was on my way to find Applejack," she abruptly states, ignoring my question as her eyes jump to the orange pony in question. "The mayor wanted me to find you and Rainbow Dash! She needs to see us all." Quick as a flash she jumped back to me, bright blue eyes wide and seeming to sparkle slightly in the dim light that slipped through the cloud cover. "But you're here! I thought you didn't want to come to Ponyville!"
Out of the corner of my eye, I caught a glimpse of Bon Bon glancing our way. Queue everything going to hell in five…
Before I could say anything though, Applejack cut in. "Why does the mayor wanna see us?"
"I don't know, she just said it was really urgent!" Pinkie continued, her smile fading slightly. "But she wanted to see Rarity, and me, and Dashie and you and Fluttershy right away!" I did my best to ignore the ponies around us, though I couldn't miss the cream pony nudging Lyra and pointing a hoof towards us out of the corner of my eye.
"Uh, girls," I cut in, neither seemed to hear me as the pink pony kept up her rapid fire speech as she began listing off what the mysterious letter could be.
"Ohh what if she's planning a party!" Pinkie started bouncing on the spot at the prospect.
"Girls…" By now both Lyra and Bon Bon were staring at us, I risked a glance their way, but their expressions were unreadable.
"That doesn't make a lick of sense Pinkie, why would she be planning a party?" Applejack protested, again ignoring my attempt to get their attention.
"Well what abou-"
"GIRLS!" I suddenly shouted, causing both of them to jump and whip around to face me. Along with about half the population of Ponyville…hell.
Everything began very, very quiet at that moment. Not even the thunder that had trailed me from the farm was willing to break the sudden tension.
A full minute ticked by before I risked speaking, painfully aware of dozens of pairs of eyes boring into my skull from every direction. "Perhaps it would be best to, go to the mayor and find out? Rather then speculate in the streets and waste time?" I suggested, my voice suddenly sounding very small and weak with every pony staring intently at me.
Applejack nodded quickly. "Tha' would be best, come on." She quickly set off, Pinkie bouncing after her; I swear her hooves never once actually touched the ground the whole trip.
I hastened to follow along behind, my eyes focused solely on my shoes as I made my way across the square. My previous excitement and wonder drained away and replaced with dread as I heard the faint murmurs of conversation returning, quieter then before. The odd comment of 'strange creature' and 'what is it?" reaching my ears.
Thankfully no one had started screaming for the guards…yet.
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"That was exactly what I was hoping to avoid!" I snapped the second the door closed behind us, blocking the ever growing crowd of ponies that was stopping to stare at me. "Now the entire town not only knows I'm here, but is probably on the verge of panic!" I continued, focusing on the two ponies in front of me.
Thankfully we reached the town hall without incident, aside from all the ponies staring at us of course. For the moment my actual reason for being here was forgotten, submerged by the crippling realizing that I'd just been discovered, and a day after arriving too! So much for keeping a low profile…
"Just calm down a bit, the ponies are smarter then that." Applejack stated firmly, an attempt at a reassuring smile forming on her lips. I was anything but reassured by it.
Before I could argue though, I was cut off (again) by another voice. "What is all this commotion about darling?" The voice I knew all too well, the tinge of what I attributed to sophistication, the kind of voice that would ordinarily grate on my nerves within a few sentences, a voice that I knew all too well.
I shifted my attention past the earth pony and her still bouncing pink companion as a second pair of ponies rounded the corner. A familiar yellow pegasus and a white unicorn with a heavily stylized purple mane.
Fluttershy, upon seeing me, uttered some form of frightened squeak before ducking behind her friend. Rarity however, simply halted dead in her tracks. "Wha, wh-what is, t-that?" She managed to stutter as she retreated a few paces, bumping into Fluttershy and causing the pink maned pony to retreat back into the other room just as quickly (if not faster) then she'd arrived.
I crossed my arms and prepared to deliver the stereo typical 'I'm human, not a damn monster!' speech, when Applejack jumped in front of me. "This is our…guest." She quickly stated, likely hoping to avoid a confrontation. "The one Rainbow told ya about last night."
Slowly, the white unicorn's face smoothed back to its original, almost disinterested state, though I still caught the odd glance my way. "I-I see…this is the, creature you wanted to show us."
"I'm a person, not a pet." I mumbled, earning a trio of glances from the ponies. "Just sayin'."
"It-" a harsh glare from me. "His, name is Simon, it's a…" The farm pony glanced towards me for aid.
"I'm a human, not from this world, I assume." I paused, taking a deep breath to try and calm my nerves. "Is this really the best time for long winded stories?" I offered, hoping to find out what was going on and find out if the letter Pinkie had mentioned was the same one I was praying they would never see.
"Uh, yes, perhaps it would be best to, leave introductions until later?" Rarity, surprisingly agreed with me. Chances are for the sake of getting away from me at the earliest possible opportunity.
"Alrigh'…what exactly is goin' on anyway sugar cube?" Applejack asked, to which her friend could only shrug.
"I don't rightly know, Pinkie told me the mayor wanted to see us, same as you I presume." I spared a quick glance towards Pinkie at the mention of her name, somehow she was remaining strangely quiet. "All I managed to learn is that a letter was found nailed to the door of the town hall. Whatever it says, it sure spooked her."
I could almost feel the colour draining from my face at the comment. Thankfully the ponies were focused on each other and didn't seem to notice. Again my mind leapt on the words, the letter, nailed to the door, this was exactly how I'd damn well written it! Surely there was no more proof needed.
The rest of the conversation was drowned out by the sound of my pounding heartbeat. I shifted back a few paces and leaned against the wall, a hand moving to lightly massage my forehead as sudden flash of pain struck just behind my eyes. A wave of nausea rapidly accompanied it as all the dread and confusion I'd been forcing down came flaring up and assaulted my senses all at once.
As if being in Equestria wasn't bad enough, this really was my version of it. All of this, designed by me. Though this wasn't just words on a page anymore, this was real.
Which meant that in just a few short days…
I shook my head, swallowed the lump in my throat, and forced my eyes to focus, just in time to catch the tail end of the conversation between the groups of friends. "-best we find out what this letter actually says, before jumpin' to conclusions." Applejack stated, to a small chorus of confirmations from the others, myself included surprisingly.
Pushing off the wall, I fell into step behind the ponies, luckily no one had noticed my reaction it seemed, or they'd just chosen to ignore it.
I slowly trailed behind the ponies as they moved deeper into the town hall, my eyes wandered again, but with less enthusiasm this time. The hall was rather sparsely decorated; a long rug covered the floor, a mostly white rug with a brilliant golden sun in the center, the mark of Celestia. A fireplace was set into one wall a few random directions along the mantel piece. Honestly this place looked more like a home then an office.
"Ah, good you've finally arrived." My eyes jumped back ahead of us as we finally halted in front of a table, or more accurately the mayor, whom was standing in front of it. "I was beginning to worry something wa-goodness!" She leapt back a pace as her eyes shifted past the ponies and settled on me. "Wha-what in Celestia's name is that!" She demanded, pointing a shaking hoof at me.
"Human, not from around here, trying to get home, can we not do this, it's been a long day." I pitched in quickly, finishing with a slight wave. "Trust me, I don't bite."
"We'll explain in a bit mayor, now what's this about a letter?" Applejack stepped in before any more questions could be raised by the now quivering earth pony.
"Uh, right, yes the le-letter." She quickly stepped aside and nodded to the table, I took a step forward, and the mayor swiftly darted around the other side of the table, it took all my self control not to laugh despite my nervousness, she reminded me of Fluttershy in a sense…
Ignoring her for a moment, I noted the folded up scroll in the center of the table, despite the stacks of papers, writing equipment and various knick knacks that were spread across its surface as well, that one scroll stood out for some reason, sitting there, almost taunting us to open it.
Before I could think about reaching for it however, a soft purple glow enveloped it and it abruptly hovered into the air, I instinctively leapt back a pace at the sudden movement, though as it drifted closer to Rarity, I noted her horn was glowing the same colour.
"Magic? What the hell?" I commented, despite knowing this already, actually seeing it in person was, needless to say a much different experience.
It seemed I was ignored again though, as the purple maned pony simply unfurled the letter and turned it to face her. The rest of the ponies quickly crowded around to read as well. Luckily, being taller then them, I could easily just shuffle behind and read over their heads.
What I saw only made my heart sink into my shoes. The text was written in luminous green colour, the words seemed to dance erriely across the page, making it hard for my eyes to actually focus on them, though somehow I could still understand each word without difficulty.
It wasn't until I actually began reading, that a cold voice invaded my thoughts, a bone chilling hiss like a cold wind through tree branches.
To the feeble folks of Ponyville, beware this warning.
Death has a hundred hooves…and walks a hundred ways. Death waits close by but not for you if you are wise.
You WILL surrender the Elements of Harmony and their bearers to me. Then, we'll let you get on with your wretched little lives.
Refuse to surrender and death will come to your town with a hundred souls, and swords.
Don't disappoint me.
"Now you see why I wanted to see you." The mayor stated, and I was caught off guard when the ponies jolted at the sound of her voice. I was still disoriented from the, odd choice of reading voice on my part, though I quickly set it aside for later, I could worry about details when I was alone and had time to think…hopefully.
"Elements of, Harmony?" I asked, leaning forward slightly and pretending to reread the letter. "I guess these are, something important?"
"Only the most powerful magical, thingy's ever!" Pinkie stated with another bright smile. "And we-" She was cut off by Applejack abruptly shoving a hoof in her face, muffling the rest of her words.
"Suffice to say, yeah their important." She stated quickly before the pink earth pony could say anymore. I made a point of arching an inquisitive eyebrow at the behaviour.
"So the 'just hand them over' idea is out then?"
"Yup."
I nodded slightly, pretending to accept this for now. "This place just keeps getting weirder."
"Well what now? Shouldn't Twilight be here to see this as well? And where's Rainbow Dash?" Rarity asked. Applejack hastily averted her eyes. "Applejack?"
"She's, missin'. That's why we were comin' here…She didn't get home last night, an we figure she's somewhere in the Everfree Forest, she was vistin Zecora before she vanished. Rainbow went to scout ahead, see if she could find anythin'." The earth pony responded, her eyes on her hooves, likely feeling guilty after forgetting about their missing friend.
"Oh my. Well, I think it's safe to assume this letter has something to do with it. We shouldn't waste anymore time!" The unicorn responded, I chose to stay out of the conversation for now, being ignored and forgotten gave me a moment to think.
Or rather take note of the letter again, Rarity was still levitating it at eye level, and while the ponies were busy discussing the next course of action it went unnoticed. "Hey, girls…" I said softly, an eyebrow arching, I could have sworn the letters were actually glowing. A moment later the words flared brighter, dazzling me. "Whoa, do letters normally glow like that?" I asked, the ponies hesitated, focusing back on the scroll.
"Not that I know of," Appleajck commented, inching back a step. "I don't have much to do with magic though."
"I've never seen anything like that before either, tis no magic I know of." Rarity stated.
"Oh my…I don-don't like this." Fluttershy whispered, a second before the letter flashed brightly again, blinding me for a few seconds.
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I barely suppressed a groan as the after images from the flash started to fade, leaving me blinking away the multi coloured spots that danced before my eyes. "Okay, that hurt." I mumbled, shifting a hand to my forehead as a stabbing pain flared up behind me eyes.
As my vision faded back into focus, I noted a distinct lack of, well anything familiar. None of the ponies were in my immediate vision, nor was the table or the scroll. "Girls?" Another stab of pain flared up, stronger then the last, I vaguely felt my knee hit the ground as the world dropped a few feet. "Ouch, I'm beginning to hate magic."
Forcing my eyes to focus, I risked a glance about myself, expecting to find the other ponies in a similar state of disorientation.
Instead I saw trees, dark, gnarled trees with twisted branches. What little light seeped through the thick canopy of leaves illuminated what appeared to a clearing in the middle of a forest. A flash of lightening lit up the area, revealing that I was alone.
"…I don't think I'm in Ponyville anymore…"
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And so the adventure begins proper. Simon is lost, likely in the Everfree Forest. The ponies are missing, and the hunt for Twilight is on before doom befalls Ponyville.
And now the entire town knows there's a human on the loose...that was NOT how I wanted to do it, but everything else I came up with came out looking worse then this :/ Soooo, yeah I decided to keep things to a minimum for now, get the reveal over with, I can iron out the details later I guess...
Also, same goes for Pinkie Pie being mostly quiet, I just couldn't think of what to do with her, so she just bounced around a bit, and did some random things :/ Apologies if I got her wrong lol. Or any of the ponies for that matter...still a bit rough when it comes to their personality's and such.
Hopefully it wasn't too terrible lol. I can't say I like how it turned out, but as I said at the start, I've rewritten it like 8 times now and I'm still not happy, so I just decided to make do and finish it.
Hope you enjoyed it, and with luck the next chapter for this and my other stories will be along very shortly.
PS: Short of inspiration I decided to rip a couple of plot points from one of my all time favorite games...so, yeah, sorry about that too :P But kudos to anyone that gets the reference.