//------------------------------// // Second Arc, First Analysis // Story: Equestrian Fanfiction // by Lise //------------------------------// Woooow! Everhere sure starts with a bang! Also, since the scroll is not available in the shops yet (I expect it will be a few hours after I post this) BEWARE SPOILERS! [EqF-spoiler] We start in the Skyla corporation, where Megan is finishing a report, then goes to present it to her boss. He gives her a well, done then casually mentions that that security will be heightened because of the Everprince incidents. Megan goes back to her office, we see her glancing at pictures of her brother and Omni (and the rest) on her phone. She sighs and is about to leave, when she's called to go and get something from the vault. So she goes through security (all explained in chilling detail) reaches the final sign in, when the wall suddenly explodes and Warlockwings pour in and start fighting the corporate battlemages. Then we have Hercules (I think I'm in love) make a comment about Skyla knowing better than to meddle in such stuff, after which he breaks the vault and we find out that's actually a cell with a child inside. Quick jump to Danny in his university room. He's busy removing everything that belonged to Loki and putting it in boxes. Eric appears and after an awkward silence offers a soda (“I think I'll be staying away from water bottles for a while” is best line). Apparently Bellucio and Molly are gone to explore something in another reality, and Blazen and Euryala have vanished as well. (The very cool thing here is that because of the reality shifts, people don't remember anyone who’s gone in another reality until their return. Sort of like people carry all memories linked with them as they come and go). Caprice shows up and assures them everything is fine in Equestria. There's a lot of awkward silence, after which Megan phones and asks them to meet her in Zeus’ temple. On the way we learn that the gods have disappeared as well (we get a recap of the entire first arc.) At the meeting we have Danny, Megan, Eric, Karl (who's a lovable idiot) and Cassandra. A long exposition about the events of this morning follows, as well as a plan to help get the girl free. We also have a flashback in which the girl plants a “Please help” thought in Megan’s mind just before she's being taken away by the Warlockwings/Overseers. Cassandra goes on about how no corp can be trusted and they must do this on their own. A plan is hatched (I won't go in detail, but in brief Megan uses the mind link she has with the child to help everyone get to one of the Overseer outposts at the edge of Mistmount). It's discovered that the place is protected by normal humans and sorceresses. Using what powers they have (and some cool Felina amulets) the group makes its way to the holding cell and are about to rescue the girl, when Hercules appears (and makes his junior god speech). Everyone works together to try and take him down in possible the best fight scene I've seen ever, but end up defeated. At the last moment Megan shatters reality (with her gem) and ends up in Hades reality. She's in a similar room, but it's empty. Wounded and bleeding, she tries to drag herself out and call for help. She fails (of course) and lies there, thinking of everything that has happened since the start of Everhere. Then suddenly someone comes next to her and helps her up. We then find out it's the child (who has the same appearance and memories as the pen in the real world). The child thanks Megan, then says “I am Athena.” (Female deity reference right there!) [EqF-spoiler] So what can I say! MC is up to a great start! Also, I learned that there will be a reading of the chapter later today! So much excite! :))) What do you think? PrinceEric 2/10! News more Griffins. Won't lie, though. That Cassandra chick is badass! I can totally see Megan falling for her. Also Hercules… I'm not saying I'd fall for a fictional coltfiction character, but if he happened to say appear out of the blue… *yay* yeah! Sorry, GLGJ, you're still my number one, but Hercules… Just kidding :P Feather @Feather: let me hang with you and GriffinGirlfriend and you have a deal! ManyFaces *yay* me! You serious!? We're so doing this! @GriffinGirlfirnd: when is our panel? We're so having Many there! No arguments! This is a thing that's happening! Feather @PrinceEric: Let me just start by saying how awkward it is writing my response with Luna sitting literally next to me and being all nice and stuff (well, nice to her coltfriend, not me :P) That said… The pacing is way uneven in this one. I get what the writers are going for. The whole “let’s recap after the hiatus” is a thing, but it could have been a bit smoother. I mean, you can see the rhythm: calm, calm, sudden action, calm calm, sudden action, calm, action, action, revelation. The worst thing is that the story is quite good. If the pacing would have been better I'd give it an A. Well, that and if you STOPPED INTRODUCING NEW GODS! Seriously, why? I get it, everyone wants a Mary Sue goddess to identify with, but seriously why?! :/ It could have been great without her. Edit: What Max is trying to say is that she loved it, but is too ashamed to admit it because of some stupid reason. (I seem to have married an edgemare.) MixaMax I couldn't help myself! I read the review and then got the copy from PrinceEric and read that too! (I'm so weak willed! :() Some incredible news about the reading: Princess Luna has agreed to also do a dreamscape display. Now we’ll not only hear what’s going on, we’ll also get see it! :D P.S.: @Octavia, please tell your husband that he WON’T be “helping out” :/ If he even thinks of opening a portal to some dimension or other I'll be… anyway, talk to him! Thank you! (You look great, by the way :) So glad to see you at the event.) DarkSparkle Who restored posting permissions?! :/ Licked! Licked! Licked! HopHop Hop, I can't believe I'm the one saying this, but you need to find yourself a nice stallion… CodeFilly