Equestrian Fanfiction

by Lise


The Butterfly Draft

Okay, this is it! Tomorrow I'll be heading for Ponyville and from there right to the Crystal Empire for the convention. How are the chapters going?

Jade is doing a few edits and should post our chapter shortly. In brief, it's the story of Sunny who is moving out from her family’s home and stumbles upon a saddlebag with a strange diary in it. Curious, she takes a peek. She starters reading a, thinking it's a novel or some sort, when get adoptive sister notes she’s reading scribbles. That makes her curious how she knows about the language and sets off to discover more.

Sunny goes to an old linguistics professor of hers, who freaks out when he sees it and says not to tell anyone. After the meeting the professor phones someone and says that things are in motion.

Sunny drives back home, but on the way gets a flat tire. As she gets off to get a spare she notices the corp witches flying along the road, which triggers a temporary flashback of them attacking her. Frightened she grabs the diary and runs to a friend.

Relaxing a bit with her friend, they decide to read the diary, which Sunny reading. They find that the diary is split in multiple parts, each starting with the discovery of the diary and following a similar path. What's curious is that the diary has two sets of handwriting. Sunny discovers that the second set is hers (after she tries to write in the unknown language).

Sunny and her friend follow the instructions and reach a portal at the base of Mistmount mountain, where it activates. A man young man emerges from it, looks at Sara with a smile and asks “who are you?”

LightSparkle

She makes it sound much worse :P I'm joking. It's fine, we all put in a lot of work. Well, mostly Jade and I put in a lot of work. Light was constantly going on and on how it had to be perfect and how she'd bring a hundred pairs of socks…

Simile

@LightSparkle: Hey! Why’s Jade doing that? Editing is supposed to be my job! Okay, my and Twist’s job!

RRBB

It's okay, RRBB. :) I've read it. Jade just wants to make some style changes here and there. :D Sorry for not giving it to you, but Simile went all paranoid and made me promise I won't send it out until the final version was ready.

Twist

Wow, sounds incredible. I really like it. I'm not sure ours can match… :( @Brush, @Short&Hoofy, are you okay with me telling ours?

Quarters

What are you asking them for? Of course you can! :P

RRBB

@RRBB: go hug Short&Hoofy. Then come back. :P Quarters, of course you can. You worked on this as much as all of us, and despite what you think it's a very good chapter. I know because we’ve been talking about both with LightSparkle and comparing notes. Also, did you think that Short&Hoofy and MixaMax would keep secrets from each other? ;)

Brush

About that… “I'm so happy! My sister writes almost as well as my husband!” -Max

I really don't know what to think. Is that a compliment to me, or an insult to Jade, or is it an insult to both of us?

Brush, don't give RRBB bad advice when we are on a deadline. (The hypocrite is correcting our version so she could brag how perfect it is.)

Short&Hoofy

Okay, here goes…

Rain, the male character, is on his usual trio delivering mail in the Crystal Empire. Doing his round, he notices there's a letter to an address that doesn't exist (it's addressed to the fourth floor of a two story building). Curious, he asks his boss about it when he sets back to the post office, but only receives the explanation that it's a prank. His boss, then takes the letter to put it away. Rain thinks nothing of it and goes to have lunch with his childhood friend Caprice (yes’ the same). He complain about everything seeming mundane and sort of not what he was meant for. Caprice just laughs. He then explains how he's tired delivering prank letters and tells her about today's case.

This gets Caprice intrigued. Suddenly she becomes serious and asks that he show her. Thinking it’s a joke she refuses, but ultimately gives in just to humor her. They end up going to the post office. He’s about ready to go back, since that office only works mornings, but finds that there are people there. Caprice is about to go in, when they are discovered and on of the unknown unicorns fires a human gun at them. Rain is scared out of his mind, but Caprice attracts everypony’s attention and flies off leading them away.

Once he's calmed down, Rain decided to enter the post office. He walks to the back room, where his boss put the “hoax” letter, and finds there's a whole room of them, each with the same address and handwriting. Opening one, he finds a picture of himself and a note reading he knew he’d figure out the mistake, as well as instructions to go somewhere.

More intrigued than afraid, Rain follows the instructions, going to the underground section of the palace, where he uses some crystals to activate a portal and steps through.

Quarters

Posted. Also, that's very nice. I think it matches the story completely, while giving an entirely different feel. Sunny starts active then becomes passive, while Rain starts passive and becomes active (thanks to Caprice). I think everypony will love it.

Do we have enough time for art and print?

Jade

PaintDrop is still out of the picture, and DarkSparkle seems to be having some magic issues. (Must be age.)

I think Luna will manage to take care of everything (she always does).

Twist, let's do a final pass and get things rolling?

RRBB

Deal! :)

Twist

Finally I can go sleep!

LightSparkle

Yeah! Me too! … wait you meant sleep on your own? :P

See you at CrystalCon

Simile

Simile, I'll kill you! Before that, I need rest.

Good job everyone!

LightSparkle