Why does this always happen to me? One moment I'm just walking along, doing the small errand I volunteered for before going back to work at the S.P.P tower, and the next thing I know, I'm in an oddly cleaner looking Everfree forest? What happened!!!
I admit, I'm curious to see how this goes and how Littlepip reacts to seeing the Mane Six, keep it up.
You forgot to mention the burn on littlepips cutie mark in the Doctors notes. I wait to see applejacks reaction to little Mac.
Alright! So here's what we have so far...
The premise is interesting, and fairly enjoyable. However the biggest snag with this story(I feel) is a lack of proper editorial work.
If you can get yourself an editor, I believe you got yourself an amazing story.
Thought: ‘Guess the only option left is to fight.’
Hmmmm.... try this?
'Guess the only option left is to fight'
I admit, I'm curious to see how this goes and how Littlepip reacts to seeing the Mane Six, keep it up.
You forgot to mention the burn on littlepips cutie mark in the Doctors notes.
I wait to see applejacks reaction to little Mac.
Alright! So here's what we have so far...
The premise is interesting, and fairly enjoyable. However the biggest snag with this story(I feel) is a lack of proper editorial work.
If you can get yourself an editor, I believe you got yourself an amazing story.
Hmmmm.... try this?