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you know a few talon company would be worth a good number of raiders, if they pooled there resources they may be able to get four of them plus the one they got.
It certainly is interesting how the Talons seem to be interacting this story... Hope it isn't a bad sign with Malice letting herself being known to show interest in the Stables inhabitants.
Now the next word Alloy has to learn is love, and then my ship can finally set sail!
Great chapter, Ham! The tension just continues to get wound tighter and tighter.
Well, how come I was never told of this story updating!? Aw well, at least I enjoyed it anyway
Noooo! I need moar! Give me my fix, man!
Really, though, great chapter.
Yes, Alloy's finally gone and admitted to herself that she has a friend, awesome chapter, keep it up.
My feels have been stabbed again D:
Malice strikes me as a few *ahem* generals that my dad did business with. Honorable to a fault with the deals, willing to make very hefty compromises to her plans in the spirit of getting a deal, but will not take no for an answer. And by take no, I mean freely dispense violence.
Quite interesting as things go.
Exceptional chapter once again. The lingering effects of what poor little Alloy has done will continue to show itself to us and her. I like it very much that she acts, well normally to the situation. Her life and psyche has been torn assunder and she is just trying to revert to the things that gave her joy and peace of mind before. Again a very natural response and one you showed very nicely.
The ending scene with the painting was also wonderfully executed, hazzah for metaphors!
Loved the chapter and look forward to the next one!
Ahh, so this is how everything ties back together. Things were going so well, too. As lucrative as it is, I really wonder how things are gonna fall once push comes to shove.
Though knowing Malice - which Alloy would know the best, if she weren't otherwise occupied with... emotions - I can't help but feel that the requested expedition would actually have been treated relatively well so long as they performed. Iunno, just the vibe I get from her. She is capable of incredible, casual violence... but she really does seem good for her word, no matter how harsh.
On top of that, we saw some conflict amidst the Talons, the real impetus behind a new story arc, and the continued follow through of Alloy's actions and their effect on her. That in mind, this was a pretty packed chapter. For the immediate future, I wonder how Alloy is gonna come to terms with this emotional breakthrough if her and Grit's connection. I imagine it'll terrify her, being so... tied to someone, like that.
In turn, I have to wonder what Malice's plan really is. As interesting as this chapter was - and don't get me wrong, in no way does it take away from the impact of the ending - I just wonder what it is Malice plans to build, and what she plans to do with it. Are we going to see Mad Max-esque swamp skimmers full of raiders in the future, if she succeeds? How
awesomehorrifying!Hey there, Ham. Lately I've been letting your story get a few more chapters under its belt rather than reading along with the updates. What with the subreddit's pre-reading going on, I'm all caught up now. So in that case, I figured I'd give you my two caps worth as a way to say sorry for not commenting in so long.
Coming back to the story after so long, I'm glad to see that Alloy still has that artistic urge to create that helped me relate to her in the first place. This story starts out incredibly strong with the first few chapters focusing on her, even if they are mostly narration. Typically, I'm more a fan of the dialogue in this story than the narrating style, but that's just my personal preference. The plot itself is engaging, and moves at a fairly good clip.
The story did seem to trip and falter a little in the middle of the last arc, though. I wasn't all that thrilled with the chapters surrounding Sugarland, as they seemed to drag on a bit for my taste. And I wasn't exactly sure what to think about Grit being a changeling. That reveal just seemed to hang there, with neither rhyme nor reason. Though now that he's got a personal quest to match it, that little tidbit is perfectly fine as a springboard for future adventures. But in all honesty, all of my misgivings regarding those few chapters can be forgiven for how you handled the end of chapter 10. Bravo, mate. That was some damn good stuff.
I'm still loving Malice just as much as when I first read her back in... geez, has it been years already? I'm looking forward to seeing where this business between Stable 15 and the raiders goes. Overall, this is definitely one of the better stories out there. It's not hard to see why so many people like it.
Also, the religious gators gave me quite the chuckle. Keep up the good work, Doctor.
YOU DON'T DO THAT! YOU JUST DON'T!
That shit has a screw in it, which is, like, the most useful thing, ever!
You know I like the way this story is going, at first it'd seem pretty simple story but it seems to be getting bigger and more complex. I like how Alloy finally understands what a friend is, she seems to not to have many before(If had at all), so seeing her understand why Grit follows her was heartwarming.
You know what, Pillar is supposed to be the unlikeable one at that meeting, but the jerk has a good point about hiding from the danger. Now this crisis feels like a genuine problem such a bastion, the stable, might face in the wasteland.
I also enjoy the lack of output from Alloy for the good first half of the chapter. She is completely out of her comfort zone, and it shows how much all the events prior have shaken her. I rarely get to see a plot's events take such a toll on a character, since usually they can work through the experiences. To see Alloy fail to handle those experiences is a refreshing and effective characteristic. In her weakness and despair, she encapsulates the morbid setting and circumstances for all the characters around her.
Holy crap so many comments! Thank you, all of you!
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Ehhhh, Alloy can fix up guns. Plus they have Grit. It's not a great situation, and who knows if they can maintain it, but it's their home for now.
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Maybe! They seem to want to keep how much they have close to their chest.
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I'm sure it's nothing.
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Thank you! It's a moment I've been looking forward to, though I was worried about it being a bit corny.
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Damn you FiMFic update feed. Glad you enjoyed it regardless!
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Sorry it was short! More soon, I hope. Chapter 14 is underway!
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It was something I was trying to build up to a bit here. When I started writing I thought I'd have to be more careful about never calling him a friend, but it kinda just flowed naturally. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Aww, but this was a sweet moment.
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Malice is always fun to write. I'd say it's less that she's honorable, and more that she can recognize when talking is more productive than threatening, but I'm not in her head right now. She's plenty capricious enough to just do something wildly different.
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Thank you for the kind words. The last couple chapters have been a struggle to write because of those lingering effects, actually, and the first draft of this chapter was a mess as a result. I'm glad it came out well, especially the painting scene. I've been simultaneously looking forward to and nervous about finally presenting that scene.
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Maybe Malice would have treated them well, maybe not, but would you trust her with some naive engineers? I'm actually concerned that the chapter was a little too packed. I've always worried about pacing, mostly concerned that I'm running too fast. Either way, I'm glad it seems to have worked out for this chapter at least.
As for what Malice is planning... who knows? I mean she's a crazy raider, right?
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Hey!! It has been a long time! Glad to see you here again, and I'm sorry I've kinda let the chapters pile up for me on Sisters as well, so I can't blame you for letting WEcon slide, especially when you've gotten so much done on Sisters. I've gotta catch up!
Anyway, onto the meat of this. Pacing is always something I'm concerned about, especially from the standpoint of reading it in one sitting rather than serialized, so I really appreciate the feedback there. Sugarland was kinda intended as a place to stop and take a breather before the other shoe fell with the gators and the Stable. Looking back on it, the changeling reveal kinda has gone nowhere yet, you're right. I know what I have planned for everything, but I definitely need to make sure it doesn't feel pointless. Given the length of time it's been since that came out, I need to keep that in mind and not let it fall to the wayside.
Still, I'm glad you liked the ending to Chapter 10. It's a moment I've had drafted out for a long, long time now, and I'm pleased with how it turned out.
And Malice is still probably the most fun to write dialogue for.
Really glad to hear from you again man, and thank you for the extensive comment!
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Clearly she doesn't know how to scavenge.
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When I started I really wanted to make sure it was a smaller-scale story, with a more personal focus. And I'm glad you liked the last scene there, part of me was worried it'd just be corny.
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I'd argue that Pillar isn't supposed to be unlikable. A jerk, definitely, but he's mostly just untrusting, blunt, and callous. I tried to make sure both Pillar and Studio had good arguments, and she at least seems to like him around.
As for Alloy herself, I suppose my biggest worry was that it'd come across as too needlessly angsty. Some of the parts that lie on the cutting room floor are definitely far more melodramatic than they had any right to be, but it's a concern I've had in the back of my mind, even as I press on with what I've got because it's what makes the most sense for her. I'm glad it comes across as the weight of her experience, rather than wallowing in angst, but I have my editors to thank for that.
As always, the character depth for this story was brilliant. Seeing Alloy's inner turmoil over taking a life and Malice's involvement was beautifully heartwrenching. That and I'm glad she and Grit are getting along again and she's opening up to him. A good cry certainly does help release inner tension, which I have personal experience with. It's never good to bottle up anything emotionally.
I do wonder what Malice is up to. While the Overmare was right to deny them workers, since they were sketch characters and anyone with half a brain could see something was up, Malice is reasonable as long as you don't fuck with her. I can't wait to see how this goes down. Mayhaps Alloy might use her connection with Malice to stop this or something.
Either way, I can't wait to read what comes next.
Late comment is late. Every time I think you can't make the atmosphere more oppressing, you go and do just that. Alloy feels incredibly alive and above all, real. She has a wrought iron core that it took a lot to break, the operative word being took. This is realism, and I love it.
I instantly liked Kyra as well, she has all the setup of a probably-good-but-quite-shady character. Very good introduction. And Malice... the scene where Alloy found out just who was going to visit the stable was gut wrenching. For some reason I have a feeling that Alloy will offer to join Malice to save the stable. It would fit her somehow.
And the painting scene... damn. Not corny. One of the best 'breaking point' scenes I've read so far.
Read this in a single sitting. Fan-fucking-tastic. This is how it's done.
Took a break from my own fic to read this. Gotta say, three days later and here I am, wishing there was just one more chapter. Keep it up.
Finaly I'm up to date. XD Aaaaaand now I have to wait......... That's mix feelings. ...
But I have to say, 'finaly !' I knew Alloy was going to break at some point. In fact, I expected it 2 chapters ago. But there it is. Now she can settle things with Grit and move forward. That's some awesome writting you've got with those two characters. GJ
Do you know when the next chapter is coming out?
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Soon! I expect this weekend! You actually commented just as I was putting the finishing touches on Chapter 14's draft, and I haven't forgotten the wall of wonderful comments here I have yet to reply to. I apologize again for the wait, but I expect Wasteland Economics to resume the weekend of the 9-10th.
7362999 Hey ! That's good news. I was wondering when it would resume too. That's the problem when you catch up a story, you read 13 chapters in one go, then the wait is worst than ever.
I'm hyped for the following days. ;)
Alright, I once again have apologize profusely for the lack of replies until now. These comments really do brighten my day and it means a lot to me to read y'all's feedback. I don't know if I've mentioned this before elsewhere, but the conclusion to Chapter 13 was actually the first scene I ever wrote of WEcon. I had the loose idea of the story in my head, an outline for the events around it, and a clear picture of Alloy's personality, and that sorta proof-of-concept scene led to me thinking I might actually want to put this story to paper. So reading comments and responses to this chapter (and chapter 14 as well) have just touched me to the core, and I can't thank each and every one of you enough.
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. I know I said this one before, but that nagging fear that I'm crossing the line into angst was very alive this chapter, and hearing that Alloy's struggle (and the emotional breaking point) went over well means a lot to me.
As for Malice, she might have a plan. Or maybe not! Maybe she has one, but she's bad at implementing it?
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No later than this reply, that's for sure. Alloy is definitely made of stern stuff, and she's dealt with a lot in her day. But everyone has their limit, and trying to write that limit took a few attempts to get right.
Glad you enjoy Kyra. She's a fun breath of fresh air from a writing standpoint, shaking up the dynamic of Alloy and Grit a bit, hehe.
Thank you. Just... thank you.
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This means a lot to me, too, since I'm constantly worried about how the story reads as a continuous narrative rather than serialized every couple months.
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Well there is one more now! And also another in the works! But thank you for your kind words.
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Thanks! I actually also worry a lot about how I write Grit. His personality and reactions to Alloy I always have to spend that little more time figuring out versus her reactions to him, and then filtering it through Alloy's perspective gets tricky, especially in this one.
I guess the main theme of this series of comment replies is "Ham Worries Over Everything." This is true. I worry over everything. Anyway, onto the chapter 14 replies!
Finally, that was cathartic.
The griffon came a bit out of nowhere and I dont really know how to react to her, but she's right, the tension was enough to choke one, good to have some levity.
5 chapters in under 24 hours? Have to take care that I don't OD on awesome sauce and REVIEW TIME's!
Ohh Malice, peeking your head up yet again, one can only wonder what kind of mechanical wonder you are trying to make, please let it be your boat and not some warmachine to take over the world. Please let there be a sensible way out of all of this instead of blood, gore and murdering all around, please Alloy, put those skillpoints into Speech and Barter so you can get a good deal for them all!
You know youve got a good book when a reader jumps from there chair and starts fist pumping the air good job XD