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I fucking love Captain Thrush, she is so awesome!
Some typos and such.
Thrush.
Missing quotation marks and something else.
but nice job on this!
Exciting to have this here now! And man, I wasn't expecting Precious to end up coming. It'll be interesting to get to know her along with the other three. And a new star, too.
Still love the detail of how one person made the switch. But yeah, not everyone's going to be on that side, justified though it would be to see her as a grown up.
Ouch. Though I guess she was pretty scary. Still, kind of harsh given how she ended up feeling about her. But I guess sometimes it's easy to hold a grudge even if you know it's not entirely fair.
Neat I guess that even the one who . . . had some problems might be back up and running.
Having Pythia around is going to be a treat. She's so spunky.
I'm liking the scrying. Good way of introducing that in action.
Woo! I'm glad they're bringing it! There weren't too many named weapons that weren't, you know, Blackjack's, and that was probably the most fun and the best named. Even if they may not be able to keep it long.
Whoa, they've already changed the name? They've been making good time.
Gotta love Thrush.
That's a delicate way of putting it.
. . . It depends on exactly how drunk the person drinking it already is. Luckily for Scotch . . .
It's nice they kept the name.
She has a point.
Was she following them? In any case, I like the idea of the sound.
This should be good. And it's weird, she'd been in PH from relatively early, but we still ended up knowing Pythia better. Granted, might even be true of Majina, too.
Sure, but she's more durable than you or Majina, even if she'll be easier to hit than Pythia.
Editing:
medium? description:
A year after Horizons, Scotch Tape and others struggle to find their place in the world. When a zebra seer uncovers a mystery, Scotch Tape and three others journey to the last place they imagined: the megaspell ravaged wasteland of the Zebra lands.
suggest "Scotch Tape [is still struggling]/[still struggles] to find her"--might as well keep a stronger focus, and using the "others" twice in two sentences reads poorly.
long description:
of the horrible battle for the hoof.
"hoof" should be capitalized
Pythia knows the only way to learn what that means is to go there herself
"there" doesn't make sense in this context, because the only thing for it to be attached to is "the Eye of the World," and if she knew its details she wouldn't need to go there to find them out. Suggest something like "Roam, the Caesar's old capital"
Together, they'll travel to a far away land
suggest "faraway"
who's pain and suffering have yet to be known. T
"whose"
There may occasionally be references to Horizons and the original Fallout, but a new reader should be okay
"Fallout: Equestria"
Prologue:
row upon row of enobled corpses there
"ennobled"
year for us to get down here for your mom’s things,Majina,
need space after comma
there, one way or another.” Scotch Tape said
period should be comma
But they’re not coming any more,”
suggest "anymore"
Still, Pythia’d helped out during the bad times a year ago, but Scotch Tape still wasn’t sure what to make of her.
Should drop one of the "still"s (I'd suggest the first)
Her sharp yellow eyes narrowed at the scroll she was reading if trying to stare a hole through it.
"reading as if"
camp," she said, fixing her piercing yellow eyes on Majina before snapping her gaze to Scotch. "Nopony
non-directional quotation marks
and twin tiny smile formed on their faces.
"smiles"
where once there’s been an ominous
"there’d been"
The mare didn’t turn at her voice, and so Scotch Tape walked closer and closer to that edge.
suggest dropping the "and"
there was a word for half a parabolic arch: time bomb.
suggest word to "name", "term", or something similar
before I keelhaul the lot of you scurvy searats! She practically danced
need a closing quotation mark after the exclamation point
green faeries and let's get going
non-directional apostrophe
Just another hint she didn’t belong here anymore than in her old stable
"any more than"
A year ago she come to Chapel as part of a raid and had just stuck around,
"she had come"/"she’d come"
the little town that once been home to so many orphaned children like herself,
"that had once been"
Haven't read Project: Horizons. I'm not quite sure I'd want to.
But I'm going to read this anyway.
It looks bloody good.
And I've heard Sombre is a really good author, so...
Let's go.
Finished reading Project Horizons
Shall now read this with joy.
I think I'll read Fo:E Heroes while I wait for more chapters on this to come out.
Scotch leaving the Chapel reminds me of when I visit settlements in Fallout 4. I don't stay nearly as long, but there are usually a few more structures and turrets when I leave.
Okay, finally starting this. Man, it's like I never left!
Commentary
So Blankjack is still unconscious, then, right?
Have you ever noticed that objects with names like that are NEVER a good thing? You'd think it could just as easily be some wizard-king's glorified telescope, but no...
Pythia is the kind of prophet I like. She doesn't do vague, semi-helpful advice and obscure omens, she tells you what needs to happen in clear language to the best of her knowledge. And, yeah, she's sarcastic as hell, but on the scale of evil cultists who talk to stars, I think that qualifies her as a shining paragon of justice.
From what?
I love this line. The things a civil engineer gets nervous about...
Found one of Pinkie's stashes? :D
I really can't tell whether this is a curse... or an adjective.
Say, I think we know one of those...
I assume she's not talking about old Equestrian money.
Oh, hello tiny Rampage. Nice to have you aboard. :D
I'm kinda wondering what happened to Bastard as he kinda disappeared when BJ went into the tunnels to the final fight.
I really liked his character and how he was terrified of being considered part of BJ's little group but was still warming up to it without noticing.
Is it bad that this typo makes me want to write a fan fic about thrushes evil pirate twin Captain Thrust
A little odd for the perspective to be in the third person now. I had expected it to be shifted into Scotch Tape's point of view since that's the format of the majority of FoE sidefics.
Nevertheless, I'm very happy to see this sequel being written, as Scotch was one of the few characters from Project Horizons left with an open ending. I eagerly await many updates.
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It would've been cool if he went with them
I'm gonna miss blackjack but here's hoping for an expy
Illustration for Prologue by oo00SET00oo
Whoa Thrush has nail holes too? Jesus was she gangraped as well?
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it happened on her ship
6640719 Just my opinion, but I think reading Project Horizons will give you a better understanding of Homelands.
...but then again, I might be nominally weird. I've read Fallout Equestria, Heroes, Wings, Heroes with Wings, and that odd thing with Puppysmiles before even starting Project Horizons. What can I say... I got into MLP:FIM for the complex morality and quality-of-character studies in the show series, and the Fallout Equestria universe is where they can be most easily found in fanfic.
SWEET CELESTIA A SEQUEL!?!?! How did i never notice this before, i was with you from about halfway through horizons, which i started after finishing the original, stayed till the heart shattering end. I laughed outloud at blackjacks shinanigans and cried at the many deaths. I even developed a crush on blackjack and often found my mind wondering. something like that had never happened to me before. My desire for fallout equestria could never be sated. Then i discovered you had made a bloody sequel. Im about to dive headfirst into this and i will not regret it. I always wondered what happened to these four after they left
Ps. I also seem to remeber a certain two ponies butting heads in much the same way Scotch and Pythia are and knowing what dirty little thaughts bounce around in your head i may know whats in the future for these two
Or maybe majina, anyway sparks are gonna fly and im gonna love it
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Eh, so far I'd disagree, the only things Horizons would help you understand in this chapter is
Just how bad and why Stakatteri like Pythia are feared and hated. (It jokes around about warding them off like vampires with crosses but they were a lot worse than that)
Explain in better detail why Precious is a dragonish pony. (Her back story is a lot more solid and she looks less like a bad oc when you know it in context.)
And the Seahorse incident mentioned which isn't entirely needed to know for this story.
And you're not alone, I've read
Fallout Equestria
FoE Project Horizons
FoE Murky Number Seven
FoE Hero's
FoE Pink Eyes
FoE Merchants of Hope
FoE Memories
FoE Treasure Hunters
FoE Guise of Chaos
Thumbs up for being A sequel to project horizons. Will start reading it now.
Time to start this..... God it's soo good so far and yet so sad already..... damn it Somber....... anyway time for me to go into emotional distress
Needs a space before the name.
From who, Siri?
Sure there is - bad Hollywood sequels!
Somber-senpai, please let there be some scenes with BlackJack in them. Even though they're on the moon
Well, it's been a long time, but I've been putting this off for long enough. Time to read the beginnings of this epic saga!
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There is nothing stopping you! Captain Thrust, violator of the two Seas! Oh, and don't ask about the title - he'll get quite detailed about one of those seas if you let him!
It's a pun on C's, you silly. Shame on you for looking here, trying to see foul language!
Needs a space
I am ready also hello lady spike. Don’t deny you look exactly like him. Your definitely his hibred daughter or cousin ore something.
I like the start of this story. I find it interesting how Scotch Tape describes Blackjack. From Bj's perspective in PH she seemed a bit less terrified and at points almost family.
Ok nopony you know has been raped, eaten or murdered yet. Consider yourself lucky, Scotch Tapes.
Didn’t read Project Horizons because a story with almost 2 million words is very intimidating. But I’ve managed to understand the plot of Speak without it, so I think it’s time that I’ll give Homeland a try.
The Zebra homeland is something we don’t see very often in Fallout Equestria stories. I’m interested to see your take on it. We even have two Zebras in the party which is nice. I especially like Pythia’s stripes, because it gives her a very distinct look.
That said, the motivation of the characters is a bit weak. Pythia I get, she just learnt that some sort of world destroying shit could happen if she doesn’t travel to the Zebra lands. But Scotch and Majina don’t seem like they’re really on board with that. It looks more like that there are bored and have nothing better to do. Which isn’t a good motivation to travel across the world to a place they know nothing about.
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Blackjack wouldn't be there at this time. That happened like 200 years after the events of this story. All we know is that BJ is floating around, stalking people at this time, so she just might make a Cameo appearance.
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Spikey Wikey clapped them cheeks, but obviously the master of cover ups would not allow that information to spread.
Finished Horizons, caught up with Speak. Now it’s time for Homelands :DDDD
Came*
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Actually she was made from Project Chimera last i checked. Sanguine (back when he wasnt a ghoul) is who actually made her into what she is. I cannot deny that for sure a relative of Spike's was no doubt used tho. To similar a coloration to deny that. Hell, wouldn't surprise me. They did have his mom in the treasury of Canterlot after all. And mama dragon was same color as Spike
Somber would you be apposed to me taking notes on the zebras while I read through the story so I can add pages for them on th fandom wiki? I've wanted more accessable resources for this kind of lore for ages, and I'm sure some others could benefit from it as well. I've never done something like that before but I think it could be super helpful for some people!
very fun. fallout: zebrica??
The first part of the prologue is taken directly from Horizon's Epilogue.
Well, time for a new journey :D
Have to say, so far I'm not hooked at all by the premise, but I'm gonna keep reading anyway.
Excited to see more Pythia and Precious, though. Precious is already well on her way to being my favourite character in this.