• Published 27th Jan 2015
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Fallout Equestria: Retaliation - PLMROTOK

A surviving general of the great war has seen first hoof the atrocities committed by the zebras to ponykind. She will stop at nothing to launch a counter attack at the reaming zebras forces for the crimes and deaths they've committed. Will it work...

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Comments ( 3 )

This doesn't look bad at all. Although you could use a bit more capitalization, like winged steel fortress should be Winged Steel Fortress or Winged Steel fortress (unless of course we're speaking of fortresses with actual wings made of steel; but really, having it as a name sounds better) and sometimes there are apostrophes missing (it is = it's =/= its).

Let someone go through it a second time or do it yourself, you'll catch many of the typos.

Other than that, good story and good luck for the future.

5557504 Thanks for the comment, glad to see you like it!:pinkiehappy:
I will take all of those points in mind, and I thank you again for taking the time to spotting them, which I otherwise would have missed out.:twilightsmile:
Have good day and I hope you enjoyed, thank you for reading.

*Balefire, *developed
And that was just the description. Will work myself through chapter 1 later.

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