Wow. I thought you speed Makin chapters. Glad ta know ye still written some more chapters.

very nice

haha misty is "bad food"

More now or else!

The only bad thing about this is that it ends.

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Yep I is the fastest writer eva lol

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Fish are friends.. not food (Bruce the great white shark)

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More coming... typing as I speak.. speaking as I type...

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Its not over yet.. oh you meant this chapter.. yep it ended

On an unrelated note.. I would like to find another proof reader to help out. Mine has school and stuff that takes preference.

5078016 ART THOU NOT FINISHED WITH THY CHAPTERS!? THOU SHALL FEEL OUR WRATH!

5258726 Im guessing that means... you have been enjoying my writings. I hope you enjoy the side story too, and I am working on the next chapter right now.

5259832 yes plz!

5260246 http://www.fimfiction.net/story/222101/fallout-equestria-nightmare-night enjoy

5260563 yyyaaayyy!

Obligatory Iron Will
Obligatory Deus Ex Machina
Obligatory Alicorn.

This story, why? Why have Iron Will? Why an Alicorn? Why so many ponies that just happened to survive? This is all going so fast, too. There's no time for emotional attachment. It's just one thing after another.

Sorry... but those were not "minor" editing issues, or sure the issues were minor, but the amount of them... Still sending shivers down my poor pre-reader back! I would say get a pre-reader. yes I know you say you have one, but sorry get a better one. My love for little Hero is still bigger than the annoyance over the rather common mistakes, and I wish that you will spend the time that your story deserve and polish it up, or get someone to help you with your story that know what they are doing.

"when out to find what the sound was. " Should properly be went

", his rancid breath fogging the glass as his eye took in the devastation inside, " If he is undead would he be cold and not fog the glass up, ghouls are not dead thou, or not fully, but just brain dead, so the undead you use later on could be removed... either way you can't have foggy zombies.

"but she watched as her companion knelt down and light up her horn." Past tense, so would be lit.

" The purple pony opened one eye slowly but not seem to focus on anything. " Missing a "did" in here.

"they just burned through the vault door." Remember to start your sentences with capital letters.

"You will .." An ellipse have 3 periods in it, and no space in front of them.

"Ahead they saw the door leading to the entrance chamber of the vault, and the vault door" We are in pony land, so that would be stables

"Heros" Should be Hero's, you have made this mistake multiple places.

" "you.... me.... ground.. fly"" This hurts my pre-reader eyes... Ellipses have 3 periods, neither more or fewer.

""I hope some of us made it". " The period is on the wrong side of the "