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Thank you. I'm trying to keep her as consistent (...and consistent in her inconsistencies) as possible. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story so far.

{transmission begins} I like your story. That is usually not how I start a review but I have to get this out of me. I can't remember if I commented on this fic (do excuse this I've got problems with my hippocampus) or not, but your fic has something others do not. Mainly, the protagonist, rather violently finds that she is a mother. This got me interested (as well as a lack of any real grammatical mistakes) and has promise for further developments. I shall stick with the above story and see how it progresses. As for OCs to be included here, I have an idea. It isn't really an OC as much as a concept for one. A pegasus-zebra hybrid, two of the things a waster hates the most, all compressed into one package for easier hating. I have NOT seen a single fic, be it Fo:E or not, that included one. Just throwing it out there, a striped pegasus, if there can be striped unicorns and earthies why not pegasi?
Awaiting the next chapter-
-janekfan
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3775506 {transmission begins} P.S. I seem to have forgotten to add that I might be interested in the editorial work you mentioned. If your offer still stands, would you be so kind as to message me in one way or another to set a schedule of sorts? I am a busy, busy man (medical school seems to take up most of my life).
Handing You my offer and subsequently signing off-
-janekfan
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Problems in the limbic system, eh? That's not good. I have some memory issues from TBI but I find that forcing myself to repeat something over and over in my head is a good way make sure it makes the transition to long term memory.

Yeah, with the motherhood issue I wanted a bit of a sucker punch and added character depth/motivation to go along with her drunken insanity. Also, my editor and I do so very much try to eliminate all those pesky grammar errors, I'm very pleased that someone took notice. They drive me insane when I see them (especially in published works).

A Zegasi or Pegazebra? Brilliant! It shall be so.

I hope to have the next chapter out within two weeks.

Indeed I am still looking for an editor once mine moves on to bigger, better and more important things near the end of February. I would love your input on Volume II (as of right now it will be chapters 9-20). I'll come up with a frame/schedule for it and let you know. I generally transition the chapters (in parts) from MS Word to Google Docs for sharing and editing, and I would love feedback on certain concepts and ideas that I'm looking to include.

Lastly, if med school is driving you crazy, just remember this bit of dialogue from Futurama's 'Beast with a Billion Backs'
Bender: "Are all the tests gonna involve drinking?"
Calculon: "It never occurred to me before, but yes."
Bender: "Woohoo! Just like med school."

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Hopefully not, but he is rather helpful in catching all the errors that I make when writing... and that I miss when reading. Is your editor at McMurdo? I'm glad you liked it. I hope to have the next chapter up in less than two weeks.

This is fascinating. I've read a vast volume of fanfiction in my time, and I'd puzzled as to how you got so many downvotes, and so few views. Consider me eagerly watching your work for the next chapters (and avoiding borrowing it for my own FoE spinoff). Good luck, keep going, and take care.

-Sage

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There's this phenomenon revolving around a special talent I have, that being people immediately and intensely disliking the things that I do without knowing me or paying any real attention to what it is that I'm doing. I defy ratios and probability.

I almost instantly got five dislikes when I posted the first chapter... before I even had five views. Then there was an even ratio of views to dislikes (about seven) but I also had four likes... which meant I had more likes and dislikes than views... again. Nobody has actually made any comments as to there being anything wrong with the story (only with conventions of FOE stories in general). There are comparatively few grammatical errors in the text, everyone that reads it seems to like the story, enjoy the main character and think that it is funny. But... it's also an intentionally confusing story without a lot of action going on and a lot of people seem to hate FOE in general, so who knows? I could just suck at writing.

Stay safe and have a great week.

3787254 Screw those people

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I do think it's funny. Especially when I've had some of the best trolls and insult artists in the world, the Drill Instructors of the United States Marine Corps, chew me out. IEDs, deploying troops, combat training, machine guns, sandstorms, running admin for 60,000 Marines and Sailors. It's just like after all that... 'that's the best you can do? Fail.' These dislikes and whatnot just make me raise a bemused eyebrow. But, they are entitled to their opinions, should they legitimately dislike the story for real reasons, that's their right... which I may have just... you know... fought and bled and saw my friends die to uphold.

I feel like this story was rushed ... alot (dont hit me) but I mean it's like girl gets shot in the face. Girl wakes up. Girl gets "saved" by a unrealistic character. Girl who barely has ANY fight experience decides she wants to kill the equivalent of a deathclaw with a minigun using the worst gun ever (really a service rifle? Varmint rifles are better than those heaps of hellhound crap) Girl has very short fight scene with no injury to the protagonist . Girl finds out she is a mother and IMMEDIATELY goes baby crazy (I might not be a girl but I would just not care and keep drinking whiskey for all the protagonist knows those kids died years ago) I mean this is like a bad cheesy soap opera. I still like it but I really don't want to like it.