Great story, I enjoyed it very much. I loved when Graphite was starting to develop feelings for Sunny and the two became a couple and the ending of Chapter 30 and the also the Epilouge were very heart-warming.

5466731 Thank you for the kind words. I'm glad you liked it. On a bit of a side note, there are tiny spoilers in your comment. Could you edit it if possible?

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Yeah I know what you mean, and the reason I thought that was because of her colour and the pan over her eyes. :P

5475765 Done. Sorry about that it kinda slipped my mind.

Loved the story! A couple grammatical errors here and there, but nothing major. The epilogue wrapped it all up quite nicely, though I was hoping to see how the other ponies he had affected fared in the end.

Fuck me. Great story, shame it endend there.

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