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damn, now this is a good story
I'm always excited whenever I see a new chapter for this fanfic has been released
Now I must say this chapter felt a little bit rushed, like it needed more polishing (at least the 1st half of it) We get to see Angel going through the motions of checking her patients, merely to explain the readers what everyone had been up to since we last saw them outside the stable.
*I have mixing feeling of Angel talking so openly about her experiences in her home stable (outside of flashbacks) with Rexio, but you could contribute that she's grateful with him after the life-threatening adventure, and it's nice that she found some common ground with him.
*Really happy with how you approached Ditzy's relationship, we get a happy closure to it instead of going back and forth.
*We got the obligatory talk about virtues out of the way, adding more things for Angel to think about.
*My favourites parts of the chapter: the whole talk with Jack, and the interactions with Pinkie and Fluttershy (I'm glad that they are contributing to Angel's psyche instead of just being along for the ride)
Now that the New Appleloosa arc is almost over, time to go home and deal with Black Widow and Cutter
Great chapter! I was eager to read a new one. And I am not disappointed, a great deal of character development :)
"considering we’re always for the ride with Angel"
"considering we’re always along for the ride with Angel"?
"that was a mixture or annoyance and"
"that was a mixture of annoyance and"?
"no matter how idyllic we have made out home to be"
"no matter how idyllic we had made our home to be"?
"he hadn’t been poised into despising me like others due"
"he hadn’t been poisoned into despising me like others due"?
"I begun to explain, but Rexio was already"
"I began to explain, but Rexio was already"?
"those guys ya found ready by then"
"those guys ya found be ready by then"?
"often turn to alcohol or other stimulants when dealing"
Isn't alcohol a sedative, not a stimulant?
"My instructor would have told me to kick his forehooves"
"My instructor had told me to kick his forehooves"?
"and leaving no trace,” he finished, taking another swing of his drink."
"and leaving no trace,” he finished, taking another swig of his drink."?
"Uttering a deep sight, I lowered my gaze."
"Uttering a deep sigh, I lowered my gaze."?
"thought, quickly waging what little options I had"
"thought, quickly weighing what little options I had"?
"And the same time though"
"At the same time though"?
"Before opening my mouth, thought, I took a quick look around us"
"Before opening my mouth, though, I took a quick look around us"?
"somewhat recovered thought still looking shocked"
"somewhat recovered though still looking shocked"?
"he was high more capable of remaining calm"
"he was highly more capable of remaining calm"?
"And why exactly are keeping him chained up in your basement?"
"And why exactly are you keeping him chained up in your basement?"?
"The next moment, thought, I had realized"
"The next moment, though, I had realized"?
"There’s my dragon, I thought before I could help myself, recalling with amusement Jack’s worries."
Is that a random jesting guess that happens to be correct?
"I told him, my smirking. “Which I believe"
"I told him, smirking. “Which I believe"?
"had initially assumed,” I replied, sighting with a relief"
"had initially assumed,” I replied, sighing with relief"?
"covered by a robe with a hood slided down on face-"
"covered by a robe with a hood slid down over his face-"?
"I do, I’ve noted his body’s posture and paid attention"
"I do, I noted his body’s posture and paid attention"?
"Your usage of the world ‘relative’ makes me feel"
"Your usage of the word ‘relative’ makes me feel"?
"Could pursue of medical knowledge be considered a virtue?"
"Could pursuit of medical knowledge be considered a virtue?"?
"held in her mouth a copy of Wasteland Survival Guide."
"held in her mouth a copy of the Wasteland Survival Guide."?
"learned about hellhound's physiology, as well as how to to exploit"
"learned about hellhounds' physiology, as well as how to exploit"?
I wonder just what the nature of Angel's lie there is, and why it hits her so...
And on another note, it looks like Ditzy may have meant "just friends" only in the romantic sense, not that of... other associated things. :)
Another good chapter!
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You're welcome. :)
Finally!
Great chapter as always.
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Thank you^^
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Glad that you enjoy the story^^ And yeah, I was confliced when writing the first half, though it was mostly centered around whether it should have been two days between the previous chapter and this, or should it be the very next day. In any case, while writing the chapter I had a huge amount of work in real life to do, so writing in those conditions might have affected the chapter :/
*I figured it would be a good idea to clarify just what was the reason why the rest of her Stable disliked her as a child, as it was indicated through the story so far. Also wanted her and Rexio to bond^^
* Yep, can't wait to introduce another Angel's "fling"/relationship. I mean, if her first one was a ghoul, then what kind of creature the next one could be...
*I wonder if the readers like you will figure out what Angel's virtrue is before I will reveal it... or if they come up with something else that would actually be more fitting to what I have in mind
*I'm honestly surprised how everybody seems to enjoy the concept of them talking to her, I expected at least a few negative comments on that
Actually, all of that is still a part of arc one. Trust me, you will see when it ends
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Thanks^^ Sorry it took so long to finish it, but I am starting to be convinced that forces of evil are conspiring for me to not finish this story. Why else would I had found a job that is exhausting and borderline mentally abusing while writing the longest chapter to date? ;p
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Thanks for pointing those out^^
Hm, actually, turns out it's actually in the depressant class of drugs. Anyway, changed that part^^
Just a random jest. I was tempted to have Angel say that out loud, buuuut nah. Could lead to Angel finding out that Watcher is a dragon, and I am not ready to open that Pandora box just yet, thank you very much
Yeah, it totally won't be fun to keep this information to myself for the foreseeable future and only hint it now and then
Hm, I'm not exactly sure what you mean here...
Thank you^^
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Thanks^^ Sorry it took so long
9090636
"*I'm honestly surprised how everybody seems to enjoy the concept of them talking to her, I expected at least a few negative comments on that "
I think it's a neat feature. :)
Well, it probably could be written badly, but I think you've been running it well so far.
"Why else would I had found a job that is exhausting and borderline mentally abusing while writing the longest chapter to date? ;p"
Oh, sorry about that.
"Thanks for pointing those out^^"
You're welcome. :)
"Hm, actually, turns out it's actually in the depressant class of drugs. Anyway, changed that part^^"
Depressant, that's the word! Thanks! I was originally going to call it a depressive in the comment, but when I went to check my memory, I didn't find a drug class called that. Looks like what I got wrong was actually just the name. :)
"Just a random jest."
Thanks.
"I was tempted to have Angel say that out loud, buuuut nah. Could lead to Angel finding out that Watcher is a dragon, and I am not ready to open that Pandora box just yet, thank you very much "
Fair enough, though I do wonder if it'll happen before Jack gets back. :)
Eh, even if it doesn't, he'll probably still have a reaction to it when it does happen, assuming he finds out.
"Yeah, it totally won't be fun to keep this information to myself for the foreseeable future and only hint it now and then "
:D
"Hm, I'm not exactly sure what you mean here..."
Well, one possible interpretation, possibly the most natural, or her original "just friends" statement includes a cessation of carnal activity between them. Just friends, with no romance or sex. However, I think that the statement is also compatible with merely a lack of romance, while still allowing sex, and the end of the chapter appears to indicate that that is the correct interpretation.
"Thank you^^"
You're welcome. :)
I’m dying for my next dose of the dear Dr.
Ineed my Angel! Pleeeese....
I have to say I'm really enjoying this Angel is certainly an interesting character and I'm looking forward to her next 'experiments'
huh. the ambiguity of this sentence scares me
FORESHADOWING
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> I wonder if the readers like you will figure out what Angel's virtrue is before I will reveal it.
Acceptance or tolerance, isn't it?
>Things like appearance, appearance, gender or health status don't matter to me.
This phrase perfectly describes her willingness to put aside prejudices, but we are not talking only about appearance, are we? Perhaps even more so is hinted at by the speech about a pony with a different morality, which she read in one of the first chapters of Fluttershy.
And I can only imagine her reaction when she realizes. Such thoughts usually cause beautiful swirls of images that simultaneously calm and excite.
The good doctor seems to have gone from saying 'sweetie' to saying 'darling'.