The frozen wastes of Stalliongrad teem with conflict and strife as pony, machine, and the wild battle ferociously for control. One unicorn, on a mission she did not ask for, makes her way into Tartarus itself.
Thanks for the comment and the encouragement! ;w; I'm working on the next chapter, I know it's been... well, a while, but I don't want to give up on this story. It's my baby. I just can't find time to write with school. 13 is on the way, and I promise things get really good, very soon! Thank you again for the continued support!
The short version is, I love this story but I keep waiting for it to fall apart, because... well that'd turn this into the long version.
Since this post is directly to you I did want to add a few more personal notes. Literally day before finding your story I finally started to write one I've been thinking about for years, which also happens to be based around my character from a PnP game I was in. Even more interesting, had you combined Silver and Ghost, you'd have wound up with something pretty close to my Longshot. Point is, I really do want to see this story succeed. It's not just really enjoyable, I also feel a kind of personal connection to it thanks to similarities. (Don't worry though, they're quite different in the end.)
Good luck! I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this one.
8885676 Thank you so much! That really means a lot to me. The next chapter is in the works, and now I'm gonna work that much harder to make time to update! It's because life is kicking me in the butt right now, with school and such, but as I've said before, this project is my baby. I want to finish it.
And please, I'd love a link to your story, so I can give it some deserved attention! I'm curious about the similarities and would like to read it.
I'm still in the very early stages of writing it, I've got the Prologue done (well, it still needs some editing but mostly done) and am still working on the first chapter. So unfortunately, nothing's posted just yet. The similarities are just in both stories origins in pen and paper games, and how my main character seems to combine traits of your main character and her only companion (so far).
EDIT: Er, forgot to say but kind of important; I'll drop you a link as soon as I've actually posted something.
Welp, time to move this story from the "following" to the "favorite" pile... And done. Don't know why I haven't really done this before now really.
Ahh Bartender the bartender, such an imagination his parents had. Normally would I call foul, but in case of ponies are there properly a hundred or so out there called that name.
Welp… that job are not gonna end well. Silver will soon learn that if something is too good to be true, is it because a hellhound is hiding somewhere nearby.
Nitpicks: "so dark that I could see not a thing." I am pretty sure that the normal wording is "Not able to see anything" ad "at all" if you like "I flushed as I fell through the endless dark" I have no example of the right wording, but I am pretty sure that this is wrong. I think that the best way to do it is describing the feeling of the flush. "And… if I was being truly hones" Linebreak mistake " The whole caravan worked up in a frenzy and took off after them.” just "woke" "Oh. Oh. " Double linebreak mistake "I shook my head, fighting back the wave of annoyance that he would think that of me" Another double linebreak mistake “All right… salvage contract it is." You are missing an " in the end of this sentence
I love that Fanfic by a long mile! Keep it up Final! Looking forward for more chapters.
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Thanks for the comment and the encouragement! ;w; I'm working on the next chapter, I know it's been... well, a while, but I don't want to give up on this story. It's my baby. I just can't find time to write with school. 13 is on the way, and I promise things get really good, very soon! Thank you again for the continued support!
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Hey there, Final. Left a comment back when I read chapter one and now here I am, caught up.
Don't think I mentioned this the first time, but I found your story because it's /r/falloutequestria's book club story this month. Sadly it hasn't stirred up much conversation, but I did post something there. Rather then retyping it all up here's a link; https://www.reddit.com/r/falloutequestria/comments/8c8gr7/foe_bookclub_darkness_falls/dxv9xpf/
The short version is, I love this story but I keep waiting for it to fall apart, because... well that'd turn this into the long version.
Since this post is directly to you I did want to add a few more personal notes. Literally day before finding your story I finally started to write one I've been thinking about for years, which also happens to be based around my character from a PnP game I was in. Even more interesting, had you combined Silver and Ghost, you'd have wound up with something pretty close to my Longshot. Point is, I really do want to see this story succeed. It's not just really enjoyable, I also feel a kind of personal connection to it thanks to similarities. (Don't worry though, they're quite different in the end.)
Good luck! I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this one.
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Thank you so much! That really means a lot to me. The next chapter is in the works, and now I'm gonna work that much harder to make time to update! It's because life is kicking me in the butt right now, with school and such, but as I've said before, this project is my baby. I want to finish it.
And please, I'd love a link to your story, so I can give it some deserved attention! I'm curious about the similarities and would like to read it.
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Yeah, real life sucks doesn't it? Heh.
I'm still in the very early stages of writing it, I've got the Prologue done (well, it still needs some editing but mostly done) and am still working on the first chapter. So unfortunately, nothing's posted just yet. The similarities are just in both stories origins in pen and paper games, and how my main character seems to combine traits of your main character and her only companion (so far).
EDIT: Er, forgot to say but kind of important; I'll drop you a link as soon as I've actually posted something.
Welp, time to move this story from the "following" to the "favorite" pile... And done. Don't know why I haven't really done this before now really.
Ahh Bartender the bartender, such an imagination his parents had. Normally would I call foul, but in case of ponies are there properly a hundred or so out there called that name.
Welp… that job are not gonna end well. Silver will soon learn that if something is too good to be true, is it because a hellhound is hiding somewhere nearby.
Nitpicks:
"so dark that I could see not a thing." I am pretty sure that the normal wording is "Not able to see anything" ad "at all" if you like
"I flushed as I fell through the endless dark" I have no example of the right wording, but I am pretty sure that this is wrong. I think that the best way to do it is describing the feeling of the flush.
"And… if I was being truly hones" Linebreak mistake
" The whole caravan worked up in a frenzy and took off after them.” just "woke"
"Oh. Oh. " Double linebreak mistake
"I shook my head, fighting back the wave of annoyance that he would think that of me" Another double linebreak mistake
“All right… salvage contract it is." You are missing an " in the end of this sentence