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Wait. Is that... not a cliffhanger?
As for Echo... at least she's trying?
Chapter 33: Into The Alicorn
And Echo's new pipbuck is like:
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...but spammed at least 5 000 times.
And huh, this is certainly unexpected. But this was certainly a chapter I didnt see coming, and whisper just getting the balls of steel when dealing with echo. And she just has charisma. Seriously, its so rare to see a wordy heroine in this place, let alone a sneaky action one.
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Le Gasp!
It is true!
Such a wonderful chapter! I am quite enjoying Whisper giving morality lessons to Echo.
I've actually been reading the original F:E over the past few days, and I get a lot more references now than I did before. Makes me wonder what I might have missed from previous chapters...
Joke is on you. I updated my e-reader last week!
Good chapter, I'm very much enjoying Echo. I was worried that she was going to fall flat after the last chapter, seeing her having to learn morality and civilized behaviour is wonderfully fascinating.
Echo's basically Whisper's child... it's actually kind of endearing.
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Darn, you stole what I was going to say. Except that I see Echo fitting the "bratty annoying kid" trope better than the endearing one. Always a great source of irony and terror when your bratty kid is an ancient being that can effortlessly squash everyone around her with nary a thought.
Another fun chapter.
Yaay update
Yay good wrap up. Loving the story more. I enjoy the philosophical debates. I will enjoy the upcoming chapters i am sure
In order:
Oh fuck.
Well, fuck.
Everything went better than expected, thank fuck.
Echo is learning. :3
Snuggles! The next day will bring alicorn changeling snuggles!
Hmm it's interesting to see what happened to the enclave after the ... white towers were activated. Caught on to what was going on as soon as i read those colours on their armors. Cool to see that RD finally has her fanclub back.
Also was that your story with the rainbow dash clones running around? Or was that another one? Dammit i've read to much of these. Things start to blend together...
Hah. At the end of this half the Wasteland will know Whisper's secret.
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i think foe:PH is what you are thinking of, were glory gets hit with killing joke and turns into a clone of RD. cause glory was a loyalist to the enclave before she knew of the lies. so it turned her into the biggest traitors to the enclave.
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Nope, different Story. I meant the one where as part of a small side story the heroes run into one of rainbow's clones who runs around dressed as the mysterious mare do well before meeting another one where it's revealed that there are 18 or so clones of rainbow potentially runing around due to some minestry of awesome secret project.
I think it might have been... moralities something. Does seem to ring a bell.
Regardless i was just thinking how a RD clone would react to see all of this going on
I wonder if Whisper could teach Echo a spell that de-cloaks changelings? Then Aurora, Whisper and Echo could "check out" the entire garrison.
I hope the shirts they’re wearing underneath aren't red. It would be a huge bummer if a platoon or two of competent, well-intentioned soldiers was decimated for preventable reasons.
Was that conversation at the end referencing the recent Applejack episode or just a coincidence?
When she Twilights, she Twilights pretty hard.
8293102 Just your friendly neighborhood changeling!
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It's been a lot of fun writing Whisper. The setting is so well-suited for a character that relies on violence, which makes it a fun challenge to write someone who relies so much on words, instead.
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I've tried to keep it so this story can be understood fully without having read the original, which is somewhat easier for taking place in a different part of Equestria. That said, it'll certainly give a lot of background information to certain events, such as the story behind the alicorns and why the Enclave is in the state it is. This story probably gives some pretty big spoilers to that one, though, heh
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After the twenty nine chapters from first sighting to finally meeting, I was really worried that I'd inadvertently set up expectations that I couldn't fill! I'm glad to see that people are liking her!
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The tantrums will be epic.
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It seemed so perfectly fitting when the idea first came to me. The Council branded their enemies with the mark of Rainbow Dash, and it just felt so appropriate for the pegasi fighting them to embrace that as the Loyalists. I think Rainbow Dash would be proud.
Might tease them a little for being so slow about it, but you know how she is.
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It wasn't intentionally a reference, but I can see how it could look that way. There are certain themes that run pretty strong in pony.
And yeah, Echo can nerd out with the best of them!
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So I gathered that the two Raptors that engaged the third many chapters ago were both Loyalist/Dashite-controlled ships hunting down the third after the mutiny, which is why they were battling it out in such a remote place. Is that accurate?
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That fight was a part of the Enclave civil war between those two factions, though it's not clear which side was which.
The Loyalists that they met up with here were the crew of the Cumulonimbus, which we saw falling through the clouds on fire at the end of chapter 4.
Always look forward to this story updating. Thank you for your work!
Echo flinched at mention of Twilight being a bad friend before, and now she compulsively wants parchments and quills for notes in an era where ball point pens are to be had (for a price)...
...Nothing suspicious here, noope...
I am so in love with how you handle Whisper as a character. She's so endearing, and I find myself imagining her dialogue sounding kind of raspy and squeaky when she's in her natural state, which is rather funny when she's speaking seriously LOL
Also this is one of my favorite FO:E fics, I get excited every time a new chapter shows up in my feed.
Didn't notice this until my second read through, but this should be 'difference'.
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Given what the alicorns are, you'd have to expect that sort of thing to be possible from literally all of them.
Also, Whisper's got Dashites in on the long con. This will be interesting. Chrysalis is controlling her hive in part with the notion that coexistence is impossible.
Wooooow Whisper. It's so inspiring to know the most devastating things to you have been purely personal and exclusive to your race.
Now who else has a massive army and vendetta against virtually ever settlement?
hmmm...I wonder.
who. Has. An. Army.
Dusty- nah
starlight- nope
whisper- there's some sentimental quotations! Always knew we could count on you to be the philosopher.
Didn't the Cumulonimbus get vaped?
You know, when I hear "for the same reason we havent" I can't help but think that that's more like a "this bitch may be hard to deal with, but at least she isn't a complete cunt" more then "oh yeah, she's just a little angel".
It sounds like an excuse just not to kill her...not that they would manage without a serious fight.
I think of the difference between one punch man's serious and normal punch when I think on this.
...a faction of Dashites? Ohh, that is amazing. Applejack's Rangers, and now Dashite Enclave
That's about as nice a funeral speech as you'll get out of her
She's still so good at shutting people up
WTF.
Okay. That's, like, mega-bad...
Stop talking, Sickle
I wonder if she can actually identify changelings, or if all that was just deduction...
Oh! I forgot this...
Remarks and corrections:
> and in fact, are directly opposed to them.
should be "[am] directly opposed to them."
Well that's a lot to take in.
You know, it's been a while since this chapter came out, but I still wonder: was Sickle just not paying attention to what Echo was saying, or did she actually recognize Echo to be a potential threat to her (like the megaspell) or deserving of respect for taking so many raiders down by herself (like Whisper did with the mercenaries outside of Mareford)? Sickle was pretty pissed that someone took out Psycho and her gang before she could, and Echo just confirmed she was responsible. Sickle's lack of reaction seems rather surprising.
I am starting to get a little worried with the interactions between Echo and Whisper.
They are very much like a lecture instead of an actual interaction. To the point that it seems a little off for Whisper’s character to be the one saying it. She seems to me like someone who wouldn’t be used to leading.
Let's make a deal, Echo. You get to learn all about us, if we get to learn all about you. So, let's begin.
Do alicorns potty? And if they do, is it during flight, and do they specifically target freshly washed motorwagons?
Ohhhhh, so that is why they weren't allowed to loot the place way back then! Now you are doing some good storytelling, but it makes me groan just a tiny bit when characters does stuff in the past because it will give them a better outcome in the future, makes me think of people that play "choose your own adventure" game with a guide to get to the best ending, and so much of your style have gone away from the gamey tropes, and this happens for the second time!
Loophole, Whisper can just impersonate her instead! So ha!
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No. Not even close. And honestly, I'm kind of disappointed that you would immediately assume the worst of me and accuse me of that.
When I was writing the story, the whole Loyalist presence and the importance of the Cumulonimbus didn't even exist yet. Literally the last we were going to see of the ship and its occupants was it crashing to the ground, and it existed only to show a glimpse of the greater world and what was going on, and to help reinforce the whole tone of the Wasteland (and because I thought it was a cool visual). There was no "not allowed to." They didn't loot the Cumulonimbus for exactly the reasons that Dusty gave: because it was likely to be either held by Enclave or swarmed by other scavengers, and there was a very good chance of getting into an unnecessary fight that they could not win without loses. Especially since he was paired with two mares that he had such low expectations of. If he had a full crew, then he might scout it out and move in if it was just scavengers instead of Enclave, but he's not going to take that risk on a pair of unproven and questionable ponies.
I know I might give the appearance of having everything all planned out ahead of time, but it was almost twenty chapters later when I started to consider the possibility of the Cumulonimbus and its crew. So no, they didn't avoid it just to make the plot work nicer, because those plot elements didn't even exist.
> Hmm? Yeah, I got it in one of these cans. Just a ‘sec.
Why is there an apostrophe before "sec"? Even as indication something was left out/shortened, the part cut off that word is at the end. But "Just a sec." should be okay; this is spoken language after all.
So... I've been chipping away at this story for most of this week. As someone who has never read the original Fallout: Equestria, I've enjoyed this so far. The characters are interesting and complex, and you manage to avoid being overly graphic about the violence and sex while still maintaining the theme of the setting... even digging deeper than the original IP could due to the medium.
Echo intrigues me, and I suspect she might (or a part of her, at least) used to have been Twilight based on her mannerisms and color palette... but that seems too obvious and could be a red herring. I don't really know anything about FO:E alicorns besides that they're apparently several ponies fused together. Are they the setting's analogue for supermutants?
I am also curious if this will end up with Whisper starting her own hive, or even if it is possible for a drone to change into a queen in this setting. I am assuming so, since Chrysalis's hive fractured into several others. My guess is that it's a hormonal/pheromonal thing, where a drone will develop into a queen if the old one dies. Once Whisper fully accepts that her hive is gone, the metamorphosis will start.
But that's just a theory... a FANFIC THEORY!
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Echo certainly remembers being Twilight. But then, she also remembers being plenty of other ponies, too. Hive minds with shared memories can be weird like that. And yes, they're the settings analogue to super mutants, with a bit of an Equestrian magic twist! That's a good catch.
And yeah, a bit part of my thinking when writing this was that I really, REALLY wanted to keep to the themes and ideals that I enjoy so much in MLP, even as I'm writing a setting that really challenges them. I loved how the original Fallout: Equestria had that "light in the darkness" feel, and how those ideals persevered. It's a lot more interesting than "dark for the sake of darkness" some stories go for.
I won't give any spoilers, but I will say that I like your theory.
Literally just got done feeling as tho Rust was on fire or something only for that to immediately be confirmed basically... Uh oh...
Welp time to read the rest of the chapter now...
Future me here: it is really surreal seeing a changeling lecture someone on Honesty, even if that 'ling is Whisper. But it also gave a nice, solid view on how they look at such things and feel on such matters.