Reviewing my first-ever published work · 9:11pm Sep 25th, 2022
Hello! I’m just a writer giving some thoughts on my first-ever published story.
Five years ago, I wrote and published this silly little story. Now, I’m an English major and oh boy, did reading this make me cringe.
I can definitely still admire a bit of the charm. Even through all the mediocre writing and admittedly terrible dialogue.
Funnily enough, the premise of this fic was inspired by this paragraph:
Suddenly, her eye twitched. "Wait a minute..." She looked around in her bathroom. "Why do I have the feeling that..." She started, beginning to trot backwards. When her rump bumped into the wall, her eyes widened, screaming "SOMEPONY'S WRITING MEEEEE!" before she zoomed into her bedroom to hide under her blankets on her bed.
This may look like a SpongeBob reference, but it was actually influenced by the song Somebody’s Watching Me by Rockwell. While listening to that song, the thought of Pinkie Pie growing intense paranoia of a fanfiction writer creating a story about her just really amused me at the time.
After the beginning scene, I had written myself into a corner due to not planning a story whatsoever, so I decided to have Pinkie interact with each of the main six for fun reactions. I will give some quick thoughts on each encounter.
Twilight’s scene was probably the hardest for me to write, if my memory serves me correctly. I believe it was due to me writing myself into a corner, and it also had Spike for me to consider. I definitely do not like this scene, though I also don't hate it. The problem is that it just feels very awkward due to the subpar dialogue and the amount of ellipses… Yeah, I feel a rift tearing into my soul each time I see one of those. Ellipses are everywhere in this entire fic.
Fluttershy’s was mostly fine. The only thing that bothers me is the ‘ums’ in her dialogue, which only serve to create pauses in the writing and not in a good way. Also, Derpy mispronouncing Fluttershy’s name as Fluttershee is a reference to the YouTuber Vannamelon. More specifically, her Fluttershy has a conversation with Siri video. Definitely a fun video worth the watch!
Rarity’s scene is just insulting for Rarity fans, and to them, I deeply apologize. Even today, Rarity is difficult for me to write, but oh boy, is she horribly written in this story. Nowadays, I like to read my own writing aloud so that I can proofread appropriately and get a better gasp of figuring out how a character would speak. This scene is the worst one in my opinion, purely due to how I wrote Rarity.
The Rainbow Dash scene was mostly fine, but there were a few things I found weird. Specifically with Scootaloo writing fanfics about Rainbow. In retrospect, that just seems needlessly weird or random for the purpose of the story (both with Scootaloo writing fanfics and Pinkie reading them). As for Rainbow herself, I actually think past-me did a decent job with her dialogue. I can actually somewhat imagine this as her.
Applejack's scene is probably my favorite. It’s odd, because I remember feeling intimidated about writing her accent. But she’s actually well-done (for the low standards I have from rereading this). The conversation Pinkie and AJ have actually feels believable and natural. That’s just in my humble opinion, however.
As for Pinkie herself, I am not too sure. Sure, she is random in the show, but there is definitely a threshold for her. It really comes down to the question of how she would react to a clueless teenage fanfiction writer creating a story about her. Truthfully, I don’t blame her for panicking about me writing her.
I wonder how she would react to me writing about her today?
Overall, this was fun to reread due to reliving a bit as my 2017 past-self. It has a fun premise but poor execution. I remember really enjoying writing this but I was too lazy to proofread it. Now I enjoy proofreading just as much as I do writing. I thought about returning to this story and remastering it through sessions of proofreading and editing. I'm not too sure if I should do that or not, as it is my first story to ever be published. I dunno, maybe?
The hyphen in the title is staying though. 
Anywho, that’s all for this blog and my thoughts on the story. I just want to thank everyone for liking and favoriting this story. Even if it’s poorly written, I am glad it’s brought some joy and entertainment into some people’s lives. For that reason, I will always feel a sense of pride from writing and publishing this. 
