after a long absence returned to writing my story If you have any ideas Suggestions then write them.

after a long absence returned to writing my story If you have any ideas Suggestions then write them. I need to find more readers i plan to write 2 chapters soon

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[Dormi_san]

First of all, English is not my mother tongue so I'm sorry if there are any grammatical errors in my comment (I blame everything on Google translate)

Well, some time ago I commented on a possible development for the relationship between Cozy and Grogar in a forum that you made a long time ago:

The story would be better taking Cozy Glow as Grogar's adopted daughter, my version is that Grogar was once a good king along with his wife Rosanna, ruling over those who were despised by the ponies (cows, donkeys, goats, etc) and seeing that his subjects suffered he had to take action against the ponies, which they did not like since at that time they were considered a superior race, then a pony murders his wife causing him to go into a frenzy of rage turning him in the father of monsters , and the pony that murdered his queen is none other than the husband of Gusty the great, Grogar murders him in revenge and Gusty, not knowing the truth, thinks that Grogar is evil and goes for his bell, while Cozy tries to ask Starwilrd for help in order to save her father.....but it is already too late and in one last act of kindness, Grogar sends Cozy to the future thinking that by that time he would have already won and done of Ponyland (Equestria) a better place to the other races.

Another possible idea would be to add Chrysalis to the story to a lesser extent, due to the fact that Flutter Ponies and changelings are related in some way. My theory is that like in the show, the Flutter Ponies join the battle against the Smooze but this battle ends up being bloodier than expected, Rosedust (Queen of the Flutter Ponies) and all her subjects who participated are infected due to a mysterious illness caused by the remnants of the Smooze, she goes with the other races in search of help but they allege them for fear of catching it and in a last desperate act Rosedust asks Grogar for help and he turns them into changelings (not he is known as the father of the monsters for nothing) and as time goes by Rosedust's daughter is born who is none other than Chrysalis, and Chrysalis upon hearing the origin of her species gives birth to a hatred for all other races.

You could also use G1 locations for certain scenarios in your story like Flutter Valley or the Midnight Castle.

[Kaliber]

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thanks for the comment could you put the same comment under my story did you at least read it?.

[Dormi_san]

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Yes, I do