(Don't worry, Chapter 3 is coming. This art piece in fact gave me more motivation to do it. So be patient ;) )
May
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Struggling to write Izzy, any advice? · 9:22pm May 24th, 2022
Really struggling on how to write Izzy Moonbow for my ongoing FanFic: Sprout's Sentence.
Sometimes I'd almost write her as an oblivious, obsessive stalker who doesn't understand personal space. Which is not her character at all.
That's why Sprout's Sentence has gone through so many unplanned hiatuses between chapters. I'm struggling to not to make Sprout and Izzy's relationship seem abusive, obsessive, or unhealthy.
Can you give some tips on how to write Izzy and Sprout's relationship? It'd really help with the story
I'll try to post a chapter in the summer. So until then, catch ya later.
Honestly, there is only one way to go through with this story.
Just write what you think is best for this story.
Regardless of wether it’s intended or not, EVERYONE will try to look WAY to deep into things and not just enjoy the story for what the author is trying to tell.
But no matter what, there is always gonna be a split side to things. Some people will look at it as one thing, and some will look at it as another thing. Even the most minimal and smallest detail.
As for Izzy, it’s kinda easy. Write her as more naive, but overall sweet, good hearted and truly means well. If she does something that might seem “stalker-ish”(which I think is ridiculous), have her apologize and admit that she didn’t intend for it to be like that. Honesty is the best policy is what everyone says.
For Sprout, you can have him be annoyed by her at the start, and even call her out on injuring him. She genuinely feels bad, maybe even gets emotional, and swears that she will make it up to him.
And this is where I can get a little serious on things: Have chapters where it’s just Izzy after she leaves the hospital. She interacts with ponies from Maretime Bay. They find out what happen to Sprout, and they pretty much say he deserves what he got after what he did. Because, they have a right to feel that way. Don’t hold back on what they’re feeling.
And Izzy, being the good mare that she is, defends Sprout. Saying that, even if he did everything that he did, he doesn’t deserve being in a hospital bed all alone. And that he should be given a second chance.
You can even have Sunny Starscout on the fence about Sprout. She OBVIOUSLY remembers what he did to her home, but is that what accepting Friendship is about? Holding grudges and being glad somepony is in pain? Maybe have her visit him in the hospital and tell him how she feels.
And maybe have Sprout ask Izzy why she defends him. And she says “That’s what friends do.”
Then, really, it’s simple. Have them get to know each other. Differences and Similarities. Maybe even have Sprout defend Izzy from his mother Phyllis. She doesn’t have to be racist. She just reprimands Izzy and Sprout tells her to stop it.
Even if you have Izzy feeding Sprout, just have her explain that she really wants to help him anyway she can.
Once Sprout starts moving, have her help him walk. Have her motivate him. Compliment him. Make him feel good.
That’s stuff you can do. But, overall, write how YOU want to write. Don’t worry too much about what others think. Because it’s YOUR story. Do what YOU want with it.
Hope to see the next chapter soon.
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As for what similarities they have, have them talk about which Pizza is the best. I’m pretty sure there’s a pizza place in Bridlewood. Or at least around it somewhere.
Maybe even have Sprout talk down about himself(possibly have him say that Hitch should’ve just fired him). Have Izzy reassure him that he IS worth something. And that Hitch wouldn’t have done this if he didn’t think Sprout deserved a second chance. That he IS a good deputy. Have Sprout say that no pony has EVER complimented him before. Except his mother, of course.
This may seem mean, but I’ll say it anyway: Have done guys sneak into Sprouts room and have them record Sprout just laying there in his body cast and just insult and belittle him. He can’t do anything. Izzy then tells them to leave, maybe even uses her magic to take the camera away and possibly even levitates them out. Again, she defends him. That’s to far, even if criticism against him is kind of deserved.
Then, eventually, when Sprout gets out of the hospital and redoes his community service, and after getting to know each other, Sprout starts to question his feelings for her, and ACTUALLY goes to Hitch for advice. Hitch tells him to just ask her out.
There’s some good advice right there.
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Thanks for the feedback!
This actually gave me the motivation to continue the story and get out of my writer's block, because ever since Make Your Mark came out, I kinda lost some motivation to do this.
So I'll take your advice to heart.
Once again, thank you!
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Not a problem. Always happy to help.
And, I just thought of these few ideas for the story:
1. Remember when I said have Sunny be on the fence about Sprout? Well, this could be an opportunity for Sunny to learn something about friendship. Have Sunny and Izzy have their first major fight. Have them argue about whether or not Sprout deserves to be forgiven for destroying her home.
2. Since Sprout is gonna be in the hospital AND still has to do his community service, have Zipp be his stand in deputy. Maybe, even have Zipp question if she wants to be the future Queen of Zephyr Heights. She really likes being Hitch’s deputy. Hitch even enjoys her company, but he feels it just isn’t the same without his childhood friend.
3. This I just thought of too: Have Izzy confide in Pipp, maybe even after she has her argument with Sunny, about her POSSIBLY having feeling for Sprout. Of course, Pipp goes GAGA over this, and encourages Izzy to enact on those feelings. Maybe even give Izzy a makeover. After all, Pipp LOVES makeovers, right? And that also coincides with Sprout as well. Have Sprout be SO confused about his developing feelings for Izzy, and even confides in Hitch about them. Hitch basically does the same thing. Maybe even give him some pointers on how to ask Izzy out.
So, those are a few ideas. BTW, make sure to check out my Equestria Noire series when you get a chance. Thanks and have a nice day.
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I'll keep them in mind ;)