Warning Spoiler ahead! I need some prereaders willing to tell me I'm insane.

Okay, I re-re-rewrote chapter 9. However, I want someone to double-check to see if I had left any gaps in the story flow.

I don't want Grammar or Spelling corrections, this is just to see if I had the wrong name, or a sentence is out of place. Or it just sounds weird.

Creative Criticism is wanted! Note this is the chapter before my Editor has a chance to point out my flaws. I don't need a second editor just someone to make sure she doesn't yell at me for doing something stupid like change perspective mid-paragraph.

So if you are willing to look at the raw unedited mayhem that my mind produces here is Chapter 9

Remember if you read it I want comments! Send me a message or leave a comment here!

Comments

[lpirtle]

I don't have any edits to suggest. It is however intresting to get a behind the scenes look at the writing/edit process.

[ShadowStar_IMHP]

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Thanks for the look over. I’m just worried I missed something when I rewrote the chapter. Mostly the changes were in the interaction between Morpheus and Nightmare Moon.

[EverfreePony]

I don't need a second editor just someone to make sure she doesn't yell at me for doing something stupid like change perspective mid-paragraph.

Oh, she'll find a reason to yell at you anyway...

Seriously now, the chapter should be done soon.