I did something wrong (update #2) · 2:52am May 5th, 2021
I... might have messed up Mind Over Matter a little bit... because I think it's coming to an end much earlier than I expected.
Okay, here me out: Leo has his cutie mark. And he's almost fourteen, which is an adult. So in his mind, he made it all the way to adulthood without slipping up. Which means he's happy and won't slip up. Plus Ivory Spark told him to cut Blue Mist out of his life entirely, which is advice he'll take. Soooooo... I might have oopsied up a little bit telling the story because of that. He already knows he won't slip, and taking Spark's advice to not see Blue Mist means all tension is lost, and all that's left is to write the ending. So... fuck. Cause there's other shit I wanted to add.
Let me see how I can work around this... cause if I can't then the story will probably come to a very sudden, very abrupt end.
Update: I think I've come up with a solution to the corner I've written myself in so I can get in all of what I want to write before it ends.
Update 2: I have an outline for how to fix the hole I've made, but... now I'm conflicted on if I wanna use it or if it should just straight end here.
If you feel like it's coming to an end, but still have things you want to add, then why not write a sequel?
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Welll, the problem is that the things I want to add... actually, let me see what I can do
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I mean, I guess he could just actively disregard Spark's advice... but I really don't like that...
Write the end and then add bonus chapters with stuff you just wanted to add. Could be an (alternate ending).
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The stuff I wanted to do would come before the end, but I mean, I guess we could get very sad very quickly. It'd only be about a couple of chapters of happy stuff before getting back into it for the final section of story.
*puts on bad advice glasses*
Wing it!
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ah yes my favorite glasses
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You could also make.it so that he receives contrary advice from another person he respects. Give him a reason to doubt Spark, perhaps not entirely, but in regards to this specifically.
There should be stories of different colors for different ages.
I love this story. Maybe you could write a sequel to Leo after the end?
I guess the obvious plot point would be the friction caused by Iris persisting in trying to get Leo to meet with Mist, maybe getting their friends to go along with it. Maybe she'd try to meet Mist on her own to try "make sure she's safe" and Mist uses her as a means to get at him... or she starts up on Iris. The girls very trusting, vulnerable and eager to please, after all. The ambiguity of the Mist situation could be drawn out a bit longer for this, but it would have to be settled definitively eventually.
Use the authors ace in the hole: retcon