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  • 12 weeks
    The Girl who Really Didn't Just Live

    As you might notice from my blog title today, I'm revisiting The Girl who Didn't Just Live. Last time, the story died and was replaced by the short-lived A Hogwarts Harmony. Which was replaced by the even shorter-lived ARM (I don't think I've released even the full title for that one yet, let alone the first chapter, but it's pretty close to DOA)... and a recent comment

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    6 comments · 185 views
  • 16 weeks
    I'm not afraid to die.

    No, don't get me wrong, I'm not suicidal.

    The thing is... this morning, I fell ill. It was probably a couple days ago when it actually started, but despite repeated measuring, I didn't have a fever. That changed last night- my temperature shot from normal to a moderate fever overnight, left me with no energy to anything when I got up.

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  • 22 weeks
    The Girl Who... really didn't just live after all, I guess.

    Pardon the twisted title up there, but I couldn't resist. I am, after all, talking about TGwDJL: The Girl who Didn't Just Live... but also died.

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  • 38 weeks
    Hiatus... Expired!

    Hello.

    For the last while, despite a few updates to some stories (I guess TGwDJL got a rewrite released seven weeks ago...?), I've been on Author Hiatus for the last while, and now I'm finally coming back. I've restabilized myself, and I'm ready to resume writing, and actually getting stuff done once again.

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  • 45 weeks
    She who did Far More than Just Living

    Hai.

    So, we now have The Girl who Didn't Just Live Chapter 22 live. It was an absolute nightmare to rewrite, I can tell you- it took a small eternity to make sure there was actually a reason for Hailey to resurrect her mother. Not her father, though, that part ended up getting dropped from the chapter... yet it still grew by a thousand words or so.

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Mar
16th
2021

On the Implications of Rewritten Works · 10:20pm Mar 16th, 2021

On my last blog post, I mentioned the great parts of OtIoPW's outline that got missed, and talked of rewriting the story in place. I've been very reluctant to do that, even though the response on that post was generally affirmative, because I would be transferring some 55 chapters to "Side Stories of Crazy" to be stored out-of-the-way. That's nearly 85% of the written material- and the comments would not go with it!

On top of this, whenever I reread OtIoPW, I find myself disliking the first several chapters. Why? The same reason everyone else is dissing it: The plot device I used to set everything up... should have rendered most of the story moot. And it was very much a ponies-dominate-everything scenario, which I don't like.

Unfortunately, this started at, like, chapter two. And I'm not all that willing to try rewriting 98.5% of the story in place.

So I got to thinking about it. One of the things that bothered me on rewrites was just how long and predictable the Papa Tango was. And the easiest way to nullify the ponies-dominate effect is to make ponies not dominate: Change how magic works. Which is pretty easy, but requires me to go even as far back as chapter one.

Now, if I'm rewriting as early as chapter one, with changes this large, the rewrite- just like OtIoPW did with The Gate- actually falls under one of the exceptions, meaning I can cancel OtIoPW and publish a rewrite.

So I set up another writing environment, then rewrote how magic works, how the Papa Tango works... and ran into a problem: With the new system, Lyra won't be making the Papa Tango. Yet, I still want that to happen. So I made some more tweaks, and started making notes for the new outline. Just because Lyra won't be little miss god horse doesn't mean someone else can't be challenging the laws of physics!

On this note, I'm thinking I will probably be rewriting OtIoPW as a new story, with a new title, with a new structure... with an outline that I will endeavor to stick to, even if I have to adjust it from time to time. What are your thoughts on this? And what would you like to see different in a rewrite, up to and including various events happening- or not happening?

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I personally thought OtIoPW was fine, but if you feel like a rewrite is needed I won't complain

It would be fine.

I suppose it all depends on how much of the HP canon you want to keep for your story and which parts you want to nullify. Do you still want to go with the OP HP characters concept? Do you still want to gender bend the male HP characters? Do you still want to shame the Hogwarts staff? How many Voldemort's plans do you want to keep intact? Maybe you want to throw him out or have him join the Legion of Doom? Aside from a standard wizarding education, what can wizarding Earth or muggle Earth give to the Equestrians in exchange for what they give to Earth? What are the MLP villains doing while ponies are attending Hogwarts? Maybe an OC villain from either world will show itself. What about the other Equus races?

Just some things to think about.

From my experience with reading mlp/hp crossovers is that it is really hard to balance the two canons for example Scoti alew prewitt an its sequels pretty much throw out both canons while keeping trace elements. However this particular story throws a spanner in the fact that the cmc are not sorted into gryffindor simply because the hp protagonists are there. Another hp/mlp example takes a completely different approach of having mlp canon happen in the background with hp canon immediately shot out the window by sending harry to equestria pre Hogwarts. However this story and its predecessor the gate were both unique in the fact that massive amounts of equsreins wind up at Hogwarts pretty much throw the entire wizarding world off balance. While I enjoy the genderbending i also enjoy seeing the effect the mass influx had. In the end I would be sad to see another of your stories cancelled. However I can see your reasoning for the need for another rewrite. Though might I suggest combine elements of your previous 2 iterations with whatever you devise to fix the issues you see. At the end of the day though it is your decision. Best of luck.

Blitzlego

Twelve THOUSAND ponies is a bit much. Otherwise it's fine either way.

What is that with all the mlp/up crossovers, that I still didn't encounter a single bad one. Each is doing something different and interesting, yours was the same.

I really liked what you did though in Implications, it was good. I'd personally like more races present, just imagine what havoc would a couple of dragons wreck for example : )

But it'd be still good otherwise, the most important part for me is the contact and relations between those different worlds, and it was quite great in the story already.

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