Close Combat chapter 1, after the fact · 10:00pm Jul 27th, 2020
First off, I gotta say the reception is a bit lighter than it was with Cozy? I'm thinking this is either because it's completely original characters and/or because the romantic comedy genre isn't as popular as many of the others? Regardless, I must never forget that these projects aren't really about y'all!
So a good brony friend of mine offered constructive criticism on my story so far since I requested it. I confess that I'm very new to this genre (and most genres actually) and I wanted feedback from an actual fan so I would know how to improve myself. Well he offered two words of advice! The first is, apparently kisses in romantic stories can't and shouldn't be timed! Okay partly that's because of the way my mind works. It's very precise and methodical. But I should probably keep that in mind in the future? This is an emotional project after all!
His second bit of criticism was the use of the word "butthole" in my story. He felt it was childish. Now I confess that that's probably also because I wrote this story! I like to mess with my significant others playfully and they often referred to me as a "butthole" in the past! I mean, by it's very nature, love is not a heavy rational thing. It's entirely emotional and because of that, I would argue that people can and will get childish! At least I know I always did? Regardless, I'll tone it down a bit anyway because as Marybelle learns to accept Guyrin, it's more than likely just gonna turn into a playful love thing down the road anyway.