Idea feedback · 1:16pm Feb 10th, 2020
To whoever wastes their time reading this (also questioning how you found this blog), this blogs is just me asking for critics on certain ideas that might be written into stories.
- (displaced) An old man with power from three anime series (Whitebeard, Makarov, and Captain Yamamoto), along with two of his grandchildren (Zoro with two other abilities from other animes) (Ezra with two other abilities from other animes) goes to Equestria (mild RGRE and Anthro) to gain a new life. (Equestria has adventure guilds and monsters from multiple series though not the series power so monster from FF15 but not the abilities of them)
- (maybe displace, power lottery or something) A man with the powers equal to a demon lord goes to Equestria (Not yet know the method) and opens a bar. (not Anthro)
- (power lottery) An old man perishes and is given 5 abilities as a gift (for being a kind soul or prepare for a great evil to come, is not yet decided) and reborn into Equestria as an earth pony. (Anthro)
First one: The thing about trying to put multiple powers/characters into a single Displaced is that they can end up too overpowered, thus preventing the character's growth, not unless you go by some sort of Saitama route where they're op but they suffer from depression.
Second one: This one might work more in your favor if said demon lord starts off weak and must progressively get better with his powers over time, doesn't learn them quickly and will still make mistakes to show they are still human mentally.
Third one: May suffer the same issues as the first one more or less depending if the power lottery gives you good powers, overpowered ones, or gives you mostly bad.
As for how I found you blog: Anyone who uses the word "Displaced" can be easily found via search.
5203786
First of all: thank you for your feedback of ideas i will try to change this accordingly to the feedback given.
Second: idea #1 this to talk about an old man, with already ridicolous abilities but mostly sad background with his grand children that has the abilities to grow even if they were already op (1 wise old man with sad backgrounds, 2 grandchildren that although are overpowered, can still grow cause possible enemies might appear) (the universe will scale to this idea so monsters from multiple series so probably pulling monster from monster hunter, ff series, etc) (multiple povs)
Idea #2 : i plan something similar background as urimbas embonhart 'angel of darkness'
Idea #3: it will obviously be the fact that with every power comes a price (specifically stated in the website when you roll this powers, i just didn't reveal them just yet cause you know secretive and all that) https://powerlotterychallenge.weebly.com/power-creation.html
5203791
Good good, at least you're being smart. As long as the main character has room to grow, still acts like a human and has flaws like one despite having said powers/body along side them having something relatable to the reader. Your character should do just fine, not unless your spelling/grammar is a bit behind? An editor can help out if you can find one.
5203796
Understood, and thank you for actually taking the time to assist me with these ideas. I have been thinking about them for a long time but I always felt they were never good enough. Also, I might try to get an editor but we will see, currently, Grammarly is assisting me to write.
5203803
No problem. Btw on a side note, when you post your story, be sure to go to Default Feature Groups option and turn it to OFF, also be sure to avoid the comic con/merchant cliche. While it is of the Displaced lore, it's not required to have as your beginning, you can try a different take and give readers something new.