One chapter ends · 1:25am Oct 15th, 2019
And many more begin.
I present to you the sequel I’ve been wanting to write for years, but haven’t been able to formulate until now.
We’ve got dents and we’ve got quirks, but it’s our flaws that make us work.
And many more begin.
I present to you the sequel I’ve been wanting to write for years, but haven’t been able to formulate until now.
Woo! Downvote time!
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You don’t have to tell me.👁️🗨️
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You have two actors in one paragraph.
Sentence fragment. Consider using a semicolon in place of the first comma.
That should be an em dash.
For all these reasons I would downvote, but I also read the damn thing and it made me giggle—you earned yourself an upvote.
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I made your fixes.
Also, yes, the goal is to coax a smile, if not more, so I’m glad I succeeded.
5139668 Congrats on hitting the sinbox!
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wooooo
The most ambitious sequel in FiMFiction history!