Printed version of 'The Monster Below: Nightfall' update 4: Revisions completed · 8:28am Jul 13th, 2019
Hi everyone
Well, after six months, revisions on 'The Monster Below: Sunfall' are complete. So glad it didn't take two years (!) like the first book.
Here's a list of everything that was changed:
*Reduced the word count by about 30,000 words by trimming unnecessary sentences and words.
*Fixed up and cleaned grammar and punctuation.
*Deleted the chapter where Chrysalis' changelings attack Canterlot after Silverspeak is released from prison for pacing reasons.
*Thorax and the redeemed changelings from the show leave Equestria so as to not interfere with efforts to track down Chrysalis and her changelings.
*Chrysalis is mentioned much more frequently to build her up as an unseen menace before she finally appears.
*The brain chips have been replaced with Luna using powerful crystals to create a dangerous, continent-sized spell that will take control of Chrysalis and her changelings and force them to surrender, which Chrysalis then hijacks and uses to take control of the army.
Up next is formatting the story in PDF form, and then completing the book on Lulu. I'll continue to post updates, and hope to have everything finished up by the end of August.
Nice !
Awesome!