sneak peak/ help wanted · 11:10pm Apr 24th, 2019
If you have any ideas on how to improve this dream/ premonition then please leave it down below otherwise I thought I would share some of the rewritten bubbles story and have the community heavily involved with it. I thought it would be a nice experiment to try and if it works who knows maybe some of my other stories *cough* Lone hunter *cough* could really benefit from this.
I'm in a place filled with snow and crystal with 7 different symbols floating around a purple dragon head with green spikes down the middle. The symbols are (in no particular order) three diamonds, three ballons (two blue one yellow) three pink butterflies, three red apples, a purple star surrounded by smaller white stars, a cloud with a rainbow colored lightning bolt, and a star with a glimmer around it.
I don't know why but I feel like going towards them is good. I add my hands to my running increases my speed by a whole lot and soon I'm no longer in snow but a wide open field. I barley resister the difference other then I can feel the grass between my claws. As I get closer I feel happier like I'm meeting an old friend but also immense dread like when I was a kid and did something wrong and hoping my parents wouldn't find out. I also notice the symbols glow brighter almost unbearably so.
I find my self screeching to a halt so I can block the light from blinding me. Once the light dims I see a burning village and the residents screaming in terror as they run from the flames. They look like human horse Hybrids, Kinda like Jackbowman but more colorful with smaller muzzles, and some have horns, others wings but most with neither. I follow the sounds of a terrified screaming child that I hear among the chaos. I don't know why maybe its some latent maternal instincts, maybe its the need to prove myself but right now all I know is I need to help whatever that child is.
I soon reach a burning building, The difference there are a couple of creatures wailing in I presume heartache as I see a little one on the second-floor window. Letting out a mighty howl I rush into the building. The heat from the flames feels very real but I can manage for the time being. Quickly making my way upstairs I find the child's room blocked by burning lumber I shoulder barrage the weakened wood a couple of times to get it to break down, hearing the kid scream in terror at my entrance. He is small white with brown spots across his body. I immediately rush to him, the floor giving way as I run. I grab the kid and fling myself out the window where I see the symbols once more.
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5049058
Awesome
in my own typing fingers i say!
"with restrains, suspense, and waiting. these single words have an impact on the reading audience, and the writer grins as the expressions of surprise was outstanding to him/her"
Yeah, keep on experimenting.
5049078
And I will thanks ^w^
First off, you've immediately got me hooked. Nice job!
So is this going to be for an opening chapter, cause it's a hell of an opening!
5049090
Why thank you and it is but the mane issue is what comes after it
5049092
Hmm. Maybe the main character wakes up and tries to decipher it but comes up short. He/she isn't sure if it's literal or metaphorical and struggles to try to recall every last detail.
5049095
That's good I was trying to go for what happened in the dream happened irl
5049096
Could be that a slightly older Spike that later discovers that he is the seventh Element of Harmony?
5049097
I'm a fan of the elements being even numbers instead of odd
5049100
Oh okay. Hmmm. Maybe one of the Element bearers has to retire for some reason and Spike takes over?
5049102
That can work but that might be difficult to explain from a outsider looking in. I will definitely give it some thought tho.
Side note I can pm you What I have if you want
5049103
Sounds great!
5049104
I sent it
Nice