Jan
11th
2019
Need some opinions, thank you · 1:43am Jan 11th, 2019
So, now that I'm back in the proverbial swing of things, I've finally been able to catch up on the ideas I had when I first set out to write Roseluck's Realization. I won't reveal when exactly, but I am nearing the first, of two planned, erotic scenes.
The question that I have for all of you is as follows:
Would you rather I place the erotic scene into a normal chapter, or have it be its own independent chapter? What are your reasons for your choice?
Thanks in advance, guys. I promise not to keep you waiting a freaking year and a half this time around, haha.
Oh, also, go Colts! (So obviously no writing on the next few weekends lol)
I'd say it would depend on whether or not you want the erotic or cloppable content to be skipable. I do know that some authors like to give clop warnings in chapter titles and often design those chapters to be glossed over if the reader isn't interested in those kinds of shenanigans. Making them almost one-shots in a way, whose existence bears no real consequence to the story.
However, I would personally prefer seeing these erotic elements integrated naturally into the story's normal chapters, without their needing to be some sort of warning or break readers can skip to if they're not interested in such content. As I find these scenes to be part of the natural flow and upswell of emotions characters feel for one another, and it can be jarring to be riding those same waves of emotions these characters have for one another only to be hit with a skip to here to avoid clop or have the chapter end simply and be taken right out of it.
Since you're asking for personal opinions: I have absolutely no problem with authors keeping the erotic parts of their stories integrated with the rest (no separate chapters). I feel that with that kind of separation 1) the reader who skips the sex scenes inevitably misses out on more than just sex (fun and intimacy), and 2) it's distracting and often makes the scenes feel disconnected from the story because of the inherent (forced) break in flow.
Do what you think is best, though! And either way, thank you for the story.
In my humble opinion,I would say to place the scene where it makes the most sense. It’s when there is a divergence that it breaks the immersion the most. Or if it is shoehorned in just to be there. Mind you I am speaking only from limited experience and will have to face a similar situation in the future. I will finish by saying that I truly enjoy reading your tale.
Some people don't like a break in flow but a properly written fic can be skippable and still be enjoyable with a decently written before and after transition. I enjoy the option of a skip because sometimes I'm just in the mood for fluffy romance and cuteness and not so much the scenes of a night of intense interspecies lust.
As long as it flows it should not matter .
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Love your avatar.
Personally, I'd prefer if the erotic scenes were nestled within normal chapters. I don't know what you're gonna do with them, but I'm assuming these scenes won't be entirely superfluous. Fun, sure, but also character-building.
I feel like separating erotic scenes from the rest of the narrative will tell the reader that they're unnecessary, and that you can skip them and not really miss anything, which I'm assuming is what you don't want.
Also, new chapters, yes.
Simple answer. In chapter marked off in case someone wants to skip
I've seen the separate chapter thing done with Vinyl and Octavia: University Days and it worked out fine but I don't really mind either way. If someone doesn't want to read it then they can always scroll down a little bit. Just don't put a warning like "EROTIC SCENE COMING UP" or something that may break the flow of the story.
Great to hear this little gem is continuing the race, and glad that you're back on your feet.
I'm going to give you the same advice I once gave to a friend: The key to a good erotic scene is that it should feel natural. It shouldn't feel like you just, pardon the phrasing, rammed it in there. Love is different for a lot of people, but I always personally found it to be an expression of love. It's as emotional as it is physical. You should want somebody not just to read it, but to feel it. Not so much feel it on an erotic level, but to feel it in the heart. That light, airy feeling you feel in your chest as endorphins rush from the heart and into the rest of your body. Your audience should be able to feel what your characters are feeling. That's the true potency that is the erotic scene.
I think that you get more power in the lead up. Breaking the scene off into another chapter breaks the lead up. Sex is mechanical. It's boring. Okay, maybe boring isn't the right word. Object goes into oriface. That's it. The true enjoyment of sex is the emotional level it brings us to. It's the lead up
First off, f*ck the Colts. Second off, as long as Roseluck engages in romantic porking with a human, then I am satisfied.
Why fnck the colts? Because RaiderNation, baby... Which is ironic because the Raiders suck.
Why do I want a human to fyay a cartoon horse romantically? Because it’s a fettish that I’ve developed from being lonely and being a brony. I’ve made out with a Rainbow Dash plushie because I’m so lonely, and I’m getting fat so my chances of success in life are slim to less than what black holes leave behind.
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My best buddy irl is a Raiders fan and I cheer for them all the time :'C
Whatever is easier for you to write. I think that making an erotic scene its own chapter could potentially disrupt the flow of the story, but ultimately I think it’s up to your discretion.
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Hey, I’m a Raider fan too. I’m just accepting that they’ve fallen flat.
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Calm down raider Dave.
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I am calm. I’m just disappointed that they’re moving to Las Vegas.
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Okay did not know about that and it was that joking calm down and I'm sorry about your team raider Dave.
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I’m not Dave, Hal.
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https://youtu.be/sLrRUXS9Q7g
There you go here's where thats from.
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The real question is do you get my reference?
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Never watched 2001: a space odyssey.
I say make it it's own chapter also glad your back in action man
Frankly, I prefer leaving the explicit sex out entirely. It rarely delivers much emotional value to a story and usually comes off more as an attempt at porn than anything else, so my general advice is to dump it and focus on the emotional core of the story instead.
If you actually want to write porn, you always have the option of splitting it off into its own side story like a number of authors have done, and pulling it out like that gives you a lot more room to go into explicit detail without dragging down the actual story.
That said, if you do want to include it in the main story, I don't really care either way so long as the chapters are properly marked so I know not to bring it to work (I read on my commute).