Starting an overhaul of Spectral knight · 1:30am Aug 24th, 2018
I've been stuck for years now, trying to continue this story, with ideas coming and going, dissatisfaction with my work, and a mix of real life problems and pure procrastination. So, I'm cancelling the original and starting from scratch, using the original as more of a guide. The first major change, is that I'll spend a bit more time fleshing out the pre-undeath adventure and the war with the black baron. Secondly, I've decided that the current excuse for anthro ponies is just a copout, and as such, is redacted. Its gonna be slow, and grueling at times, but I have a direction firmly implanted into my head.
Some questions for you guys though. First off:
I wanted to do more with gunplay, and take a more western approach to the post-undeath world. Would you all be alright with that, or would you prefer more face to face brutality like in the original? (Note, I do want to keep the axe and seaxe, but I've taken a shine and inspiration from a bunch of classic westerns due to receiving a bunch of my grandad's old things. Which included a real leather gunbelt and hat, and a collection of old, but intersting dime novels about gunslingers.)
I wanted to focus more on the smaller scale stuff, hunting abominations with the team and looking for a cure. which means the war with the pigs is also out. What do you think?
Speaking of the team, I once again ask the fans for some ideas and characters, just try to reign it in. supernatural characters are fine, but do try to tone down the aspects of it. we already have an incredibly hard to kill dead man, and no-one wants to read a story where the main characters are so perfect that nothing ever goes wrong, right?
Have a bunch of 'Holy' adversaries, akin to clerics - in the style of well-intentioned extremists - and you'll see just how fine and perfect the undead main characters perform.
In the words of emperor Palpatine- Do it. You have what sounds like a good idea for revamping the story, and I'd personally love to see a newer version of a story I've quite enjoyed. More gunplay sounds good, just don't turn it into a Red Dead Undead Nightmare crossover. Maybe the main character could start out all medieval, then make or find some wild west tech (I kinda miss the old History Channel programs). At any rate, it's your story and I just hope I like it as much as the old version.
I Would say keep the pigs. Just so he can eat one.
I finished reading your story and thought it was very awesome. Didn’t expect it to get canceled but I guess that’s how it goes for some of the great stores out there like this one.
I was hoping that you have continued with this and would have reintroduced some of the previous characters like Blackthrone or Aryanne. I would have expected a trip with Aryanne where Brandon meets The Fuhrer and just looses it . Summoning the undead all around him without even knowing he did it. No loss of life though but The Fuhrer would’ve gotten the point when he was told what is really expected of him. Sorry, I went on longer on that than I expected. Adding that part about the Cervi man at the end of “Dead Man’s Hand” was making it most seem like an anime film I can’t quite remember. But it was getting good. Before I forget, what song was it when the girls danced around Brandon on stage? I tried to open it but it wouldn’t work.
Well, since you’re revamping it, I think NONEshallTell’s suggestion is good. Just keeping them (and the Cervi) as background characters would be just as good than having just ponies. The gunplay with the abomination hunting sounds like it would make an awesome store. Adding a few friendship lessons (not really “friendship” but sort of) so that it’s not always fighting, fighting, fighting. Like “I wept writing this chapter”, “Debriefing and a trip home.”, and the “Trottingham Music Festival” (both parts). If it’s still going to be a “Level-up” kind of feel, than adding one where he levels-up but can’t control it (while in a fighting scenario). I can’t think of anything else but so far you’ve had a very good story with this one.
Hope this helps with your revamping. It’ll be a while until we get to see anything so good luck and hope everything goes well for you. Thanks for this “lost/cancelled” story.
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its hard to write while working full time. I dont know how some of these folks do it. But I'm plugging away at it, bit by bit