Final Feedback - Lost Little Raichu · 5:46pm May 27th, 2018
Considering that the story "Lost Little Raichu" is going to an end (the next chapter will be an Epilogue with link to the sequel), I would like to ask as follow:
After reading this story from prologue to chapter 25, is there anything in your opinion that can be improved before we move into the sequel?
Is there any chapter that seemed flawed/out of place that the story would benefit greatly if improved?
Is there anything form the story that should be removed (scenes that seem unnecesery and hurt the story more than help)?
Is there something that you all were looking for and never appeared, something that I can add somewhere in existing chapter to improve the story?
Is there any idea you have and would like to share?
The idea behind this blog is for you to leave feedback/comments/ideas, and if you like someone's comment, upvote it (or downvote if you're not the fan). If someone will points out an issue in the story to fix, something in the story to improve or an idea what is missing and can be added, and this comment will get many upvotes, I'll try my best to put this idea into life. Let's call it a final improvement before this story ends and we move to the sequel.
If this blog won't get much feedback or ideas won't catch much interest, I suppouse I'll leave the story as it is.
I don't see any flaws. Just keep having Nica improve the citizens and maybe have them get her self esteem back.
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yes I think her self esteem and her helper syndrom how I called it could be solved in the sequel.
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What?
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You know, how she's getting everyone to train, use all their talents, stop being complacent.
I've had several ideas, all of them bad. The least bad one is to introduce a male romantic/antagonist (same egg group for consistency) which results in an egg and a side story about Nika learning the joy/struggles of being a parent.
You write good stories and I will keep my like and favorite for it. I am right now looking for calming feel good (happy slice of life) non adventure/heavy drama stories. You write good story even if it is not for me right now. Keep up your vision of the story while using the suggestions that don´t involve personal temporary (month-years) taste. Only thing I can advice you of is that tags are important for your story, Tags might spoil thing for the future story but it also will warn people like me who start the story and get sad it does not turn into something they might enjoy (that follows with the sequel of the story). It would get you less views but less dislike.