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  • 8 weeks
    Hinterlands Sequel: Bounty Hunters and Necromancers and Serial Killers, Oh My!

    Christmas is approaching! And what other way to celebrate the season than the tale of a necromancer, recently released from jail in a time of political turmoil, struggling to find her place in a world that hates her kind while crashing with the bounty hunter who turned her in?

    TUrban Wilds
    One's an impulsive bounty hunter with a thirst for adrenaline. The other's a reformed necromancer given a second chance at life. Together, they fight the necromancer's self-doubt (and also crime).
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  • 11 weeks
    Moondog Fanart

    Moondog got fanart.

    I know! I'm surprised, too! I've never gotten fanart before, but I guess you can share it if you think it's nifty? 'Cause it's nifty. It's of the moment where Moondog first takes up her crown. Art by StainedGlassLightHeart, commissioned by Level Dasher.

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  • 17 weeks
    My Little Pony: A New Generation Reaction Blog

    The time has finally arrived. A new My Little Pony movie is here to save us from our sad state of oligomicroalogoria (too-few-little-horsies-ness). I decided to record my reactions to it while watching, because why not? If you haven’t seen the movie yet, I have a brief, spoiler-free review before my reactions.

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  • 23 weeks
    The Behind-the-Scenes for the DCEU is All Over the Place

    I saw The Suicide Squad recently. It was pretty good. But it got me thinking: looked at from a film-history perspective, the DCEU is just the weirdest fucking thing. Seriously, look at it:

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  • 27 weeks
    1000 Follower Specialganza: Improving my Writing

    I recently crossed the threshold of one thousand followers. Who’da thunk? That’s a grand amount of people who think I’m something special. I guess I’m supposed to have a milestone celebration, right? So here it is: critique me!

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In Which I Tolerate Eclipse: Chapter 12 -- Time · 1:40pm May 16th, 2018

Alice on a good day is amazing.

“By the way, I love my gift. You shouldn’t have.”

“Alice, I didn’t!”

“Oh, I know that. But you will.”

Bella, Edward, and Alice are walking to the car after school when Alice drops that the Cullens are having a graduation party for her. Bella’s surprised it’s so close to graduation already.

In theory, I was anxious, even eager to trade mortality for immortality. After all, it was the key to staying with Edward forever.

CM + 1

But now, it’s finally hitting home to Bella that she’s abandoning everything she knows, taking a leap of faith. Edward notices her shock and tries to reassure her that she can wait. Bella, however, wants to be a vampire so she’s not a burden on the Cullens anymore; her humanity and mortality makes them all go out of their way to protect her. The two of them have yet another discussion on how Edward doesn’t want Bella to become a vampire. The conversation shifts to how Bella doesn’t want to marry Edward so quickly out of high school. There’s an interesting bit on how Edward was already a man, culturally speaking, when he was turned, but like most interesting things in this series, it’s not followed up on.

The next morning, we get another reminder (via newspaper) on the killings going on in Seattle. Edward says Alice hasn’t seen anything and is worried her foresight is failing. He wants to talk to Jasper, as he has some experience with this sort of thing. Bella and Edward skip school and go to the Cullens’. A debate ensues, with the family mostly split on whether or not to act. Jasper decides that he needs to show Bella what happened to him. He rolls up the sleeve of his sweater to reveal that his arm is covered in vampire bite marks.

Clinginess Meter: 16

See that? See all that? Sixteen pages. These books really love to take their time.

One of the things I like about reading fanfiction is that the short length of a lot of the stories means that, as fanfiction writers write, they figure out what works and what doesn’t. Sometimes, you can get writers who squeeze out musings on war and a full character arc in less than two thousand words without it feeling rushed. Here, there’s virtually nothing that hasn’t already been covered in some way.

I know I said this before, but I’ll say it again. Chapters should have some element of change in them. There needs to be something different between the beginning and ending of the chapter. This is a clear example of self-indulgence; it could probably be categorized as “character development”, but “character development” is all it is. It’s like the backstory chapters; it offers nothing else besides its central purpose. This is a book unable to do multiple things at once.

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Comments ( 3 )

It's like the rice cake of narrative progression. It exists, but there's so little to it that you have to wonder why.

He rolls up the sleeve of his sweater to reveal that his arm is covered in vampire bite marks.

Do you mean to tell me he was *gasp* BITTEN?! You know, like literally every other vampire?

So, Stephanie Meyers released a new book. It's called Life and Death, it's basically Twilight genderswapped

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