Okay, here's a little something to tide my mind. · 10:45pm Apr 11th, 2018
Thinking about this, I don't actually want to write anything new. I have too many unfinished stories left here as it is.
So how about a small tidbit within one of the many universes I created. Like say...Tobias and the good Celestia (AKA, not the one from Absolute Power, but rather the original piece.)
The Next Day
Everything feels like a dream, but I can touch it, smell it, and ever taste it.
To think that not yesterday morning I was still wallowing within my own self created pity, caused by a desire so selfish that it cost me the love of my life.
And yet now there he lies, sleeping ever so soundly. His face is peaceful, a slight tug at the corner of his mouth, a twitch of a finger here and there as he dreams about whatever it is that he dreams about.
I could always ask Luna, but I like a bit of mystery in our relationship. Tobias does too.
Gently, I slide over and lay my head upon his chest, sighing as I hear the slight thump of his heart beating against me. His scent...oh how I missed it. To wake up with naught but the memory of that scent day after dreaded day was agony upon my soul, and to have it now...to have it back where it will always belong makes me so happy.
I close my eyes and lay a tender kiss upon his skin, happiness flooding my every spark of being as I shimmy ever closer, ever more upon his body. The warmth it brings is...surprising, and yet wonderful.
We are one again, and if it takes me the rest of my eternity. I will make this last forever.
"I love you..."
This few paragraphs of text are well-written and portray feelings well enough without going into purple prose, but personally? It feels like it could be more - probably 'cause it is a seed for something that could be much more.
As I'm not exactly one who likes to read about break-ups of relations, I cannot say I have read this part of your work.
Mayhaps you're too used to drama? Why not write something out of your comfort zone? Using an different human OC, different circumstances, perhaps even a different view of Equestria as a whole?
I haven't been able to read too many good and completed Celly romances - with either pony OC or human OC. It could serve perhaps as a flashback to the good old times, when this cartoon and fandom were at its prime - since nowadays it doesn't fulfill you as it could?
Let me know what you think of this, as all this anon can do is speak out as requested.
As a long time follower of your works on here and fanfiction.net, I've enjoyed most of your stories. And I've seen the vast improvement from your original stories compared to your newest ones.
I personally never found the "drama" to be bad. In Tobias's position I also would have been upset by not only being lied to, but never being able to see my friends and family again. The dark version of the break up story is also one of my personal favorites due to the way you portrayed tia's psyche chilled me to the bone when I read it. It's obviously up to you what to write, but don't throw out any ideas that pop up in your mind just because they involve drama.
Moderation is key, especially if you are trying to avoid something like the "cosmo" act from mated for life. But don't be afraid to add conflict to your stories.
Very nice little tidbit. Just something kind of interesting, if you hadn't said anything, I don't think many people would be able to figure which Celestia you were talking about considering either one would've fit in this tidbit rather easily. Also, just out of curiosity, when you wrote Cinnamon, did you just end it early because you got bored with it, or was it always meant to only have two epilogues?
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I simply ran out of inspiration.
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Every little bit helps my good Sir
It is a proof that you haven't given up on your stories (more or less us. Your ever so humble readers)
Zamairiac, you are the only writer, that had me read almost all of your stories. I miss you man.
So, there was an error here that I feel compelled to point out.
This should have been
Anyways...
So, I was looking at the title pic for your story The Royal Break Up Chronicles, and in the upper righthand corner, is what appears to be a dragon. I just have one question for you. Who the f*** is that?! I mean, its purple, so it's not Ember, and it appears to be a dragon, so it can't be Twilight Sparkle...so WHO/WHAT is it?! That is all.