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  • Monday
    SA Round 134

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    Matthew trotted around the compound, very very lost. He was looking for a specific room, Room 4476. There was no 4476. There was Room 4475, a stairway to Tartarus, and then Room 4477.

    This was an issue. Room 4476 was where he had to turn in reviews. Where if he didn’t… well, he didn’t even want to think about that outcome.

    It was at this moment that Cynewulf came around the corner. And when Matthew decided to stop poorly narrating everything, and swap into dialogue.


    “Hey, hey Cyne!” he shouted to her.

    “Yeah? What’s up?” she asked.

    “Any idea where Room 4476 is?”

    “Uhh… yeah. It’s eight floors down. Didn’t you pay attention to the directions?”

    “Well… no… but I thought I could just follow the numbering!” Matthew cried.

    “Well, you better get down there. And soon. Ferret looks about ready to start choppin’ heads.”

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  • 2 weeks
    SA Round 133

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    The sound of Intern’s dragging feet echoed in the empty hallways of the Seattle’s Angels campus. Why PaulAsaran asked for his office to be in the most remote part of the compound was anyone’s guess. After nearly an hour of scouring rooms, he finally came upon one that looked promising, if only because of the glow under the door. He would finally get the help he needed. Reviewing for SA two sessions in a row was nothing short of brutal, but Red had been positive Paul could back him up.

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  • 4 weeks
    SA Reviews #132

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    The Seattle’s Angels found themselves crowded in a classroom, each sitting at a desk with a pencil and notebook set on top. At the head of the class, standing on top of a teacher’s desk with a ruler in paw, was Ferret.

    Matthew looked around, then raised his hand. “Didn’t we do this plot thread a few weeks ago?”

    Ferret’s stare bored into him, making him shrink back. “This is different. It seems that even after years of experience, some of you are still getting reviews in late. A week late!”

    “I don’t think I’ve ever been late,” Intern piped in.

    Ferret stomped on a switch. A wooden hammer fell on Intern’s head. He slumped over his desk, a red welt forming where the hammer had landed.

    “Anyone else have something cute they want to say?” Ferret gazed over the crowd as if daring anyone to talk back.

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  • 6 weeks
    SA Reviews #131

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    Paul’s eye twitched. If someone looked close enough, they might have seen the tension in his hands, like he was preparing to strangle said someone. “What do you mean, late?”

    Cyne merely shrugged, not taking her eyes off the TV. To her, it was just another day.

    Little did she know that Paul was descending into his own personal hell, memories of snapping elementary teachers and the eyes of dozens of fellow, on time students boring into his increasingly warm face. “We can’t be late.”

    “Sure we can. It’s called the passage of time. People get busy, y’know?”

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  • 9 weeks
    SA Reviews #130

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    “It wasn’t until this moment that Intern realized just how large the Seattle’s Angels compound was. Entire days could be lost trying to familiarize oneself with just a single wing, let alone the months it would take to explore the whole building. But as Celestia as his witness, he was determined to do it or so help him!”

    “Intern, you’re monologuing again,” said a voice from above. “And you’re doing it in third person.”

    Snapping his mouth shut, Intern looked up to see Red perched on top of a protruding branch from the wall. He nibbled on a nut as he regarded the befuddled temp-reviewer. “Is this what you’ve been doing all month? Getting lost and talking to yourself?”

    “No,” Intern said, arms folded across his chest. “I’ve been very productive this entire time.”

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  • 11 weeks
    SA Reviews #129

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    Corejo flipped through his Reviews folder one last time before making it up the stairs toward Ferret’s room. Yep, all there! He threw on a jaunty smile and strode up to her door… which was locked?

    A little red note taped to the door read in commanding read marker: OUT TO LUNCH. SLIP YOUR REVIEWS UNDER THE DOOR.

    Huh. Normally Ferret left the door open on Review Day so she could see their bright, sunshiny faces when they walked in. Whatever.

    Corejo shrugged and did as the sign said. And then he drummed his hands on his thighs. And then he looked around.

    Huh. Where were the shenanigans? There were supposed to be some wacky shenanigans that magically happened right about now at the worst possible time and inconvenienced him, because comedic coincidence dictated so.

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  • 13 weeks
    SA Reviews #128

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    “So, Cyne?” asked Matthew, “whatcha up to?”

    “Oh, you know, just getting some reviews in,” she replied.

    “But… there’s no school anymore. And no school means no reviews! We’re free!” he shouted, literally leaping for joy.

    Cynewulf slammed a stack of papers onto the table in front of her. “Ha! Shows what you know. Summer school is now in session.”

    “NNOOoooOOooOOOooooo…”

    ROUND 128

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  • 15 weeks
    SA Reviews #127

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    “Listen up, class! Today I will teach you all that is necessary to build a fanbase.” PaulAsaran spun on his heel and began to write on a chalkboard. “Take good notes. A five page essay and three mock-up reviews will be due next week.”

    A series of groans filled the classroom.

    Intern, wearing his now customary janitor uniform, stopped by PaulAsaran on his way to dump out a trash bin. In a low whisper, he said, “That’s more than we do in two weeks.”

    “Hush, you,” PaulAsaran replied. “I’m in my element.”

    “What do you mean by that?”

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  • 17 weeks
    SA Reviews #126

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    A loud thump announced the arrival of Novel Idea into the dreaded dungeons of the Seattle’s Angel’s complex. To his surprise, the place had been completely redecorated. To his horror, he instantly recognized the new motif.

    Detention?!” he cried. “I’ve never been in detention in my life!”

    He turned to glare at the slide he’d been just dropped down. Corejo stood above, looking imperious—or at least trying to, it was Corejo after all.

    “You can’t do this to me! I’ll do my freaky time magic thing again!”

    “School’s in session. All of it.” Corejo winked—he actually winked—and pulled a level straight out of the Acme Budget Villain Catalogue. The portal closed with a resounding snap.

    He grumbled to himself and stomped over to the desk with his name on it and plopped down.

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  • 19 weeks
    SA Reviews #125

    Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


    Corejo, as a Seattle’s Angel, had experienced many weird things during his tenure as a reviewer. Multiple base explosions, the fabric of spacetime ripping apart with seeming regularity, and the slightly disturbing obsession Red had for nuts.

    Even with all that, today was already vying for his top five list in terms of stuff he didn’t expect to be a part of when he woke up that morning.

    “Okay class!” Ferret announced from her position on top of a teacher’s desk. Before her, a room full of kids and a few adults sat at wooden desk, pencils and papers at the ready. “Today beings the first day of the School of Reviewers!”

    Corejo raised his hand.

    “Oh, and I see we already have a question. What is it?”

    “Yeah, uh, what is even the heck? Why do we have a reviewer school?”

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Feb
13th
2018

Story Reviews » SA Reviews #122 · 12:31am February 13th

Seattle's Angels is a group that promotes good stories with low views. You can find us here.


Paul paced about the thing laughably referred to as his office. He could get about four steps down before having to make a turn, and that’s assuming his line of motion was just right. He glanced at his clock, grumbled some phrase unfit for the world wide web, and continued his pacing.

“Hey, Paul!” The door swung open. Since this was the smallest office in the history of offices, that resulted in the door smacking Paul in the face. With a hand over his bleeding nose, he turned his glare upon the visitor, one Novel-Idea.

“You were supposed to be here hours ago.” Except it came out something like “Ou er spsed here hrgo” due to the current state of his nose.

Novel shrugged. “Blame T.O.M. We gonna do those reviews or what?”

Paul stared incredulously. “Ou evn’t dn urrs?”

“Not yet, nope.”

Paul looked to the clock, then back at Novel. There might have been tears in his eyes. “I ate tis jeeorb.”

ROUND 122


Hearts and Hooves Day was a whirlwind, especially for Cheerilee and Big Macintosh. They remained friends in wake of the fiasco that almost ended in hasty marriage, and Cheerilee never gave their friendship any further thought. They were just friends, nothing more.

However, when she learns of Big Mac and Marble Pie's fling over the Hearth's Warming holiday, Cheerilee begins to dwell upon her friendship with Big Mac. Could there have been something more to their relationship that she hadn't realized before?

After all, hindsight is 20/20.


Ah, love potions. How annoying they are, amiright? This story focuses on Cheerilee who, upon learning of Big Mac’s rumored crush on one Marble Pie, begins to feel the first hints of jealousy. The first thing I noticed about it is that it doesn’t dive directly into the problem. Hindsight gradually builds up the issue, starting out seemingly unrelated to the central point. Then, abruptly, you realize you’ve gone from glancing at the shore to being neck-deep in water. This is reflected in Cheerilee’s reaction to the situation wonderfully.

And that’s what I like the most about this story. It’s delightful interpretation of Cheerilee as she wades through her own feelings is quite the treat. At no point does the story hurry us into the solution or give obvious answers. Instead, Big Mac and Cheerilee struggle just to admit the problem exists, much less talk about it, and when they do talk about it it hardly rolls along with the smooth logic of your typical romance.

Combine this with some pleasant recurring elements of the narrative, such as Cheerilee’s regular internal arguments, her battle with the ever-present Chocolate Overload cake, and a few pointed criticisms of the show. The end result is a feel-good romance with great pacing and solid characterizations. Give it a read and add some warm fuzzies to your winter.

Considering how they’ve canonized Sugar Belle and Big Mac, this is an especially interesting story. A simple rumor makes Cheerilee start to wonder about her feelings regarding Big Mac after “the love poison” incident. What follows is a classic result of someone stuck in their own head as they fight against the need for closure versus the fear of confrontation.

The best aspect of this story is how it takes the love poison seriously. While it was mainly just a gag, the implications of them almost getting married are fully realized in this story. In fact, there’s a moment of horror when somepony implies just how far it could have gone.

This story handles what was essentially a Valentine’s Day gag and takes it seriously, something I definitely respect. It takes the time to explore a real dilemma for both Cheerilee and Big Mac, a dilemma that they may not be able to overcome.

Come in for something cute, stay for the deeper thoughts (and maybe a bit more cute).


Everypony on Rarity’s ship is in love with someone impossible. Some earn their fortune and go back to claim their love. Others find love along the way, or outgrow their crush and move on.

Rarity? She’s in love with the sky.


Rarity is desperately in love with a married stallion. Since he’s unavailable, her reaction is to…

...buy an airship and become a pirate? Excuse me while I “What?”

As silly as the premise sounds, Hap somehow manages to make it work. That alone should indicate how good the story is. Told half in flashbacks, Ship of Fools filled me with a steady, bittersweet sadness as we are shown Rarity’s growing infatuation with the perfect stallion she will never be able to attain. Flashbacks and I usually don’t see eye-to-eye, but every now and then we agree to tolerate one another. On very rare occasions, we even have cordial relations. This is one of those occasions.

My only regret with this story is that we never got to see the moment when Rarity snapped and decided that the pirate life was for her. That would have been an interesting scene. But ignoring that, I thoroughly enjoyed this one and I wish I could see more.

I’m a sucker for romances. I’m a sucker for airships. This one’s a no-brainer… but starts with the most bizarre concept ever. Rarity as a fashion pirate! She actually goes around, boards over airships, redoes the crew’s outfits and occasionally steals a crewmember or two for special training… and that’s it.

What on earth would possess Rarity to do something this insane?

One of the most poignant and powerful reasons around: to stop herself from falling to temptation. I won’t ruin what that temptation is. It was a slow reveal for me. But let’s say that Rarity’s concepts are honorable… if unique.

While the setting strange, the underlying concept beneath is resonates enormously. Because the truth of the matter is… we can’t always get what we want.

And when that happens, become a sky pirate.



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STORY 3
Edited Details, by ILurvTrixie

Daring Do is underway in another big tale! The legendary artifact is in her hooves, and her enemies are right on her tail!

But then everything changes. Things are wrong, but... in all the right ways?

What happens when an action hero finds a peaceful rest stop outside their story?


To be honest, this is not the kind of story I would normally recommend. But its weaknesses in writing it more than makes up for in plot. The story stars a ‘fake’ Daring Do who came into being when A.K. Yearling attempted, and failed, to nab an ancient tor artifact from a jungle temple (because where else are these things going to be?). From there we get a whirlwind romance between Daring and Fluttershy and a villain that gives even Discord pause.

What’s that? Boos for OP villains? Normally I’d kinda-sorta agree, except this villain’s OP is used effectively in my opinion, and it’s balanced out by some distinct character flaws. The result is a fun final conflict with some creative solutions.

The best part, though, is how self-aware this story is. It makes mistakes that, normally, I would consider critical blunders, only to immediately turn around and point out its own error. It even finds ways to expand upon this idea by pointing out the exact same errors in the events of the show from time to time. Villain appears and is defeated within the last fifth of the story? Yeah, we’ve seen that.

This story has enough smart to it to negate my displeasure with its many grammar-related mistakes. Provided you’re not allergic to such things, definitely give it some attention.

Stories about characters having to directly interact with the Narrative are pretty wild. It’s strange that it never occured to me to put Daring Do in that situation. I mean, who better? Especially when you have two of them.

Daring Do the Author vs. Daring Do the Adventurer. Personally, I like the Adventurer more. But maybe because I’m a shipper and we have some simply wonderful adorable romance in here. Not only that, but the author wrote every character down pretty much perfectly.

Discord’s the real standout for me. It’s rare to find an author who can pull of Discord just so, but this one does it with room to spare. Not only that, but the author nailed his interactions with character, including a fantastic rivalry with Angel.

If you want a fantastic mix of adorable cute fluffy romance, meta-narrative psychological concepts and an epic adventure (complete with Jumanji reference/borrow), stop what you’re doing and read this right now.


Things haven't been going well for little Snow Bolt. She's always in trouble at school, her father is always yelling at her, and the bullies at school pick on her relentlessly. But just when she thought things couldn't get any worse, she's kidnapped by a dragon, who plans to bake her into a pie. Can Snow Bolt escape from the monster's lair before it's too late?


My first thought upon seeing this story? “C’mon, guys, this thing alone is as long as my regular daily reading!” Then I reminded myself that my own suggestion was even longer and shut up. Then I started reading and… yeah, nevermind. It was worth the lost writing time.

One part cute, one part self-discovery, this is a wonderful story about a miserable filly finding her place in life with the help of a witty (and hungry) dragon and a squirrel. Does that sound strange? Good, because it is, and L3gion pulls it off fantastically. Snow Bolt’s daily efforts to learn to fly amidst the mountains in the dragon style is continuously endearing, combining subtle worldbuilding by way of pegasus flight theory through intuition. Add to that a charming filly who refuses to quit and a dragon that always knows exactly how to lighten the mood (at least for the reader), and you’ve got something really worthwhile.

I have no idea why Celestia had to make a cameo. Rather pointless, that.

But in the all, a great story with enough charm to keep things interesting from beginning to end. Read it, like it, love it.

Who doesn’t love a wonderfully sweet coming of age story? How do you top that classic formula? Simple! Add the fact that the main character, one insanely adorable Snow Bolt, is about to get eaten by a giant red dragon named Scarlet.

This story is cute and fun every step of the way, save for—of course—a rather tragic and painful start point. But, that’s another piece of the coming of age setup! But don’t worry, it gets better from there… even we have the imminent death of the main character hanging over our heads for the entire story.

Sadly, Snow Bolt can’t really fly. Scarlet finds this rather pitiful, so demands she work on it before dinner. And she does, through an ever-increasing (and ever-cuter) series of tests with a serious understanding of aerodynamics. The cumulation of these skills transform a pegasus who can’t fly into something truly spectacular (while still remaining mind-meltingly adorable).

Add a cute animal sidekick in the form of Cheeky the Squirrel (who’s rather cheeky, believe it or not), and you may need to consult a medical professional before diving in. And you’ve got an ending to make anyone cry. (Or maybe just me. It’s not hard to make me cry about stories with kids finding their way… and their parents). It’s fantastic and beautiful and everything this story needed.

Go get some cute!


Paul stared up at the hospital ceiling, his face covered in bandages. He was doing his absolute best not to glare at Novel, who was busy drawing Daring Do and Fluttershy cuddling on a napkin. “Dude, you really should be more careful. The office blows up once a month or something, you should expect the floors to cave in at the worst possible moment. It’s practically a tradition.”

This was met only by a long, silent glare. But then Paul sighed and shrugged. “At least we got the reviews done on time.”

“Oh, no, we gotta do them again.”

A blink. “Wut?”

“Black holes. Happens all the time. Ask Ferret about it.” He slapped Paul on the shoulder with a grin. “Welcome to the club, new guy.”

A twitch of the eyebrow was the only response.


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Comments ( 6 )
PresentPerfect
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Ah yes, How to Train Your Pegasus wasn't bad. :)

WHU :pinkiegasp: Never thought I'd hear from this story again, y'all are too kind. :twilightblush: PP gave it a "Conditional Recommend," if I remember right, which I thought was a lot more fair. :rainbowlaugh:

Hard to go wrong with airships …

*queues some stories up*

Hap

Awww, you guys. Thanks!

Wow, this was a surprise. Thanks for the review, guys!

4795836
Hey, I always remember good stories that have covers I took way too long to do! :)

4796068, 4796090
Both of you totally deserved it.

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