Hello, all. It's certainly been a while, and I have only myself to blame for that. I sincerely apologize, both for my absence and all the unfulfilled and unfinished projects I never fully delivered to you all. Nothing can ever make up for that, but I hope that you all will be forgiving nevertheless.
Dear FIMfictioneers, as any of you who enjoyed Obsolescence know, I've all but given up on fan fiction. However, if I were to write a work of original fiction with the same themes and ideas as Obsolescence, would anyone be interested in reading it? If so, would you be interested enough to pay a small fee per chapter (keep in mind, any chapters would be 30+ pages, single-spaced, in
I've come to the conclusion that what is perhaps the most vocal demographic of the fimfiction community is incredibly annoying and unhelpful. Some people will either like or dislike your ideas and say so. This is useful because it tells you something about your story, whether that's positive or negative. Even more useful is when people give an explanation as to why, such as stating their
4777789 I’m not going to try and derail anything that you might have planned for the future, so as long as it keeps its neat cyberpunk atmosphere I’ll be just fine with wherever you choose to take it, as long as it is taken somewhere.
From what I can tell, you've got a cool sci-fi cyberpunk world and a serious plot hook that is begging for some development and maybe a twist. Based on your writing so far, pretty much any direction - dark, comedic, tragic, psychological - could be made to work, but a straight up adventure is what I was expecting. Whatever gets written, it's probably going into my faves.
Another chapter would be great. I can't seem to find any Shadowrun cross-overs on here and Obsolescence is about as close as it gets. If it keeps going the general relativistic direction it was going, then I am 120% all over this. Also. Super-hype over cyberpunk 2077. Soon™
Ponies dealing with life in a dystopia, more Neverwas and slowly uncovering the past.
Seeing as there isn't terribly much of the story, you might modyfy it with a semi-rewrite. Treat it as a game adaptation like Fallout Equestria did - end evry chapter with a neat description of a new skill. With the new edition of Cyberpunk rules as well as Cyberpunk 2077 in the works you can get a lot of traction if you get some words going and have groups look at your project.
I did have something in mind for a more manageable, shorter rewrite that I hope I could actually finish this time. Third time's the charm, maybe? If I did do that, you'd all read it? Same setting, same attention to detail, same basic ideas, but a less sprawling plot.
4943364 To be honest your story already was pretty thin for what I used to read. And more sprawling is good because there are people reading this type of content: If it's detailed dystopia, you just keep writing and you advertize it around Fallout Equestria groups. I mean I could do it for you. Maybe the sprawling part is you branching too early before establishing Neverwas as a character with less questions and more motivation when becoming a shadowrunner.
You need motivation in form of people to actually read it and input. Through my years as commenatator here I saw nobodies rise to greatness. But you have far too good of an idea, far too good artwork and far too good hype of Cyberpunk brewing up. I mean I could give you some of my ideas to maybe re-sparkle your inspiration or become an editor.
Another chapter.
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You raise a fair and valid point. So you're interested in the story going along the route it's currently travelling?
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To you I answer: Do birds fly south for the Winter?
A neato cyberpunk adventure, so I'm not opposed to its current trajectory.
4777789
I’m not going to try and derail anything that you might have planned for the future, so as long as it keeps its neat cyberpunk atmosphere I’ll be just fine with wherever you choose to take it, as long as it is taken somewhere.
The little green box at the bottom of the story page that says "complete," at the satisfying and natural conclusion to the story.
From what I can tell, you've got a cool sci-fi cyberpunk world and a serious plot hook that is begging for some development and maybe a twist. Based on your writing so far, pretty much any direction - dark, comedic, tragic, psychological - could be made to work, but a straight up adventure is what I was expecting. Whatever gets written, it's probably going into my faves.
I have yet to read the rewrite, unfortunately, that backlog.
I'm gonna agree with
4777782
Another chapter would be great. I can't seem to find any Shadowrun cross-overs on here and Obsolescence is about as close as it gets. If it keeps going the general relativistic direction it was going, then I am 120% all over this.
Also. Super-hype over cyberpunk 2077. Soon™
Magic, science, mystery, danger, conspiracy, adventure, cyberpunk, lore...
...another chapter.
For more chapters.
Ponies dealing with life in a dystopia, more Neverwas and slowly uncovering the past.
Seeing as there isn't terribly much of the story, you might modyfy it with a semi-rewrite. Treat it as a game adaptation like Fallout Equestria did - end evry chapter with a neat description of a new skill. With the new edition of Cyberpunk rules as well as Cyberpunk 2077 in the works you can get a lot of traction if you get some words going and have groups look at your project.
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I did have something in mind for a more manageable, shorter rewrite that I hope I could actually finish this time. Third time's the charm, maybe? If I did do that, you'd all read it? Same setting, same attention to detail, same basic ideas, but a less sprawling plot.
4943364
To be honest your story already was pretty thin for what I used to read. And more sprawling is good because there are people reading this type of content: If it's detailed dystopia, you just keep writing and you advertize it around Fallout Equestria groups. I mean I could do it for you. Maybe the sprawling part is you branching too early before establishing Neverwas as a character with less questions and more motivation when becoming a shadowrunner.
You need motivation in form of people to actually read it and input. Through my years as commenatator here I saw nobodies rise to greatness. But you have far too good of an idea, far too good artwork and far too good hype of Cyberpunk brewing up. I mean I could give you some of my ideas to maybe re-sparkle your inspiration or become an editor.
Progress.
WaKe up for your time is now. We can't loose hope.
An update.