Snowed in, but that's good for some things... · 6:38pm Jan 18th, 2018
Like updating Turnabout Storm. The prelude plus first five chapters have been redone and reposted. Updates include a careful editing pass, lot of dialogue additions and changes (honestly, the first video part’s dialogue was a bit stilted in places), fleshing out and adding additional details and graphics, and toning down the early shipping. I also added some things to make the story mesh a bit better with what I’ve got for Phoenix in TLaTU.
You’re invited to check out the revamped chapters, and I do invite comments as I’d like to know what readers think of them. With the help of my prereading team of AJ_Aficionado, SIlentwoodfire, Leo Archon and TheGoldCrow, I plan to update at least a few chapters of the story a week. And as an added bonus, I think I know what I can do for a new bonus chapter to be released in April. TheGoldCrow gave me a good idea for something that could be written. More on that as the time approaches... in the meantime, enjoy the redone initial chapters!
