Nov
5th
2017
Some Would Say I'm The Reverse: A Minor Setback · 1:38pm Nov 5th, 2017
Greetings Gotham, Joker here! Well, the like-to-dislike ratio on Some Would Say I'm The Reverse is a little... disappointing. But, the likes still outweigh the dislikes, if only marginally, so I say full steam ahead on this baby! Plus, I'm 99% sure that I know exactly who the mass comment downvoter is, and quite possibly the guy who dragged my work through the mud is. It seems an old foe of mine has chosen to come out and muck in my mud again. Not that it matters, not now when I'm so close to getting my best friend back. He can't hurt me anymore.
If you haven't read Some Would Say I'm The Reverse yet, then I suggest you get on that right away.
Let's face facts here... It doesn't matter how good/bad your story actually is. Some people have taken to downvoting your stories because they're your stories.
It's a shitty move, but that's how it is. I don't even downvote the comments of someone like Hamster_Master without reading them first, but others might.
Edit: Holy $#!+, I just noticed it but... They finally banned him! The Troll. Is. GOOOOONE!!!
~Ding dong, the troll is banned. The shitty troll, the douchy troll. Ding dong, the wicked troll is banned!~
Okay, here to balance the "you're perfect and the downvotes are all haters" comment. Let me give you some less sugarcoated feedback.
The concept of the story is perfectly good. When it comes to crossovers, one big problem is how the encounter happens, and using the canon of one of the parts to do so comes out as organic and consistent. The main general problem is the execution.
The first problem with the story is that the first 900 words, almost a third of the entire chapter, are exposition. Another present problem is that it doesn't have a progression when it comes to presenting its elements. All is handled down in the aforementioned exposition, and then things just happen without a flow of action-consequence. This also extends to descriptions, which instead of being cinematic or narrative, are way more technical and cold. This stops the narrative, and the story itself, in order to draw a picture that won't have a bigger influence in the story.
The other big problem is the characterizations. Although it's too early to say how will all be handled out, they are already inconsistent. For example, Daniel starts off as just trying to understand his situation, but then suddenly comes as aggressive and attacks others instead of defusing the situation. Same goes for Twilight and the other M!Six, who swing between reasonable and friendly to needlessly confrontational. This is what one could call a conflict ball, which is making a conflict happen without a proper set up.
All in all, the main problem here is focus, as the pacing doesn't have a rhythm, and most of the information is given in exposition instead of narration. The later doesn't have a structure either, which makes it feel disconnected with the story, making it harder for the reader to really immerse inside it.
I'd recommend you to study how the three acts structure works, as it would help you with your pacing problems. For the focus, try to pick a main character and an antagonist, and once you have those two fully developed, move on with the supporting cast. The characterizations also need work, and the only good source is the official, so try to watch/read some material that focuses on the characters you previously selected as the main focus. Finally, I'd tell you to give the first act of "Rorschach in Equestria" a read. It which follows a similar initial premise, so it could give you a base over to which you can work up.
Good luck.
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*raises eyebrow* Dude, I haven't even read the fic yet, so how would I know if it's perfect or not? Note that I said "Let's face facts here... It doesn't matter how good/bad your story actually is." as the very first sentence. I never said that he was perfect, I've never implied that his stories were perfect, I never said that all of the downvotes were unjustified. All I said was that there are those who see "The Sinestro Joker" and immediately hit the thumbs down icon without even opening the first chapter.
My comment was less "you're perfect and the downvotes are all haters" and more "don't let the like/dislike ratio get you down".
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As corner, I must infer, I checked out his profile, and he is not only merely banned, he's really, most sincerely banned!
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Then this is a day of Independence for all fic writers and their dependents!
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Yeah, you're taking too personally something that isn't about you. Sorry if you felt offended, didn't mean to.
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I have no doubt that you intended no offense. To be honest, I didn't take any offense with your comment itself. Heck, I actually agree with a lot of what you said! What I do take offense with is people putting words in my mouth and/or taking my words out of context.
Your opening statement was basically accusing me of being a yes-man, stroking Joker's ego and telling him he was a special little snowflake, all while sugarcoating the facts.
The comment was actually more along the lines of me saying "your stories will always have downvotes. Some deserved, some not. It's inevitable, so you'd best learn to deal with it". The only sugarcoating was me wording it so that I wouldn't come off as some kind of callous asshole.