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Blobskin


Writer of gentle Macro/Micro P0rn and occasional adventure. I do not take Requests.

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  • 89 weeks
    Story Refresher - 7 Days of Macro Dreams

    It's been a while since I last worked on this story and probably since you read it. So here are some refreshers. SPOILER WARNINGS if you haven't read these chapters.

    Chapter 1: clean

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    3 comments · 439 views
  • 91 weeks
    The Future to Come

    The Short:

    1) I will fulfill all promised requests, but will not take anymore.
    2) I don't watch the show anymore. It's stupid now.
    3) I write gentle Macro/Micro stories. That is who I am. That is what you can expect from me.
    4) Thank you everyone who ever liked, favorited, or watched.



    The Long:

    1)

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    2 comments · 300 views
  • 136 weeks
    A Weak Sauce Phrase Everyone Should Avoid

    He looked around.

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  • 136 weeks
    2 Questions for Everyone

    May I be so bold as to ask everyone to help me with this mystery and answer 2 very simple questions:

    https://www.murvey.com/s?59e8936a3ea7b1e604c34aee

    Thank you a million times over.

    1 comments · 282 views
  • 156 weeks
    Stupid Surprises

    You know what the best part about going back and editing old work is? Rediscovering easter eggs!

    Like, take ch 3 of "7 Days of Macro Dreams". There's a part where Luna mentions a red wine called: Eniw Der Paeh. When editing it I was like, "what is that?" Plug it into Google translate and it spits out nothing. I was stumped. Even I didn't know where this name came from!

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Oct
22nd
2017

A Weak Sauce Phrase Everyone Should Avoid · 5:22pm Oct 22nd, 2017

He looked around.

I want to help others improve their writing as much as I want to get better myself. So today I'm going to give all you new writers out there a word of advice. To improve your own work, you need to be reading. Get out there and read anything and everything. And while you're at it, be on the look out for phrases that irritate you. Then make a mental note of them and avoid them in your own work.

Like, whenever I see "He looked around" I roll my eyes. It is a weak phrase. It is a boring phrase. And I'm seeing it more and more often.

Tip of the Day: Do not use "He looked around." It is an easily improved phrase. You should use stronger words and combine it with the sentence(s) that come immediately after. Try building a sentence that actually conveys meaning to the reader or communicates something about the way "he" looked around.

Just look at some of these simple examples. They suggest a lot more to the reader, don't they?

His eyes were repulsed by the layers of dust that covered everything in the room.

She glanced about the space as though searching for clues.

He regarded the chaotic mess unfolding around him with amusement.

Her head darted back and forth as she carefully analyzed her surroundings.

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