May the muffins be forever in your favour."Journeys and Destinations: A Friendship for Eternity": Revision Progress Report 3 · 5:51pm Sep 26th, 2017
Now that I am back to writing in full swing, these reports about my revision of the first two chapters of "Journeys and Destinations: A Friendship for Eternity", preceding the guaranteed continuation of it, will return, too!
I'm not wasting more time, have another progress report about the Great 2017 Revision of "Journeys and Destinations: A Friendship for Eternity", below the picture!
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Before:
“That's right, but do ya think we could still see us as often as now once we have our cutie marks?”
Scootaloo stared blankly at her.
“I know what Apple Bloom means,” Sweetie Belle took the word. “It looks like we all have different talents. If Apple Bloom gets her cutie mark in potion mixing, if you get your cutie mark in building vehicles and if I get my cutie mark in magic we would work in different places once we get them. We couldn't be together all the time anymore then! But if we do what Apple Bloom suggested we could still use our talents, get our cutie marks and stay together for all time!”
Scootaloo looked at the ground. “I know.” Her voice sounded weaker now. “I already thought about that. But if we do that, we will probably be away from Ponyville for a very long time. Maybe even years. I couldn't see Rainbow Dash anymore then.....”
Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle looked down too now. “Ah would also miss mah sister. An' Big McIntosh an' Granny Smith too.”
“And I would miss Rarity and my parents.....”
“I don't think I can do that,” Scootaloo said after some silent moments. “I could never leave Rainbow Dash.”
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After:
“That's right, but do ya really think we could still see us as often as we do now once we have our cutie marks?”
Scootaloo stared at her blankly.
“I know what Apple Bloom means,” Sweetie Belle took the floor. “It looks like we all have different talents. If Apple Bloom gets her cutie mark for potion mixing, you get your cutie mark for vehicle building and I get my cutie mark for magic, we would work in different places after we got them. We couldn't be together as much anymore then.” Sweetie Belle's face turned into a worried frown. “But if we do what Apple Bloom suggested, we could use our talents, get our cutie marks and still stay together all the time.”
Scootaloo cast her eyes on the floor. “I know.” Her voice sounded weaker now. “I already thought about this. But if we do this, we will be away from Ponyville for a very long time. Maybe even years. Then I couldn't see Rainbow Dash anymore.....”
Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle looked down, too, now.
“Ah would also miss mah sister. An' Big McIntosh an' Granny Smith.”
“And I would miss Rarity and my parents.....”
The three fillies lapsed into silence.
Minutes later, Scootaloo interrupted it. “I don't think I can do that,” she let her friends know the outcome of her contemplation. “I could never leave Rainbow Dash.” Her head dropped slightly.
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Keep in mind that this revision is currently happening offline, which means the chapters you find here on FIMFiction.net still contain the old, unrevised versions.
I will replace them one after another once the revision of both chapters is finished. Until then, feel free to compare the revised part shown in this blog entry with the unrevised part in Chapter 1 for the improvements made!
The revision will happen at a faster pace now, as I have begun to dedicate four days of the week to it now. By current estimation, this means the revision will probably be finished early to mid-November.
If you want to read all the revision reports for "Journeys and Destinations: A Friendship for Eternity" at once, there is a tag for this now! Just click on "Journeys and Destinations: The Great 2017 Revision" in the tag list below to see all of them!
And that's it for today. See you soon with another progress report on Friday!
Nice picture and good luck with the progress!
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Thanks a lot! It's going much smoother now than some months ago, soon this baby will be ready for continuation!
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You're welcome!