Updated IWAM 1;Chapter 1 · 3:01pm Aug 28th, 2017
Here is the updated version of the first chapter of IWAM 1. Please tell anything I should fix or add.
It was a calm and quiet evening down in Ponyville, the moon was full, the bright stars filled the clear night sky. Everypony was fast asleep, except for a certain yellow pegasus and a mischievous draconequus. Discord was walking Fluttershy home from having an evening tea party. Discord had decided on having a tea party at night, so he and Fluttershy could see the twinkling stars and the shimmering moon as they sat on top a small hill.
"Thank you, Discord, for the picnic," Fluttershy said happily. "It was wonderful!"
The draconequss grinned. "But of course, dearest Fluttershy! Anything for you, I'm glad that you enjoyed."
Discord smiled to himself as he was walking Fluttershy back home. The draconequss could've just teleported themselves back to the cottage, but instead of taking the quick route, he wanted to enjoy this moment as long as he could. He looked down on Fluttershy and sighed happily.
It was nice seeing her so happy during that picnic, the draconequus thought. It was a good idea actually listening to Cadence for once, instead of doing it my own way and making it all...weird, Discord shook his head violently, shaking the thought away. No, no! Don't think that, Discord, don't think of last week, and how you embarrassed yourself in front of...
"Discord?" a soft voice said, waking him from his thoughts.
The draconequss froze and looked down at the yellow pegasus. She was staring at him, her face full of worry.
"Is something wrong?"
Discord blinked for moment, then shook his head panickly. "W...Who me? Oh, nothing is wrong, my dear...I'm just...I'm just a bit tired! Yeah, I'm tired, that's all."
Fluttershy cocked an eyebrow. "Oh, okay..." she was silent for a moment. "You can teleport me back home instead, if you're tired. I don't wanna keep you awake."
"Oh, no, no!" Discord uttered, waving up his paw frantically. "I'm fine with walking."
Fluttershy was quiet for moment. "Well, as long as you're okay," she smiled. "Let's get going."
The rest of the walk was silent as Fluttershy and Discord reached Fluttershy's cottage. They got to the cottage door, Discord, using his magic to unlock the door, opened the door for Fluttershy.
He bowed his head as he gestured her inside. "Mares first."
"Thank you, Discord." She smiled at the sight of him being a gentlepony and felt her cheeks turn crimson.
Fluttershy entered her cottage and said her goodnight to Discord, after the draconequss said his goodbyes, and left for his castle in the sky, Fluttershy felt a strange ache in her chest. She frowned as closed the door, she wanted Discord to stay, but she didn't tell him because she knew he had to leave, and he himself said, he was tired.
Fluttershy went to her room to think why she felt to so sad and wondering why her chest was hurting. As she got into bed, she accidentally knocked over a small picture frame.
Picking it up, she noticed it was a picture of her and the draconequss. They were sitting in a grassy plain after one of their picnics, Fluttershy was sitting under the sun, and Discord was sitting next to her, braiding pink and purple flowers in her pink mane with a goofy grin imprinted on his face.
Fluttershy smiled dreamily at the picture and felt her cheeks getting red as an apple again, and her heart started to pound fast. Her pupils dilated as a thought popped into her head.
"Do...I...I have feelings for Discord?"
Fluttershy paced back and forth endlessly, thinking about the times her and Discord had spent together. About how he was always so kind and gentle around her, and yet acting so different around her friends, especially when she went on a trip to see the Breezies. About the time when he was supposed to be capturing Tirek, and he came to talk to them about the chest. When he appeared, she always smiled up at him, she always laughed at his antics, and even when everyone was doubting him about capturing Tirek, she told them to trust him. But when she found out he betrayed them, it broke her heart, but forgave him for his mistakes so easily after Tirek was defeated.
"Maybe it was because he was my friend, and I had to give him a second chance," she muttered to herself. "maybe I felt bad for him, because he was betrayed as well, maybe...maybe," she paused, and glanced back at the small picture frame on her bedside table. "Maybe it was because I cared too much for him to ever stay mad at him."
The yellow pegasus grunted in frustration to herself, confused on how her best draconequss friend turned into a sudden admirer. She decided to wait until morning to figure out everything, she slid into bed and closed her eyes. I wonder if Discord like likes me too?
Her thoughts soon followed into her dreams as she found herself in the middle of a flowery meadow with the very draconequss that plagued her thoughts, sitting right next to her. They were at a picnic, but something felt a little...off about it, Fluttershy couldn't put her hoof on it.
Perhaps it was because of all of Fluttershy's favorite animals were there, surrounding them in a circle, looking innocently at her. Maybe it was because the draconequss himself looked different, he looked more...handsome, his mane was brushed perfectly, and even flowing strangely, even through there was no wind that Fluttershy could feel.
"Fluttershy..." he said in a hypnotic voice.
Fluttershy yelped from his sudden voice. "Y-Y-Yes," she squeaked. "Yes, Discord?"
The handsome draconequss started twiddling his fingers, and looked down at red and pink checkered picnic blanket with a twinge of doubt in his eyes. "Fluttershy, I've been wondering about this for a while now...do...do you have a crush on me?"
The confused pegasus jumped in surprise. "Wait, what!?" she yelled in surprise. "I-I-I mean, what makes you say that?"
Discord smirked. "Well, for one thing, you're as red as a tomato right now," he explained. "and you're always happy when you see me, you laugh at my antics, and your my first friend," he patted her head softly, and smiled. "But please, don't change the subject. Answer me this, do you have feelings for me?" he questioned, sounding honest yet desperate. "Because I think you have one on me as well as I have one on you."
Fluttershy was silent for a moment. "Wait, you have a crush on me?" she frowned, cocking her head. "But I'm not even pretty and even that interesting."
The draconequss gasped dramatically. "Oh, sure you are, Fluttershy! Don't be so modest, my dear. But still, answer my question...please."
Fluttershy gulped as she started darting her eyes to a possible escape route, but only kept meeting the innocent eyes of the small critters, their faces etched with eagerness as if they too were waiting for her answer.
"Fluttershy, please answer me." The draconequss asked once more.
Fluttershy bit her lip as she felt the cool drips of sweat slide down her face and off her checks. The faces still looking at her with now disappointment in their eyes. Fluttershy felt the eyes closing in on her, staring down at her, she started trembling in fear.
With her lip quivering in fear, she tried to say something but she was at a loss of words. She only managed to stammer, incoherent words, "B-b-but I-I do I m-mean I-I d-d...uh..."
The pegasus became quiet, and slowly looked up at the waiting draconequss. The once eagerness that had laid on Discord's excited face now faded into a disappointed frown; his ears drooped, he hung his head in shame, and his uneven eyes stared at her with sorrow in them. He snapped his fingers, and the innocent critters disappeared in a flash of bright light.
The draconequss sighed heavily as he turned his face towards the empty meadow. "I guess it's a 'no' then..."
Regret soon washed over the timid mare as she stared sadly at the lonely draconequss. Reaching out her hoof, she placed it on his shoulder.
"Oh, Discord. I didn't mean to hurt-" she started to say before the draconequss swatted her hoof away.
"I'm sorry." he said without facing the pegasus.
Without warning, Discord disappeared in flash of light, leaving Fluttershy all alone.
As the lonely pegasus looked frantically for the missing draconequss, the meadow started to fade away. The pegasus cried out in horror as she soon felt herself fall into an empty, dark abyss, her wings felt heavy as rock as she tried to fly up, tears filled her eyes as she got pulled down into the dark, empty empty.
"Discord, come back!" Fluttershy cried out. "Help me!"
Her unreciprocated cries for help only became distant echoes in the darkness.
Fluttershy sat up in bed with a loud gasp. Angel Bunny was next to her, rubbing his soft paws against her, he squeaked in delight once he saw his owner was awake.
"Oh, Angel!" Fluttershy bawled as she lifted the bunny to her face and nuzzled his soft white fur. "It's so good to see you!" Fluttershy sighed in relief. "Thank goodness, it just a bad dream. It felt so real!"
The bunny squeaked at her, as if to say; What was the dream about?
Fluttershy looked down at the floor nervously. "Well...it involved Discord."
The rabbit glared at her.
"I know, I know," she said firmly. "you don't like him. But I promise he didn't do anything bad to me."
Angel sqeaked in response to her; Then what happened?
The pegasus bit her lip nervously. "Look, I'll tell you later. But, just to let you know..." Fluttershy closed her eyes, bracing herself. "I may or may not have a crush on...Discord."
She slowly opened her eyes to see Angel's jaw dropped. The rabbit stomped his white paw in response.
"I know what you're thinking, and I can assure you, he did not put me under some spell. He's my friend, he wouldn't do that."
He crossed his paws and stuck out his tongue.
"Don't do that, Angel," she said softly, taking him up in her hooves. "Discord's good, and he's been always helping us," she patted his head softly. "Look, after we feed the animals, we can talk about this."
As Fluttershy slid out of bed, she heard a knock at the door. Answering the door, Fluttershy met her multi-colored maned friend, Rainbow Dash, looking tired and frustrated and she had blue cotton candy in her hair.
"Good morning, Rainbow Dash," Fluttershy said nervously. "What happened to you?"
"Mornin, Flutters." The blue pegasus said quickly, groaning in frustration. "Look, Twilight and the others are in the Friendship castle, and we need you right away! And it's urgent!"
Fluttershy frowned in confusion. "What is it? What happened?
"What happened?" Rainbow Dash said, cocking an eyebrow. "Haven't you looked outside? There's blue cotton candy clouds that's raining root beer, and other chaotic things are happening all over town!"
Fluttershy froze in place. "Y-You don't think, it's Discord's doing, do you?"
"Of course, I think it's Discord!" Rainbow Dash snapped. "Who else would chaos? Princess Luna?"
The yellow pegasus shook her head. "No, no, it couldn't be Discord. He's fully reformed now, isn't he?"
"It doesn't seem like that way to me! Now c'mon, Flutters, let's go!"
"Okay, I'm coming, let me just feed the animals first," she said, before a flash of light covered the animals. Soon the animals gained large heads in unequal proportions to the their small bodies. "Or they can wait, until after we come back."
As Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash stepped outside, the yellow pegasus gasped in horror as she saw the chaos that was surrounding them; winged cows, donkeys climbing up trees, ballet-dancing lions, and the strange blue cotton candy clouds that rained root beer.
"This isn't like Discord," Fluttershy said, rubbing. Her head in confusion. "He wouldn't just start causing chaos like this, and I mean look at this chaos, Discord's cotton candy clouds are pink not blue."
"Maybe, he's trying to make it different, Fluttershy. Let's just get to the castle before it starts raining larks again."
"Okay," the pegasus was silent for moment, then her eyes widened in surprise. "Wait, raining larks?!"
"That's Discord for ya."
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